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Old 03-30-2004, 08:38 AM   #41
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Episode 18: Qollous Unleashed

The band of 9 remaining Jedi jumped out of hyperspace and soon entered the urban planet of Coruscant. High atop the tallest tower on Coruscant, the Hologra Tower, Darth Qollous stood, surveying the urban landscape. It was late evening, the sun was setting faster than normal.
Stingers patrolled everywhere. There was very little traffic, only the daring were driving their speeders. The buildings were marked with black decals showing where, which and how the speeder or ship was crashed. In the sky, nine TiEs approached the planet, unwary of the deadly Sith Lord on the highest tower.

A few seconds later, Mordale, Luke and Kyle were spotted Qollous on the Hologra Tower. In a second, Mordale shouted commands on his comlink. "All Jedi, continue plans. I, Kyle, Luke and Grad will deal with Jaden first. May the force be with you". The TiEs parted, four going in Jaden's direction and five going the other way round.
Jaden grinned as the four TiEs landed, surrounding him on the high platform roof of the Tower. The Jedi got out, standing in a Normal Stance.
"Ready for more?"
None of the Jedi replied.
Jaden grabbed his X-Saber and held it in front of him, unignited.
"Jaden, give up the Empire" started Kyle.
"Why? I have benefitted so much from the empire which I would have never acquired had I stayed in the academy".
"What will you get, Jaden? Power? Strength? The Empire is your way to doom".
"Not mine, It's yours". Jaden ignited his saber and jumped over to Kyle, the X-Saber in front of him. Kyle vaguely defended with his saber. The two engaged in a tough saber-lock where Qollous was winning. If Kyle lost the lock, he would fall from the highest tower on Coruscant.
Qollous leaned over Kyle, unleashing his power, slowly.
Grad Yun'huk, another human Jedi attacked Jaden with his purple and blue sabers. In a split-second, Jaden cut the saber-lock and insrted two of his blades deep into Grad's abdomen, slaughtering him.
Luke and Mordale attacked Jaden, only to be thrown back. Once again, everybody were put in the same postion, with one Jedi less.

Kyle stepped forward to Qollous and stood only three feet away from him.
"Jaden, you must..."
Qollous grabbed him with Force Choke and swiftly moved his hand to the right. Kyle, who was caught by surprise, choked and plummetted to the ground at a high speed.

"Two down, two to go" said Jaden as he stepped forward, facing the last two Jedi.
"That's it!" losing his patience, Jaden's brother struck the X-Saber. The two engaged in a short duel which ended as Qollous used heavy force lightning on Mordale. Over that, Mordale's armour was metal, increasing the effect.
"Three down, one to go". With that, Qollous jumped for Luke. Luke dodged in answer. Qollous stopped midway and directly attacked Luke who started a duel with Qollous. After a long duel, Qollous choked Luke. Luke broke away from the hold and took a second to rebreathe. In this precious second, Jaden struck Luke with lightning and when Luke was weak, pushed him off the tower.

Then he turned to his brother.

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"This won't be the last time, bro".

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Old 04-01-2004, 06:14 AM   #42
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Episode 19: Brother vs. Brother

The two stared at each other. Mordale Korr, wearing his Mandalorian armour. Jaden Korr, or Darth Qollous gripping his X-Saber.

Mordale ignited his one blade of his lightsaber.
Qollous smiled.
"Jaden, why did you go to the dark side? Think."
"It was my destiny."
"How can you tell?"
"Remember when I made that saber? It was Freedon Nadd who taught me. He told me to join the Academy, then come to the Dark Side. He told me that I was greatest Sith Lord".
"That was pure flattery"
"I don't think Kyle, Luke or that other Jedi agree with you"
"Qollous, the Dark Side... it leads to the murdering of innocent people..."
"Like our... your parents?"
"I forgot to tell you, mortal I killed your parents. That was my first trial to be a Sith".

There was complete silence, save the wailing of Coruscant wind. The sun was setting fast and the sky was in a firework colour display, switching from bllue, to orange, to red, then violet and finally black.

"You... You killed our parents?"
Jaden nodded.
Fueled with Dark Rage, Mordale ignited his other blade and rushed for Jaden. The two engaged in a long, powerful duel. Both adversaries well equally matched and suffered a few blows, but the Dark Side kept them on.
"Now do you realise... the power... of the dark side?" asked Darth Qollous as he sheilded himself from Mordale. Mordale didn't reply, but kept on delivering heavy blows on Darth Qollous. Through the force, Jaden's eyes became red and his body staarted throbbing. Mordale swung his saber at Jaden who hit Mordale's head. Luckily, Mordale's helmet was the only thing that was damaged. It fell off as Jaden, for the first time in fifteen years, saw Mordale's face.
But this distraction didn't stop Qollous. The two clashed their sabers hard and were in a saber lock. Each one trying to counter the other. After about thirty seconds, Jaden backed down. The surprised Mordale fell ahead. Before he could touch the ground, his face gets scarred by Jaden's X-Saber.
"Hope that scar will remind you of the battle every time you look at your disgusting face".
"This won't be the last time, bro".
"You bet"

Jaden then Force Choked Mordale and threw him off the tower.
Satisfied, he ordered one of the pilots to bring him his stinger.

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"Mordale! What happened to your face??"

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Old 04-02-2004, 05:31 AM   #43
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Episode 20: Return of Kun

After falling off the tower, Mordale had landed hard on a speeder, then taken by Kyle and Luke (Who were alive) to Tatooine, the only unconquered planet. On the way, they faced dozens of Imperial scout and patrol ships. The remaining Republicans had transformed back to Rebels as the army of 300 fled to various locations in the galaxy, including Corellia, Chandrila. Ord Mantell and even Hoth.

Mordale finally woke up from the deep meditated state the force had put him into.
"Uh? Kyle? Where am I? Where is Jaden?"
Kyle shamefully looked down, "We lost. We lost, Mordale. Jaden has become more stronger than any of us, even Luke!"
Mordale got up, shaked his head and stared at Kyle. In the light, Mordale's scar was visible.
"Mordale! What happened to your face???" exclaimed Kyle.
Mordale took a minute to look at the mirror and feel his scar. His anger then took over, but he managed to hide it. Kyle sensed it, "Mordale, you put up a good fight with Jaden, even though he is your brother. I'm proud of you."
Mordale slowly turned his head towards Kyle, miserably and started weeping over the duel which changed their fates. The duel which broke all relations. The duel which destroyed the brotherhood of two.
Darth Qollous ignited one of his blade.
The rebel spy in front of him, started shivering.
Qollous pointed his saber to the other's throat.
"Now will you tell me your plans?"
"Uh... Uh..."
"Where were you headed? Tell me before I feed you to my saber!"
"Ch... Ch... Chandrila"
"And why were you headed to Chandrila?"
"T..To inform Gen... Gen... General Raigers"
"Good. I may spare you."
The other's face brightened.
"Or maybe not". With a quick, swift saber move, he beheaded the spy.

The door opened as a New Imperial stormtrooper entered, his golden logo bright.
"Sir, our next orders?"
"Sweep Chandrila."
The stormtrooper returned.
Qollous looked out of the bridge of the star destroyer when something occured to him.
He called up a stromtrooper.
"Trooper, take me to Kuat"
"Yes sir."

Pleased with himself, Qollous tood there, triumphantly when suddenly Kun's ghost invaded his head.
"Qollous! What have you done?? You were supposed to ressurect all of us"
"Uh. You again??? What do you mean by 'us'?"
"All of us sith lords".
"I don't care. I've got what I've needed. I did what Freedon told me to do. I've even proven myself to be the greatest Sith Lord ever".
"You were supposed to make a new order! A now order of the Sith!"
"Lies, Greed, Deceit. The way of the Sith". Said Qollous as his Destroyer jumped into hyperspace.
"You and I, soon." Replied Exar Kun.

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"Luke, we lost Chandrila."

