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Old 08-16-2013, 03:33 PM   #415
Zhaboka
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Originally Posted by redrob41 View Post
Thanks Zhaboka. I, too, like to ensure good grammar, but lack the expertise to know ALL the rules.

So, grammar man , what's your take on these saber descriptions:
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Juhani's own custom built double-bladed lightsaber.The hilt features classic Cathar styling with smooth curves and elegant detailed features. Juhani has added extra 'punch' to the blade. As always the blade is a reflection of the one who wields it; Elegant but fierce.
Well... since you asked... "custom built" should be "custom-built", there should be a comma after "As always", it should be a colon after "wields it" instead of a semi-colon, and "elegant" should be lower-case instead of upper-case.

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Juhani's own custom built double-bladed lightsaber. The hilt features classic Cathar styling with smooth curves and elegant detailed features. Juhani has added extra 'punch' to the blade. As always the blade is a reflection of the one who wields it; Violent, sharp wrath.
All the same changes for this one, except "violent" should be lower-case instead of "elegant", obviously.

Sorry it took me so long to respond. I'm loving the dark skin!



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