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Old 10-02-2002, 08:14 PM   #77
Thew Rydur
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Its ok but it could be better. First off I don't think Womp rats live on Naboo, not that thats really important. The timing seems a bit messed up with a Jedi Master just walking around then heading straight into the death star. I don't think Vader would go strolling around Mos Eisley either. Ethan Johnson isn't the most Star Wars like name, something like Etan Jonsn, or Ehan Johson might sound a bit better. But it is your background so you can do what you like.

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