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Old 04-04-2004, 01:43 AM   #44
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Episode 21: Defeat of Chandrila

Chandrila. The planet of rifts, valleys and mountains. A planet with an obvious concentration of the force. The great rift, the place where an old Jedi Knight had died and where his coffin lay. Jaden had once come here, to break up a cult operation and he had carried out the job successfully. For the Chandrilians, the world had become a normal place, a place where trade flourishes, people live and everything is set.
Unknown to them, in between them live Rebel spies. Hidden, unknown and hiding their uniform and symbol. One such rebel spy was exploring the streets of Ha'ar Nushakdet. The spy, overheard a conversation between a couple.
"Don't go to work, dear, it may be dangerous"
"The Imperials are going to raid this planet. Those scoundrels..."
He didn't hear any more. Shivering, he pulled out the comlink and communicated General Yal'ra.
"General? Chandrila is expecting a raid from the Imper..."
Stingers attacked the city, seeking out rebel spies with their eagle eyes. From ground, blasters shot as the black stormtroopers raided the street.
Nervous, the spy tried to escape, only to be shot down by a stinger. His back was burned. In a final attempt, the called the General again.
"Sir, we are u-under h-he-heavy attack. N-Need ass-ssistance, im-im-imm-immediatly."
"We hear you. We'll send you... Hello? S376, Respond. Damn! We lost him. All available units, go to Chandrila and determine the strength of enemy army".
"Roger, sir".

The X-Wings erupted from an underground base in Dessalonia. Going away from the dull planet, they engaged into Hyperspace and jumped out at Chandrila. A big mistake. Their were three star destroyers parked. Finding the republic ships, they opened fire instantly. Many X-Wings were lost, until the lieutenant announced a retreat.
Some X-Wings were lost while escaping and Stingers were chasing down the remaining. Overall, the battle was a victory, for the Imperials.
Somewhere, sometime
"You are now ready. You will defeat the betrayer, Darth Qollous and capture the throne. After that, I'll tell you what to do..."
The other didn't reply.
Kyle moved thorugh the corridors of the bunker in Dessalonia. He had received the retreat notice and was going to Luke. Luke was giving some orders to Rebel trooper. Kyle came from the back.
"Luke, we lost Chandrila".
Luke took some time. "We, we lost Chandrial?"
Kyloe nodded.
"That's bad. But I sense Jaden will be defeated soon."
"Odd. Who's defeating Jaden? A Jedi?"
"Even worse, a Sith. I can't clearly see it."
"My next orders?"
"Hmmm.... Go to the planet of Car...Cartarossa".
"Never heard of that planet..."
"Find it and go there."
"Yes, sir!" acnowledged Kyle, imitating a clone trooper.

Episode 22 Preview:
"Challenge him. Challenge and defeat Qollous".

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Old 04-04-2004, 08:48 AM   #45
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Very, very, nice!! go on

Now I know their weak point!! - Without head, they are powerless
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Old 04-04-2004, 09:02 AM   #46
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Thumbs up Series 3

Jaden has now established the Empire, but greater troubles are to face him. A mysterious new Sith Lord is coming, to seize the throne of the emperor...

Series 3
Begins Tomorrow

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Old 04-05-2004, 06:40 AM   #47
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Episode 22: Azenite

The planet of Cartaarossa. A layer of land topped with snow and villages. Natives to this planet, the Zeroes had learned to take advantage of their treacherous terrain. About 80% of the population lived in villages. Only two, enormous cities are found on this snow planet.
At the west, high atop Gwaer peak, a cave is seen. Inside, it houses a hangar and a home, where every wall, ceiling and floor is covered with ice.

Living in this unusual house was Azenite. A Zeroe, only diffrent. Unlike normal zeroes, he was taller, more muscular and of a block-like structure. His eyes were metallic-azure and his hair, which flowed from his head to the end of his neck like a horse, silver-blue.
He sat, meditating the force. Soon, Exar Kun appeared in front of him.
"Are you now ready?"
Azenite continued meditating.
"I see you are. You're well in line with the force, aren't you?Challenge him. Challenge and defeat Qollous"
Azenite ignored him once again.
"Enough meditation! Now, it is the time for your first trial"
The white, humanlike being rose from his meditation and looked at the spirit.
"I'm ready now"
"Good, find this man and kill him in any way you wish".
The spirit disappeared, but gave a Force picture to Azenite. The picture was of a reborn, in fine red robes. His face showed his greed and the fact that he was a dimwit. His saber's hilt was also one of the modern kind.
Azenite closed and opened his eyes, then sleekly walked to his stolen TiE. Once inside, he zoomed off into space.

"He is the one. Yes he is".
A few seconds after the Zeroe's disappearence, an X-Wing flew overhead.
"Huh? That has to this Kyle person. How can he rish travelling in an X-Wing. Strange."
The X-Wing circled overhead and finally landed the hangar.
"Well, whaddaya know. Luke was right once again. There is a planet named Cartarossa and this place seems to be force heaven. A feeling of the dark side... The same feeling at Yavin 4... That's trange. It appears the maker of the temple on Yavin 4 has been here."
Qollous sat meditating in his chamber. He had sensed the presence of an asassin, well-trained in the force, sent for him. Suddenly, it was revealed to him that he is at Tatooine. Darth Qollous sat up and walked over to the stinger bay. Taking his stinger, he exited the Super Star Destroyer, made for him and initiated hyperspace for just outside Tatooine.
In a swoop, the ferry finally exited outside Tatooine. Azenite took off with his TiE and headed for Tatooine. Just around, a stinger dropped out of hyperspace and headed for Tatooine. Azenite closed his eyes for a while and having sensed his prey, he turned to Mos Eisley.
The stinger was at the horizon, approaching a village, far away. Azenite knew something was wrong with the stinger and landed his craft at the Mos Eisley spaceport, ready to use his abundant force power.

Episode 23 Preview:
"Impressive, but you cannot deceive me".

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Old 04-06-2004, 03:19 PM   #48
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Episode 23: A new threat

Azenite walked through the dusty streets of Tatooine, trying to adapt his body to the desrt climate. He was a lot like humans, but he wasn't. Unlike humans, he wasn't fully adaptive. The hotness slowly built up on him. He had to finally use the force to keep himself warm.
The people looked at this 6 foot iceman. Some grew suspicious. Sandtrooper guards stared menacingly at the Zeroe. Azenite closed his eyes and let the force guide him to his target.
Meanwhile, Azenite's target was a Dark Jedi by the name of Verantos Masquod. He was travelling through the streets, looking for a Hutt crimelord his leader had told him to eliminate. After some questioning, Verantos found the crimelord to be in an underground palace, linked by a Cantina.
Verantos found that Cantina and ordered a drink. While he was sipping, he found a suspicious little pedal below his seat. Looking around, the Dark Jedi stepped hard on the pedal and his seat fell down through an unknown trapdoor. Verantos, ultimately fell onto the Underground section of Mos Eisley. It was currently under construction, though. In the front, there was a large door, guarded by two Gamorrean guards.
Verantos walked up and asked permission to enter. The Gamorrean didn't grant it. Without replying, Verantos sabered the two guards and opened the door with Force Push. Inside, the Hutt was entertaining himself by watching some dancers. Verantos used the Force and banged those dancers against the walls.
"Eh? Who are you? Doesn't matter now... You will die. Jedi."
"Who are you calling a..." a cage fell round Verantos.
"Now what will you do?"
Verantos plainly grinned. He used his saberto cut open the cage. The Hutt's eyes brightened.
"Attack that Jedi!!" he ordered.
At once, mercenaries started firing at the Dark Jedi who defended and reflected each shot with pin-point accuracy. Soon, none of the mercenaries were left.
"Impressive, but you cannot deceive me!" said the Hutt. A microsecond later, the world round him started shaking and rocks fell from the surface. The Hutt squealed. An enormous boulder, about 5 feet high and 7 feet wide fell on the Hutt and crushed him. His body burst, revealing a messy, gory inside.

Verantos stood, wondering what was happening. He fell over and kept the rocks up with the force.Soon, the shaking stopped and Azenite dropped in.
"Wh-Who are you?" stammered the Dark Jedi.
Azenite didn't reply, he held up his saber and ignited it's blue blade.
"S-So you're a J-J-Jedi".
Azenite concentrated and soon a pile of rocks fell from the ceiling, forming a tomb around Verantos. Verantos cut open some rocks with his saber and as soon as he came out, Azenite was missing.
Trusting the force, he turned back. Azenite was there and he used Force Push, really hard. The rocks came at a blazing speed straight for Verantos. He jumped, but a rock hit his leg and he slammed hard on the rock, face-first. He looked up, his face bleeding. Azenite choked him and raised him high above.
He then used Force Pull and the Dark Jedi went straight into the blue saber.

His job succesfull, he jumped up, to the surface of Tatooine. It was a city street where he came up and in front of him, Darth Qollous stood, staring at him.

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"If you're looking for my throne, you're very, very wrong"".

