Join Date: Jun 2010
Current Game: Revenge of Revan
I have some feedback and a couple of suggestions:
The Jedi Temple:
First off, the force fields, they don't fit the corridor and they need wall panels, because right now it looks like the people are just typing on a purple energy field, and that's just a little weird.
Second, the Jedi within it, with the exception of Quan, Liana, and Kyle, most Jedi are generic, bland, wearing nothing but standard Jedi robes. I took a look through some of the custom robes you made for the mod, and I think that some of the Jedi should wear them, to give each one a kind of unique feel.
Third, the scene with Moza, the assassin and Kyle Suutrar needs to be re-written, it makes little sense. And I would find another head for the assassin because he looks the same as several other actual republic soldiers. Kyle's line that starts with "...out here in the outer rim..." makes no sense either. They are on Coruscant, right? That's like THE Core world, about as far away as one can get from the outer rim, without being sucked into a black hole.
Fourth, there is the aspect of time that I felt was just a little off. When the Rodian Jedi Master spoke, he said "Earlier this morning, Tyrena Station was attacked...", how can something that happened early in the morning, Galactic Standard Time, already be on the Senate's plate within a matter of hours? And while we're at it, how can the endlessly debating Senate have already agreed to send a Jedi to investigate? The small powwow at the beginning does not account for anyone other than the two senators, a military leader, and the Supreme Chancellor. Hardly a cabinet.
First, I once again hold up the issue of time. How can a memorial have been conceived, funded, made, and erected within hours? That's a little mind-boggling.
Second, the issue with names. Personally I love the fact that you went out of your way to name NPCs, it gives the environment a more personal feel. But some names don't match up. Take for instance the father and son. The father calls his son "Brendan" when the tag over the boys head labels him as "Alen".
Third, I'm just assuming the hotel will be included in the full game, right? Because without it, the sidequest with the Rodian who owes the Hutts money cannot be completed, as I've looked at YouTube and I know the Hutt he wants you to talk to is in the hotel you're not allowed to enter.
Fourth, the Corellian who greets you right as you get off your shuttle's VO is barely audible, I can tell there is a VO, but he's drowned out by the music.
Fifth, it would be nice if the blade you receive with Uldir was not a generic prop and was some other game placeable that has a name.
The Correllian Jungle:
First, a question, what are the kolto tanks for? It was explicitly stated that no one survived, so that rules out that possibility.
Second, the Beast Rider, is that going to amount to anything other than foreshadowing for the dark temple scene?
Third, the conversation between Drayen and Bao-Dur doesn't make sense. Quan's question of "Why now?" is answered with "True, but the republic can't wait for it to strike again." Some re-phrasing should be in order.
Fourth, when Quan battles the Sith, why does he automatically revert to his default clothing and lightsaber, that was a little jarring.
The Republic Starship:
First, why am I still carrying the lightsaber I supposedly gave to Kyle when I talk to the ghost of Drayen? Let alone still wearing the same robes?
Second, was there a scene I missed, where we all got thrown in separate holding cells, because there is no explanation for why I'm alone in the cell one minute, and then in a different cell with Uldir, Kaila, and Nindo the next.
Third, some rephrasing of the LS option of what to do about the Republic Soldiers is required, I think. "Remember any blasters you pick up"? What does that mean?
There might be a ton of criticism in those spoilers, but I really did LOVE the game! It was really clear the amount of time and effort you put into the mod, and it was really awesome.
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Last edited by Anakin_Xisali; 09-05-2011 at 10:21 AM.