Thread: [WIP] Dantooine Tension
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Old 08-05-2011, 01:57 AM   #107
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Looks great, though as a DLG editor of sorts, I must point out a few thing:
1: The line should read " They'll be here in bulks soon" not "in bulk".
2: The line "what the hell are you doing Twi'lek" should have a comma before the word "twi'lek. Same for "Kresh what are you doing?" There should be a comma after Kresh.
3:the line "You set off the alaram!?!" should be "You set off the alarm!?".

You're welcome for the little bit of dialogue I editted-in a way.

Other than those grammatical errors everything looks great.

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