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Old 04-09-2004, 11:03 AM   #49
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Episode 24: Duel in the Dust

Qollous had seen the entire battle. He was impressed with Azenite. The Zeroe had erupted from sand, in the city streets of Mos Eisley. Bystanders stood, jaws open at what was about to happen. Sandtroopers guarded the area and attacked Azenite. Azenite stood where he was, deactivating his saber and using the force to form a barrier around himself. The blasters reflected against the invisible wall and killed the stormtroopers. A few remainders ran away to inform the others. Azenite brought them back and force pushed them so hard, they flew clear over the horizon.

Darth Qollous ignited one blade and stood in a new stance. He held his saber right below his right armpit with both hands. With this stance, he was able to comfortably switch between blades and develop a merciless, bewildering move. Azenite, however, had sensed his intentions. He pulled the X-Saber right out of the other's hands and tossed it behind his shoulder. Qollous tried moving it, but Azenite moved it further.

Qollous was enraged, he was the emperor and to him, Azenite was nothing. Yet this "nothing" just humiliated the Emperor in front of a pathetic crowd. Qollous' mind raged and soon he attacked Azenite with his plain body and hands. The attack was foiled by Azenite's barrier and unbelieveable Force Abilities. Azenite used Qollous' corrupted mind to take over him and lashed him around the Tatooine houses, covering the Emperor with dust. This enraged the Dark Emperor even more.

With full force, he pulled the saber and engaged in a new kata. He brought about unexpected and uncomprehensible moves while activating/deactivating his blades.Azenite's Force Barrier wore off and he had to defend with his blue lightsaber. He wasn't well in lightsaber skills and managed to defend a few blows. When Qollous really got angry, he jumped high up onto the Tatoiine rooftops. The two battled above those curved roofs.

Qollous finally got tired and started a normal duel. Azenite sighed and pulled Jaden behind him and made him fall over the rooftops. Qollous jumped back up and fell back down with Azenite's push. Jaden finally realised that it was no use reaching for his anger. Cool, he jumped and force pushed Azenite. Azenite absorbed the force push and plunged ahead with his saber. Jaden barely dodged, but his right abdomen got charred.

In his agony, he fell and rolled of the tall rooftops, screaming out. Azenite leapt from the rooftop onto Jaden with his saber sinking deep into the injured part of the abdomen. Jaden kicked hard Azenite fell back. Satisfied that his weak opponenet had finally been finished. The people gathered aorund their emperor and sent him via VIP ferry to Coruscant pronto in order to get the best medical assistance.
In Coruscant, Qollous woke up from the deep sleep. He fell into sleep about when he got into the ferry on a strecher held by the two strecher droids. He sat up and found an old doctor and his trusty medi-droid with him.
"Your majesty, are you alright?" asked the aged doctor.
"Yes. Yes I am."
"Good. Now try and move your abdomen."
Qollous found this order unusual and dumb but he tried to wiggle his torso. The left side wiggled as normal, however, the right part was feeling a bit heavy. Confused, he looked down at his torso. His right part of his torso was replaced by a artificial, robotic abdomen.
Full of shock, Jaden looked at the doctor.
"Good, so it works! Congrats TR-89! We must get going now..."

In his strange shock, Jaden lay on his bed, pale. He sensed Exar Kun's spirit.

"If you're looking for my throne, you're very, very wrong." he said out loud.

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"He won't last long. Neither will you."

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Old 04-10-2004, 03:57 PM   #50
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Very good story, saber.

Though I personally think that you're pushing it a little bit too far (like bringing the clones back, and Qollous being able to beat three Jedi including Luke).

Qollous can be really powerful, but I doubt anybody can take on Luke, Kyle and two others with much ease. (it *could* be possible, but in your text, Qollous beats them too easily, IMO)

Great work anyway.

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Old 04-10-2004, 08:51 PM   #51
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I love your story. Remember when you told me to imitate my favorite author? well i think i'll imitate you. And jon_hill, i like your saber too
Keep it coming!
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Old 04-11-2004, 06:41 AM   #52
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Originally posted by Darth54
Very good story, saber.

Though I personally think that you're pushing it a little bit too far (like bringing the clones back, and Qollous being able to beat three Jedi including Luke).

Qollous can be really powerful, but I doubt anybody can take on Luke, Kyle and two others with much ease. (it *could* be possible, but in your text, Qollous beats them too easily, IMO)

Great work anyway.
I'm also thinking the same thought...
He had beaten Kyle, in JA, no questions. As for Luke, I'm still a bit unsure. They had shown him too weak in the movies and in JA, he never fought. I made him a bit weak.

Darth Qollous is so powerful, because Freedon Nadd, Exar Kun, Marka Ragnos, Darth Imperius and other Siths beleived that Jaden is the one who shall bring back the reign of the Sith in the galaxy. During his birth, many spirits arrived and invested a tiny portion of their Force into Jaden, making him more powerfull than normal. That explains the fact that he completed his Jedi Training in a matter of weeks. Check the Character thread in the RPG foum for more info. (Last Page)

Thanks doomgiver, you're flattering me. Am I really that good? I'm very surprised.

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Old 04-11-2004, 10:12 AM   #53
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Well, most books i've read are dutch because i live in the Netherlands. So you are the best example of how my english story should be (because i don't know that much english words, wich is why i mostly use a lot of the same words.). You're not my all-time favorite but you are good.
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Old 04-11-2004, 03:27 PM   #54
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Originally posted by Sabretooth:
Thanks doomgiver, you're flattering me. Am I really that good? I'm very surprised.
I completely agree with him, as you've got some good talent. Maybe even an even better talent than I thought. You were able to take Jaden's dark side story and add a new twist to it. It shows you've got a knack for writing stories, and that's one of your greatest strengths.

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Old 04-11-2004, 11:48 PM   #55
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awesom story, although, as doomgiver said, your not my alltime favorite but your pretty good

and no, your not surprised

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Old 04-13-2004, 06:41 AM   #56
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Thumbs up Episode 25: Banished

Thanks, guys. The encouragement was just what I needed. And thanks a lot, Master.
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------Verantos lay on the sand, healing himself. In about ten minutes, he felt ready and got up. His view was blocked by blood covering his eyes. Both, from outside andinside. He washed away and his vision now looked like he was wearing Infra-Red glasses.
He staggered around, looking for something to hold onto. He dropped down again and went into sleep, still using Force Heal. After an hour, he woke up. His vision was clearer and the place looked like a sandstorm had hit it. He himself was covered halfway into sand. He felt at his torso. The wound had healed. It was lucky for him that he survived so long. Now all he would need to do would be to get to the hangar and aget a ship to go back to his HQ.
People had starting coming out, it was about 4 o' clock there. He could hear various people expressing themselves about how relieved they were after the storm had passed. He dusted himself and took a Pit Droid Rickshaw to the main hangar. After having paid the Pit Droid, he proceeded to inside.
The manager, a fat buffoon who apparently didn't have interest in selling cheap welcomed him.
"Welcome sir, what would you like?"
"A ship. Good enough to travel half the galaxy."
"Hmm... You need a Friger, don't you?"
"You look desperate. Why don't you use a bus?"
"They don't go where I'm going."
"OK, OK! The Friger costs 12,000 Credits."
"Anything cheaper?"
"Minimum? 9,000"
Verantos ignited his lightsaber and held it in front of him.
"Did I say nine thousand? M-My mistake. I'll make it 5,000"
"GIVE it to me"
"Sure, it's yours! Leave me!"
Verantos hopped into the Friger and shot out of Tatooine and set his co-ordinates to the planet of Knokall.
As soon as reaching Knokall, Verantos turned towards his HQ. The planet was comletely grassy. A lot of bumpy hills dotted the surface along with crystal blue water lakes. Verantos headed towards a building, well fortified and sleek. He landed his plane juist outside and proceeded inside, passing the courtyard. Other Dark Jedi looked at him as he walked to the Clan Lord's chamber.

The chamber was wide, with a long window. The Lord was training some students when Verantos appeared.
"Ah! Masquod! How did it go?"
"He, he defeated me."
"Yes. He had some bodyguard..."
"You let a slimy, stupid Hutt defeat you? You have ashamed the clan."
"It was a Jedi who..."
"No! You are the most repected and highest Dark Jedi here, next to me! You were defeated by a Jedi? A Hutt? Their alliance? You will be punished. That Hutt can ruin us. You will be expelled from the Clan!"
"The Hutt di..."
"That's it! You have gall to resist against the Clan Lord? You are exiled. For destroying the clan, for ruing us and for questiong the Clan Lord. You are Banished from Knokall!"

Sulking, Verantos looked away at one of his friends. His rage was visible. His body had turned red. He glanced at his friend and said, "He won't last long. Neither will you."

