07-06-2012, 01:26 AM
Join Date: Jun 2011
Originally Posted by Trex
Average word count : 79.17
The crawls also follow a notable pattern based on their paragraphs :
Paragraph 1 : Always describes the state of the galaxy/society (there is war, there is a rebellion, there are seperatists etc).
Paragraph 2 : Explains how the current plot was instigated, usually via something that has just happened prior to the film (Leia stole the plans, Grevious invaded Coruscant etc).
Paragraph 3 : Set up the first scenes we see in the film (Vader is dispatching probes, two Jedi are trying to rescue the Chancellor etc).
- My original crawl in 1.0 : 111 words !
- My working progress crawl posted above : 132 words !
- CptPriceless' above : 93 words
The Republic is broken. Following the attack of Darth Nihilus, many people have seceded from the government altogether, turning to droids, crime lords and assassins for leadership.
The Jedi now outlawed, a lone scientist searches for their legendary general, Revan, who’s return could restore the order.
Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest will ever created by the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy what the power of the dark side truly is...
Wordcount : 79
It also fits the three paragraph structure.
I would say don't limit yourself to the average. However, it does look like it's enough. All that matters now is wording. Let's see what we can do.
The Republic is broken. Following the aggressions of the Sith Triumvirate, many officials have seceded from the government, turning to droids, crime lords, assassins and other such means for leadership.
The once revered Jedi, now outlawed, are powerless to assist. A lone scientist searches for legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore order to the galaxy.
Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest power of the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy of the true power of the Dark Side...
Last edited by CptPriceless; 07-06-2012 at 02:03 AM.
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