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Episode 26: The Galactic Civil War

With the rise of Azenite, the galaxy had split like an amoeba. Two groups were formed, one supporting the new Emperor, the people. And others supporting Darth Qollous, the Imperials. Azenite had proclaimed that Emperor Darth Qollous is dead and Emperor Azenite shall take the throne next. Darth Qollous was on a wild goose chase, seeking rumours about the whereabouts of Azenite. It led from planets as remote as Kashyyyk to the urban Coruscant. On the way, he met and conquered opposing planets as well. Azenite on the other hand was influencing more people to his cause. Soon the cold war fired up as the two groups battled each other. Skirmishes were fought and at times, entire battles were fought. The Galactic Civil War had begun.
Darth Qollous was on Naboo, searching a common marketplace for rumours. The shopkeepers were timid and didn't reveal a word. The public was no less. As he ventured, he found a lot of stormtrooper activity. The Imperial Army was with him, but what bit his brain was why were they in such a hustle and bustle. The citizens of Naboo are generally too calm and won't cause much of a trouble for the stormtroopers. Something was happening.
A stormtrooper flashed past Qollous. The Dark Lord caught him.
"Where are you going?"
"Uh... Lord Qollous, we..."
"Go on"
"We are uh... preparing.. to... um... wipe rebel activity"
"Sir, we..."
Blaster shots were fired. Qollous masterfully reflected them in a second. The shooters fled. They were mercenaries, about three of them. The crowd spread in chaos. More shots fired. Qollous blocked them as well. They were fired by stormtroopers. The crowd started running around. Many innocents died in the forefight. Jaden slashed and cut each stormtrooper in anger.
The Mercenaries tried to get away, but Qollous inflicted a painful, but less deadly lightning on them, taking the pleasure in torturing them. When satisfied, he choked them threw them away.
He saw another shady character. Suspicous, Qollous pulled him. It was dark Jedi. The other ignited a red lightsaber.
"What? Azenite has students?" exclaimed the Dark Lord as he engaged in a street duel with the Dark Jedi. The Dark Jedi was cautious, on the defensive. When Qollous started gaining the upper hand, he left the duel and dispersed in the chaos.
"He'd better not come again".
Meanwhile, in the Emperor's Palace on Coruscant, Exar Kun and Azenite were receiving a report from an Imperial Officer via holovision.
"Sir, The rat, Qollous is found on Naboo. Naboo is in chaos. We are getting the upper hand."
"Good." replied Azenite.
The holovision flickered and switched off. The holo-droid scampered away from the chambers.
"The force protect should stop Qollous from sensing us" said Azenite.
Exar Kun looked at Azenite.
"This is it. The war has begun."
"No, in fact the war has ended, young one".
Azenite looked at Kun.
"As long as Qollous is alive, the Imperials will support him".
"No. No. You will defeat Qollous, of this I am sure. We must lure him here, though."
Azenite meditated.
Exar began, "You must bring back the Sith! Qollous was an imbecile, to have continued with the empire."
"And Palpatine wasn't?"
"Palpatine? He was the greatest fool a galaxy has ever known".
"I assure you, I WILL rule the empire AND bring back the Sith".
"Good, my padawan. You must influence more young minds into this cause. At Yavin 4, that is. At my temple."
"The Dark Side is strong there. It will make a good training field."
"Yes, it will. First we have squash a certain Darth Qollous".

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Are you reading this? I want to see more! You haven't updated in days! Do you have a writers block maybe?
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Episode 27: The Crystals of Ilum

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Verantos landed his craft outside the foundation of a tall, towering cliff. He got out and looked around, pulling his cape over his head. "Well, here we are. Ilum." he said. The wind howled. Verantos put on his jacket and stepped ahead, feeling the icy rock. He then looked around. Seeing that nobody is there, he cleared the snow below him with his feet.
The uncovered ground was brown and lively as if taken from a tropical planet. Verantos grabbed the soil and flung it at the rock ahead. Then, meditating, he unleashed a powerful push. The rock broke down, revealing a passage through.

Verantos had toiled about four storeys without any stairs when he finally fell, exhausted. He gasped desperately for air, which the place lacked. Words of defeat echoed in Verantos' head. To keep his morale up, he started chanting, "Must keep going. Must keep going. Must keep going..." His energy took him up just another storey where he lay in a near-fainted state. In the darkness, Verantos didn't realise that there was another wide passage that went sideways. He rolled down that passage and ended up banging hard agaisnt a rock wall. The crash woke him up. His head was aching badly. His eyes were not adjusting to the dark. The ears were punding and his nose suffocating. Luckily, the fall was so powerful, it brought the entire rock crumbling down revealing a new cave. A cave never seen before by a mortal. Verantos caught a glimse of the treasure inside and passed out.

Verantos woke up after about three hours in the same condition. All around the cave were crystals. Blue, Green and even Cyan crystals. Verantos wandered around the lightsaber treasure until his feet bumped on something. He kneeled down and found it as a chest, apparently filled with treasure. His eyes glimmering, Verantos lifted the unlocked lid and found a small box, a bigger box and a note.
He picked up the note first. It read-

The Jedi are hunting me down. They consider me a criminal and even suspect me of being a Sith spy. I hope to keep my treasure safe here, for no one but the one who finds it may acquire this treasure. If it is you who has found this and are a Jedi, use what is inside properly. If you aren't please keep it here and forget your visit. This is the one of it's kind and losing it as good as losing ten thousand systems from the galaxy.

Crutus Penari

Verantos read the letter completely and flung it behind his shoulder. "I have a right to own my found treasure" he mumbled. He opened the smaller box first. It was a plain wooden box, more slim. He opened it to find a saber hilt. The hilt was an ancient one, tapering down towards the end along with a special holding handle. It had a green button on it. Holding the saber away from him, he pressed the button. Nothing came out.
He opened the hilt with the force to find a crystal-holder, but no crystal. Disgusted, the threw the two parts of the hilt into the small box. Then he opened the larger box. A flash brighter than anything erupted from the box. Verantos covered his eyes and after a few seconds, he found a treasure of bright yellow crystals, all of them flickering like gold. He touched them, but the crystals burned his skin. He instantly brought his hand back and realised that these were no ordinary crystals.

He brought out his own saber and dissected it, throwing away the artificial crimson crystal. The crystal was so brittle, it broke and crumbled instantly. He used the force and placed three yellow crystals into his hilt and closed it properly. Giving a sigh of relief, he pressed the button. The hilt flickered a while and exploded. Verantos fell back. The saber hilt was still intact and glowed, rolling around, flickering constantly. Then the golden blade finally ignited and deignited. This continued for five times when it finally ignited properly.
The saber felt unusally light and easy to weild. Verantos put on an evil grin on his face and laughed like thunder, cutting away rocks with the mere touch of his saber.

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's okay. I do have a writer's block. Nobody gives me any feedback...
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Episode 28: Battle for the Throne

Darth Qollous sabred the last of his unloyal royal guards. His eyes then met with the door to the throne room. Filled with vengeance, he entered the room and attacked meditating Azenite from the back. The X-Saber went through his body. It was an illusion. A force push from the back threw Qollous ahead as the illusion vanished. Azenite jumped at Qollous with his blue saber.Qollous deflected and sprang up, rolling. Wasting no time, he attacked the other saber.

The two engaged a strong saber lock. "The Emperor will now be decided" announced Qollous. "A fight to the death? Gladly." replied Azenite. In a fast Kata, Azenite attacked everywhere at once and pushed Qollous back, not letting him even four feet near him. He then applied Force Choke on the Sith Lord and smiled. Qollous stood helpless, trying to counter the powerful grip. He finally was released when he hurled a fireball at Azenite.
Azenite pushed that fireball back. Qollous caught it within two of his blades. He released another fireball and caught it himself within the other two blades. Azenite did not stay quiet. He shot a bolt of electricity at Qollous. Qollous rolled away from it. He rushed for Azenite and deflected his force powers with the deadly saber. Then, he using the fireball-equpped saber he gave a nasty blow to Azenite's right shoulder.

The saber on coming in contact with the skin, burned and that exploded the fireballs, creating a huge explosion. Both duelists fell away. Azenite was badly wounded and his right hand gone. Qollous had received injuries, but was black all over. Wasting no time, he attacked the helpless Azenite. Azenite pushed back with the force, but he was too wounded for that. He tried to his saber, but one hit of the X-Saber flung it out of his hands. He looked at Qollous. Qollous had 'No Mercy' written all over his face as he prepared for one final blow to defeat the fake Emperor.
Meanwhile, Verantos had left Ilum and landed at Knokall to get his revenge. He walked to the headquarters of his former clan. The Dark Jedi were out in the grass, practising. A ClanHead spotted Verantos and stopped him.
"Halt! Isn't that you, Verantos Masquod?"
"In the flesh."
"Then you have committed a great mistake coming here. That Hutt was crushed by a rock. You were lucky that he died later."
"And you are unlucky 'cause you're gonna die NOW!"
He ignited his yellow saber and attacked the ClanHead. The ClanHead dodged the attacked and ignited his own saber. Verantos attacked the saber. The yellow-bladed saber cut the other, red blade. The red blade was divided. A outer part fell off and evaporated. And the saber was destroyed. A few seconds later, the artificial crystal malnufunctioned and exploded.
"Now, who's the best?" jested Masquod and gave a final blow to the ClanHead. The others were not happy at this. They attacked Verantos all at once, only to be sabered in a single swing.

Verantos then jumped directly to the roof of the building and using his saber, made a hole in ythe roof. He jumped down and came face-to-face with the ClanLord. The ClanLord was about to start a lecture when Masquod's saber went deep through him. Hearing the sound of death, guards and hordes of Dark Jedi entered. Verantos grinned, rolling saber and turning to face his hundred adversaries.

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Episode 29: The Aftermath

Just as the final blow was to take place, Azenite rolled and flipped to the right of Qollous. Bewildered, Qollous swung his saber to the right. The answer was a force push capable of diverting a storm. The glass broke of and everything in the room washed away with Darth Qollous who fell from the top of the Emperor's Palace.
After the blow, Azenite fell back and the spirit of Exar Kun left him. Kun settled quietly in the room, smiling and awaiting response from his devastated apprentice. Azenite was blood-red. He was breathing heavily and continuously gasping for air. His body was charred and in bad shape. His left hand was frail and roasted. His right was not there. He had lost his right leg from the knee onwards and his body looked as if scavenged by vultures.
He had lost his left eye, but did not react to any of these casualties. What mattered him was that he had lost against Qollous. Only with Kun's help he could have ever won, but with his current body, he was useless. He couldn't even handle a blaster or even let out a weak example of force energy.

Exar Kun started, "NOW you are ready". Azenite, surprisingly, got up and went to the turbolift with Exar had hinted him. Kun disappeared. After a while, Azenite was tfifty levels below sea level. He entered a large hall with a couple doors to it's left and a lot of rooms to it's right.
It seemed to be some sort of a medical area. Kun directed him into the second room to his left. This door led to a corridor, which soon turned left and ended up in another door. Once the door opened, Azenite found himself in a large room. There were beds, stands, instruments and medical droids everywhere. Kun smiled and explained to Azenite, "This. This is the place Darth Vader was born".
"Really?" asked Azenite.
"Well, a bit. After Anakin became Vader, he went on a few missions and then returned here for maintenance. Also, his design and body was finalised here, but the actual construction had taken place somewhere else."
Azenite nodded.
On Knokall, Verantos was experiencing his most pleasureable moments of his life. With his bright, yellow blade, he was slicing sabers, arms, legs, necks and anything that came in his way. At last, after the uncountable foes were defeated, he let out a sigh. He then backed behind and examined the ClanLord's body. It was a decoy. The fake make-up melted and faded off.
"What's that supposed to mean?" wondered Verantos, and in the nick of time, lunged ahead as the original ClanLord attacked from the back. Verantos rolled, jumped to the wall and backflipped behind the Lord. The ClanLord strafed right to avoid Masquod's blow. Masquod stopped suddenly and launched a attack backwards. As we was concentrating on his saber, He received a powerfull kick on his face.
His saber de-ignited and rolled away. He fell off and took some time to regain energy. The ClanLord took this to his advantage and pulled the fallen saber. Then, ignoring Verantos, he examined it properly and lit it several times. Verantos quickly jumped up and pulled the other saber to him.

The Lord let it go and the two started stalking each other. They walked around in circles, exchanging taunts and gestures at each other. Both attacked, and parried at at the right time. Finally, Verantos attacked the left arm and in a zig-zag motion, avoided the parry, struck the left shoulder and then quickly stabbed the right shoulder. The ClanLord gave a cry and then, withstanding his pain, dropped his saber. He gave a weak nod and closed his eyes. Verantos grinned and stabbed the skull.

"Now I am the most powerfull."

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SH*T, no sneak peek! You know, your story might get a little screwed up when ep.3 comes out.

*sigh* i'll never be as good as a writer as you are...
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Episode 30: Old Allies

In the Royal Palace, at Coruscant. Exar Kun waited for his apprentice to emerge. He drew a vision of a cybernetic monster, capable of destroying entire buildings. It seemed funny, so he shook it off. Soon, a scientist arrived, carrying news.
"Lord Kun, Lord Azenite's designing is now complete. He will be produced to you shortly".
"Well done." replied Kun, coldly.

There seemed to be seome confusion in the mediroom.People were chouting out aloud and sounds of thumping metal and clashing were heard. Exar was curious, and moved a bit nearer. Something suddenly banged hard against the door and a dent was formed. This prevent the door from opening. After a while, a sound of crunching bones was heard and Azenite punched the door really hard. So hard, that the door shot out like a bullet.

Smoke erupted from the room as the mechanical terror stepped out. He looked stout, yet glossy and deadly. His top was blad, like most helmets and flowed down in a cylindrical shape, like Royal Guard's helmet. It was of blueish-silver in colour.
There was a visor-like collar that formed a sleek, black triangle in front of where his mouth should be.
Below that, the body curved at the chest, which was covered by a Y-shaped plate, red in clour with yellow borders. Behind the plate was another piece of roundish armour covering his abdomens. His shoulders were made big and had a tower-like rising on them, which went about 2 feet above the head.
The hands, too were big and covered in mail. All this part was azure-silver and very glossy, like the head.
His legs were covered with black-and-red plates.

Azenite stood over 7-foot tall, with his shoulder-towers, 8-foot. His heavy body created a thump each time he took a step. "I am ready" he said, in a droid's voice.

Kun took a minute to gaze and nodded.
Meanwhile, Jaden was flying over an abandoned planet called Hortod which was pleasant, yet isolated. It had a vast underground network, made by an independant, advanced race long before they had dissolved and migrated. Jaden landed at an old military base, with a landing pad and two towers, standing high.
In front of the pad was a metal door, going downwards, but was closed. There was a control pad beside it. Jaden walked over to the control pad and punched in a few keys. The status line said "Processing" and after a while, there was an annoying beep with the words "Denied".

Jaden thought a while and cracked the code. He typed in, 5545812, the secret number of Luke's holocron. He didn't know how he came by it, but the door opened and Jaden stepped in. He heard some sounds down the halls, then voices and soon troops started rolling in.

At the sight of Jaden, they kept there distance and soon, Jedi arrived. Kyle was in the front. He stepped upto Jaden. "What is it? Are you looking for trouble?"
"Then why are you here?"
"I... Azen... The Emperor defeated Darth Qollous."
Everybody were taken back and some gasped.
"Then... You're not Darth Qollous?" asked Kyle, smiling on one side of his face.
"No. I am now a member of you. I am... a... I'm a Jedi."
"Is that so?" Kyle was now comletely smiling, yet he was suspicious.
"Now we must join forces to dethrone the Emperor.
"Which is... Azena..."
"Right, come now. And no troubles, or you're dead."

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Cool, this guy is even Cooler than Vader... Good job creating a scary Dark Jedi.
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Episode 31: Reunion

Jaden was told all of the rules and was considered as a Jedi Knight, yet the others were cautioned to keep a watch on him. Wherever he went, somebody was watching him. On the next day, Kyle went to Jaden. He seemed to be happy seeing Jaden.
"Well, Jaden"said Kyle "I suppose you've got used to our li'l burrow, eh?"
"Yeah, pretty sophiscticated for a tunnel system".
"I'm glad to see you, but I know someone who will love to see you again."
"Who is that?" asked a curious Jaden.
Kyle chucled. "Follow me."

Kyle led him through some passages into some training chambers. There were two Jedi, practising. They were wearing full body armor to deflect Lightsaber blows. One used a yellow saber, and the other a green one. The one with the yellow saber seemed to be winning.
After a while, the Jedi with the green saber lost and gave up. His opponent then deignited and turned to Jaden and Kyle. He fumbled with his pads and took them off. He didn't notice Jaden at first, but when he did, he gave out a cry, "Jaden!"
The voice was familiar. "Rosh!" replied Jaden and the two hugged each other. "It's been such a long time, you and I, we were buddies, our missions and my conversion and then..." he suddenly stopped chattering. Jaden stepped back.

"You... You killed me." said Rosh.
Jaden broke down. "Rosh, I... Then... but..." he couldn't decide what to say.
"Why are you here?" asked Rosh rudely.
"I have returned from the dark side. I... I overestimated myself. My greed made me lose against the Emperor. Now I am Jaden, not Darth Qollous anymore."
Rosh seemed to feel allright, but still suspicious. Jaden hugged Rosh again and the two went off. Jaden told his story to Rosh and Rosh told his to Jaden. Rosh had been badly wounded when Jaden's saber had gone through him in Taspir. With the aid of Luke Skywalker and Kyle Katarn, he had managed to live, but it had taken him months. Now he was fairly allright and normal, yet weak. Rosh liked Jaden's story more.

Two days later, Jaden showed his X-Saber to Rosh and the two duelled in the training chambers. Many were watching the duel. Rosh defended excellently and put up a good fight, but lost. Many other Jedi tried, but Jaden won most duels. He lost against some masters and he lost against Kyle as well. When the final duel was over, the Jedi dispersed and Rosh, Kyle and Jaden were left. They chatted for a while when suddenly, a blaster shot was fired at Jaden.
It looked as if Jaden would not be quick enough, but he dodge-jumped and hit the shot with with his saber as well. The shot was fired by a Jedi in mandalorian armour.

"Mordale!" started Jaden, but Mordale vanished in a flash. Jaden looked back at Kyle, confused. Kyle looked sternly at at Jaden.
"Do you think he would stand to greet you, after what you did to him?"
"But, he..."
"Jaden, whom you just saw was Mordale Korr, not your brother. You killed your brother, but Mordale Korr lives."
Jaden looked back shamefully.
Meanwhile, at Coruscant, Kun was instructing Emperor Azenite on his further objectives. Azenite was given a large saber-hilt with a curving cone near it's ignition point.
"What is this?" droned Azenite.
"This is a light-lance. Ignite it."
Azenite obeyed and switched it on. The wide, 5" blade went upto nearly 6 feet long. The saber was heavy to weild, yet destructive. It was red in colour.
Kun smiled, "Now, knight, you must have a horse to charge you into battle!"
"We still have to finish that vermin."
"Yes, we will take care of that as well!"

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Series 4

Series 4 is beginning...

After losing his empire and alter-ego, Jaden has returned to the Side of Light. However, even the side of light is cowering in shadows as the Terrifying, cyborg Emperor Azenite has arisen and rules with an iron fist. Series 4 will begin exactly four years after the conversion of Jaden to the light side. During these four years, the galaxy has changed a lot...

Emperor Azenite - Azenite rules with an iron fist, crushing any rebellions and ruling systematically. Over the months that followed, Azenite was eventually named Darth Horfrost, a name used only by few. He has also started the Dark Academy on various planets.

Exar Kun - Kun managed to make a body similar to his own and possesed it, thus, indirectly resurrecting. Exar Kun advises Darth Horfrost and scours the galaxy, looking for Sith hopefuls and rebels.

Verantos Masquod - Masquod now works as a lethal bounty hunter and brandhishes two blades of the same crystals he had found on Ilum. The two sabers are such that they can be joined to make a deadly saberstaff. He also seeks his revenge against Azenite.

Mordale Korr - Mordale Korr follows the Jedi order and finishes any missions given to him easily. He is not one bit happy to see Jaden and never speaks to him or reveals his face. His armour is with him wherever he goes.

Rosh Penin - Rosh has become a strong Jedi and an excellent duellist. He uses his yellow saber coupled with a purple one, which he had taken as one of his friends' dying wish. Rosh prefers to work with his comrades, especially Jaden.

Jaden Korr - Jaden has become extremely powerful, training at the academy. He uses an orange saberstaff, as he was ordered to use the X-Saber as less as possible since it held some Dark Force in it. Jaden is now in the Light of the force, but has a dark corner in his mind. That dark part is seeking the death of the Emperor...

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And everything is set for a mind-boggling adventure!
you're pretty good at thinking up original lightsabers. I had thought of that dual sabers- saber staff thing before, it's pretty cool. And i heard that in the EU, a saber once existed that could cut trough other saber's blades... But anyway, looking forward to it!
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They wont let him use his X-saber? awwh! how sad.

keep e'm commin!

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Originally posted by Doomgiver
And everything is set for a mind-boggling adventure!
you're pretty good at thinking up original lightsabers. I had thought of that dual sabers- saber staff thing before, it's pretty cool. And i heard that in the EU, a saber once existed that could cut trough other saber's blades... But anyway, looking forward to it!
Well, what can say? The saberlance and the X-Saber were my original creations. For Verantos' saber, check Supershadow's page of Sith/Jedi history. And I derived the concept of attachable dual-sabers from Asajj Ventress, who used a similar saber, only her sabers, as a staff looked S-shaped.

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And I derived the concept of attachable dual-sabers from Asajj Ventress, who used a similar saber, only her sabers, as a staff looked S-shaped.
I didn't know that... She's from the clone wars cartoon right? No wonder i didn't know...
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Episode 32: The Battle of Rehu

Verantos was heading to Rehu, a forest planet with a strange, poisonous gas on it. Verantos put on his anti-gas mask and continued looking for Dreadnoughts. His companion droid, IKY-280 (Eeky) was steering his ship towards the gas-filled planet. As he entered the atmosphere, the scene of battle unfolded before him. Rebel troopers were retreating as the Imperial army marched ahead. Gaining the lead was an elite division of Swooptroopers.
The battle in the air was no less, as Rebel ships and gihter battled in the purple clouds against heavy Imperial ships. The stingers were there, for some reason. Verantos turned to his droid.
"Can you see him, Eeky?"
"Negative, the target seems to be hiding in a natural trench at location 54, 12, 2."
"Got it." acknoledged Verantos and ordered Eeky to land on a cliff. Eeky activated camouflage and the ships cover turned into a mirror, making the ship look invisible.

Verantos clutched his daber, attached and crawled to the tip of the cliff. Smoke was all around the battle-field, and it was clear that without the gas-masks, a person will fall to a cruel, slow death. Verantos shot out ahead and caught a jutting rock. He let go and caught another. He kept going like that until he reached the ground safely. The Imperial troops were rushing.

Verantos made a run for the location Eeky had told him. True enough, a rebel was running away. Verantos separated his sabers and threw one of them. The terrified soldier jumped back into the trench. Verantos dropped in and the soldier made a dash through a tunnel. Verantos brightened his blade and raced through the tunnel, looking for his target. He could hear gasps, breaths and even some cries. He felt himself going upwards now, and turning.

After a harrowing chase, Verantos had come to a dead end, but he did not see and crashed right through a stone wall, make outside. He was back at the road in the jungle and the cliff wall was in front of him. The wall behind was another, miniature cliff. The troopers were passing and Verantos retreated back into the tunnel. After a while, he got out and started chasing his target who was running amongst the parade and getting shot at.

In a fury, Verantos hacked and slahed his way through the troopers and finally beheaded his targetted Rebel. The troopers fired at Verantos who jumped high and used Force Invisibility to rush away. However, the Emperor's infra-red vision caught him and Azenite rushed at him with his swoop.

Verantos found the swoop coming towards him and jumped away in time. The stormtroopers continued marching through the canyon towards the two Imperial Dreadnoughts. Verantos' invisibility wore out and he was visible to the Dark Lord. Azenite turned menacingly to Verantos and stabbed with the saberlance. Verantos ducked and answered with the golden saber.
The friction between the two sabers produced scorching flares as the saberlance was too thick to cut.

Verantos pulled back his saber and ducked as the saberlance swung over him. Now was his chance. In a split-second he launched himself from the ground and stabbed Azenite. Azenites armour protected him. Even Masquod's powerful saber cannot cut through Azenite's armour. Verantos stood dumbfounded and Azenite delivered a bone-crushing kick. The force was so powerful, Verantos flew back a few meters.

Azenite turned and slowly nodded. Then, he zoomed away into the canyon, towards the dreadnoughts. Verantos lay breathing on the ground heavily. His chest was as if it was ripped of everything. With a trembling hand, he fumbled at his back and turned on his jetpack and returned to his ship.
In an unknown location, Jaden and Rosh had just returned from their mission to guide a Republic Squad in a blitz raid at Naboo. They stole what they could and killed any troopers if necessary and returned quickly to their ship. After landing in the underground hangar, the two congratulated each other went down the familiar halls and corridors.
Kyle awaited them in the audience chamber, and so, they went there. The audience chamber was a huge hall, and was partially underground. It's roof was open and let streaming sunlight into the hall. Luke stood at the platform, looking at the sky, and Kyle was at the door. The two approached.
"Well, well. Jaden and Rosh" welcomed Kyle.
"Reporting for duty" replied the duo at once.
"I was just thinking... How would you like apprentices of your own?"
"An apprentice?" asked the two with wonder and amazement in their eyes.

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Episode 33: Jaden's Apprentice

Jaden know had an apprentice. A sixteen year old human. He was dark blonde and had blue eyes and was very energetic, yet obedient. Jaden taught him the basics of using the force and saber duelling. The boy, Foge Setalk was good and learned fast. He was pure in the force and never gave away to anger in any circumstances. Even Jaden was learning something from his apprentice.
Jaden, now Master Korr was summoned to the audience chamber. His apprentice followed him and the two appeared before Luke and Kyle. A few other Jedi duo's were present as well. Apparently, Luke was to give a debriefing or a lecture. Jaden caught up with Rosh.
'Hi, Rosh. What's happening?' asked Jaden.
'Oh, the usual. A debriefing. Looks like we'll be moving.' answered Rosh.
'Well, our first action with our padawans!'

Rosh's apprentice was a red-haired boy, a few months younger than Foge. The boy's name was Edoc Si'asiht. He, unlike, Foge was quick to anger and weak at the force. But somehow, he showed excellent saber-fighting skills.

When everybody had assembled, Luke started, 'Now that everybody has arrived, the news may be passed. As most of you might know, the teams of Jedi and Republic scouts were sent three weeks back. Four hours ago, I received a message from the team. They said that the Imperials found their bases, on the planets of Rehu, Kaetu and Scartu, the three ancient planets. Using our security system, the Imperials have found locations of rebel and Jedi refuge. Now, we must disperse and scatter across the galaxy. It would be too risky and dangerous to travel as one, and thus I have assigned sectors for each Master-Padawan group. You will all go those sectors and stay there, in hiding. No two duos will stay together.'
There was great whispering and murmuring in the Hall. Then, a student got up, 'But Master Skywalker, what about multiple students who have one master?'
'They will have to live by themselves in the sector. Their master will stay in touch. As for the master, he will travel with another master who had multiple students. Got it students?'
There was a great cry of approval. Master Skywalker then told each group where they would go and under what name. There about fifty-four groups in total and were positioned strategically throughout the galaxy.
Jaden and his padawan were sent to Tatooine, at Mos Easco. Jaden Korr was now Kradle Inhar and his padawan, Ondar Masquod. The two first flew to Bakura and crashed their planes in an oak forest and escaped secretly. According to their plan, they were to meet up at the spaceport and board on separate passenger transport, wearing cloaks and shawls as if Tatooiners. The plan didn't go too well...

As the planes crashed, Imperial troops were alerted. 'This looks like trouble...' said Foge on his comlink.
'What?' asked Jaden, looking around.
Sounds of trampled leaf and running were heard in the forests. Behind, the crashed planes burned. Stormtrooper chatter was heard. Jaden pulled on his cloak and leaped into a bush. Foge followed his example. Stormtroopers emerged into Jaden's sight.
'The planes are badly crashed.' chattered one.
'The others are checking it.' replied his companion.
'Something's here.' said the first one again, placing his foot near Jaden's bush. He loaded his blaster and fired at the bush. The shot reflected back and hit the stormtrooper. The other one shot more at the bush. Foge emerged from behind and beheaded both stormtroopers.
Jaden got up. 'Well, let's go.' he ordered and the two ran towards the city. A volcano loomed at their left, a facility lay on top of it. Jaden smiled as he ran.
'You know, Foge, I had been on that facility, on the volcano. I had to defuse a few bombs there. Quite a mission I had! But looks like you're gonna have even more exciting ones.'

They ran into the city, evading entrance booths and rushing in the streets. They ran for some time and stopped, breathing heavy.

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Episode 34: Leaving Bakura

In the Vahec Castle on Coruscant, Azenite was checking some communications when a stormtrooper arrived.
'Lord Horfrost, two Jedi have been spotted on Bakura. They killed two of our troopers and have rushed into the city...' he was cut off by the Dark Lord.
'What?! Jedi? I thought I ordered you to sabotage the planet they were on!'
'We did, but it appears they fled just in...' this time he was cut off by Azenite's fifty-pound fist. The Stormtrooper stayed alive, muttering something and passed away. The blow was so powerful, the trooper's armour was split into two.
Azenite turned back and ordered reinforcements at Bakura and to investigate the Jedi.
Jaden and Foge had entered the hangar, wearing cloaks and covering themselves. Just then, one of the public transports left ground and majestically flew into the sky. There was just one ship left. Jaden and Foge rushed towards it when an announcement froze everyone.
'Two Jedi have boarded the hangar. No flight will be active until these Jedi are found and captured, under the order of Emperor Azenite.'
Troops burst into the hangar, led by Siths. Jaden and Foge were pushed aside as passengers exited the transport and the troopers began checking contents and clothes of the passengers. The Sith supervised them.
Then, a stormtrooper came next to Jaden. 'Alright, now your hands, up!' he chattered. Jaden answered by stepping back and getting lost in the crowd. The stormtrooper followed him into one of the entrance bridges of the ship. The Stormtrooper caught Jaden's arm and forced him to unveil his cloak. Jaden lost his patience and beheaded the troop. The others noticed it. Hundreds of shots fired at Jaden, who retreated inside the ship and Sith as well stormtroopers rushed inside.
Kradle sabered stormtroopers from behind and killed a Sith by attacking his head from the back and stabbing him. Jaden ran from rooms and corridors inside the ship and ran to the pilot. In the pilot's cockpit, he ducked in and hid inside a crate quietly. The troops emerged inside.
'You seen the Jedi?' the stormtrooper questioned the pilot.
'What Jedi?' the pilot asked, confused. Another stormtrooper opened the crate and got sabered. The other stormtrooper believed that the pilot is involved and shot him.
Jaden killed him and held the pilot. 'You okay?' he asked.
There was no reply.

Meanwhile, Foge was overwhelmed by troops and Jedi and had got hurt at a lot of places. Finally, Jaden emerged and cleared out for Kradle. More and more troops entered the hangar, Jaden got to the pilot's cockpit and told Foge to hold off the stormtroopers. In the cockpit, Jaden used his ship knowledge to close down the entrance bridges, making them invulnerable to attack and then called Kradle.
With Kradle as his co-pilot, the two flew away from the firing stormtroopers and rose out of the hangar, only to face a greater peril: A swarm of stingers.
The stingers flew around and attacked the ship, which was already badly burned and black. Suffering a lot of damage, it exited the atmosphere and engaged into hyperspace, which left the stinger commander cursing himself.

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impressive...most impressive...

not a bad story sabertooth! mesa impressed.

I lurk in darkness...emerging only for a reason I dont wanna say :P
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Episode 35: The Academy on Bespin

Jaden exited out of hyperspace and turned the enourmous ferry. There was not a planet in sight.
'Master, where are we? I thought we were headed to Tatooine.' asked Foge, checking the maps.
'We are not going to Tatooine.' replied Jaden.
'Master Luke instructed us to go to Tatooine!'
'After our incident at Bakura, we won't be safe at any Imperial planet!' explained Jaden. 'Instead, we're going to Yalara.'
'Yalara?' asked the confused padawan.
'Yes, I had been there on a mission, alone. I'll tell you some other day. Right now, let's go to Yalara!'
Three dreadnoughts, escorted by numerous Ties exited the hyperspace and speeded into Bespin's atmosphere. The beautiful Cloud City was their destination. The ships landed on a spaceport and stormtroopers, officers and other troops of the Imperial Army exited. Then, the blacktroopers, a class of bodyguard droids exited the leading dreadnought, and following them was the Emperor, in some reduced armour. He was wearing a silvery-white robe over his armour. He walked over to his spacefighter stationed nearby.
The Emperor's spacefighter, nick-named the Crane looked like a modified version of an X-Wing. It's long sleek nose housed various weapons and the niches on boths of it's sides kept the Crane's wings. The Crane's wings folded out like blades of a jacknife and looked like a smoother version of a bat's wings. The long cockpit had windows such that they gave a clear view of the front and little view of the sides. The pilot could sit up and look around anytime for a better view.
The chair was tall and bent backwards which was the default position of the the seat. Their were controls on the front and some controls on the sides. Behind the cockpit were the jets which provided extreme power.

Azenite got into his spacefighter and activated a repulsorlift at the tip of the nose, making the nose point upwards. After a while, the jet behind roared and the crane shot out at blazing speeds. The wings unfolded out and gave the plane a T-shape. Azenite maneuvered the plane with great skill and in under twenty seconds, he was at the Sith Academy near the heart of Bespin.

As he exited, a Sith greeted him, along with others. The Academy was a large tower with various rooms. The complex held many buildings and facilities and many Siths and hopefuls roamed the parts. It was a busy place.
'Show me your best siths!' commanded Azenite.
'Right away!' replied a Sith and dissapeared.
It took a while, and soon, the Sith returned with three Siths. One was like the Sith that greeted Azenite, in a blue-and-white robe and a black hood which showed his face clearly. He held two sabers in his hands.

The other was stouter and wore a bullet-shaped helmet. He stood with his arms folded and a saberstaff hund from his belt.
The final one was slightly slimmer than the first one and wore black and red. A black hood hid his face and he wore grey gauntlets with a strange cylinder on the back of his palm.

Azenite viewed each of the students, head-to-toe. The students made no reponse, they either looked at each other or looked away, but none was daring enough to look at Azenite's cold, featureless helmet.

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Episode 36: Yalara

Azenite was standing in the duel room, the room where several Dark Jedi hone their dueling skills. He raised his hand and the lights came up. The first Sith jumped out and and weilded his saber in a mix of fast and strong styles. Azenite ignited his red saber and the two clashed. Azenite's strength got him through a first lock, but was struck as he turned back. The Sith jested and stabbed. Azenite quickly hit the other's cheek with the saber. The Sith rolled and got up, only to find Azenite's saber at his nose. Azenite motioned him to leave and the Sith scampered.
After the Sith left the room, the next one dropped in. He seemed strong and more solid, but swung as if he were made of rubber. Azenite deflected his attacking blows, but the Sith was relentless. He was getting pleased, he was giving away. Azenite ducked and stabbed the chin from below. The Sith roared and backed away. Azenite blowed him on the head. The Sith dropped on his knees. Azenite was to motion him to go, but the Sith sprang up again.
He used oly one blade now, he used the other sparingly. He was getting tired. Azenite finally parried twice, stabbed once and to finish, attacked the other's palm. The Sith dropped the saber and howled. Azenite destroyed the saberstaff and delivered a powerful punch, which brought the monster down.
Azenite then turned and the last one arrived, the darkness his only companion. His hood hid his face and he carried no saber. Azenite deignited his.
Jaden and Foge exited hyperspace just outside a lush, green planet. There were lots of lakes, rivers and a few mountains, but no oceans. Jaden entered in the west and lowered the ship carefully. Foge caught glimpses of villages and strange aliens looking at the wondrous ship. Ahead, they found a large village. There were many houses of wood, some treehouses, some tall buildings of stone, and their was one stoned and circular platform. Jaden decided it to be a landing pad and settled the large bird there. There was another platform like this a bit away from the city, a tower stood high on it.
Jaden exited the ship with Foge following him. They were greeted by a crowd of aliens and Noghri. The aliens were strange, they were slim and tall. Their eyes were on branches protruding from their necks. Their neck went about 1 foot and ended in a whole which would be their mouths. Their ears were hidden, behind their eyes. They were stouter below the necks and looked a bit ridiculous. They walked by wobbling themselves left and right, as if an old jar trying to walk.

A taller alien and a Noghri greeted them. The alien began speaking, his language was unknown and his voice was heavenly. It was soothing and high-pitched, yet pleasent to the ears. Still, neither Jaden nor Foge understood what he meant. The Noghri spoke, 'Welcome to Yalara, travellers. Two people come before here.' The Noghri spoke carefully, for he didn't know much of the outsider's language.
'Two people?' asked Foge, curiously. 'Us.' answered Jaden.
'No, no! Two other people, before you and you. One have strange clothes. Big, metal, grey, blue and uh... uh... bright sword...' the Noghri went on.
'Wait! A Bright Sword? What colour?' asked Jaden.
'Colour, colour, colour.' the Noghri though a while. 'Ah! Umaneca! It was Fertlaj. I mean, that colour, red and yellow make...'
'Yes! Orange! It was two-blade sword. Everybody look, eyes big open!' the Noghri told.
Jaden thought and dismissed it. He was getting sleepy and it was evening now. The sun had set and the twilight begun. Then something shook Jaden.
'Wait! I thought Noghri...' he started, but stopped. He decided to say it some other time. Meanwhile, he was given a hut to sleep in and Jaden slumped. Foge lay on another bed and was thinking something.
Jaden then realised it.
'Mordale!' he shouted out.

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Episode 37: Sabreclaw

The final warrior entered the room, walking calmly. Azenite watched him walk towards him and when they were four paces apart, Azenite ignited his saber and attacked with a swinging blow. The other rolled and ignited his sabers which were mounted onto his gauntlets. He then pounced on Azenite like a tiger and the duel began.
Azenite deflected and stabbed, but he was overwhelmed by his opposition's fast fury. The Sith, who wasn't holding any saber merely swiped and that delivered a dangerous slash. He attacked using his left hand and his right for protection. Azenite analyzed his opponent and gave a strong blow at the legs. The Sith jumped and stabbed Azenite from above, knocking him down.
As Azenite was heavy in weight, he rolled and made an effort to get up, only to be stabbed and sabered by his opponent. Azenite finally released a Force Push, which made the duelist fly.

The Emperor got up and held up his hand to stop. The duelist de-ignited his saber and walked over to Azenite. The Emperor spoke, 'You, warrior, have proven yourself to be the Bespinian Sith I had seen in my dream. I have a job for you.'
The Sith tossed his head to let the hood fall back and revealed his face. He wore a black band to cover his nose, mouth and his lower face. His eyes were green, maybe greyish. His hair were black and stood up. He had a young look to his face. 'I am Sabreclaw, they say.' said the warrior, 'Assign me!'
The sun shone brightly as Jaden exited his hut. His apprentice was already mingling in the market. Some moments later, Jaden was in a wooden lift, trying to get to the Mayor's chamber. As the lift stopped, he entered a room. The Noghri mayor stood talking to Mordale beside a wide window. The room was lush-green and decorated with plants and trees. Mordale's head turned towards Jaden, then back to the mayor.
Jaden followed his example and ignored him. 'Mayor, I hope we will get enough cover here, we are hiding from Imperials.' he said.
'Imp... what? Out of mind! Where other man? Why hide, you?' replied the Noghri.
'Uh, my apprentice is buying something from the market... We have to hide because...' Jaden's sentence was completed by Mordale, 'because you got into trouble and had to run away from Tatooine, didn't you?'
Jaden sternly turned back to the Noghri when a group of Noghri warriors broke in, huffing and gasping.
'Trouble! Trouble! Brothers, die! White people kill!' their leader said.
'What?' the mayor thunderously yelled. 'Yes! They now black people! And y-yellow thing on head!' the squad leader gasped.
'Imperials!' both brothers said at once. 'Where?' asked Mordale.
'Away! At new house! Way... uh... Wayland!' the leader replied enthusiastically.
'What do the Imperials want at Wayland again?' Jaden asked in a tone of exhaustion. 'Forget that! We must help!' said Mordale, 'You have your padawan, right? We must go to their aid!'

Jaden ran to the 'spaceport', escorted by his apprentice. Mordale's Slave II, which he had borrowed from Fett was already up into the air. Jaden got into his transport, and hundreds of Noghri warriors entered behind him. When the transport was full, Jaden closed all doors and took off for Wayland.

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Episode 38: The Defense of Wayland

A cold wind blew on the planet of Wayland. A pleasent, sub-tropical planet, but battle ravaged. Ever since the First Empire, the planet had been fought for. First by the Empire, then by the Republic, the Remnants, and culminating in the Noghri.
It's vast resources and secret locations proved it to be a good place for settling, but unfortunately, nobody ever did, atleast for long.

Jaden's transport landed soon after the Slave II . The ramps unfolded and the Noghri warriors massed out. Other ships were landing, Rebel Reinforcements. Jaden and Foge came last and rushed to the Noghri Commander standing on a battlement. The wall was about four miles away from New Nystao, the main city of Wayland and was probably built in ancient times.
Jaden walked up the adjacent stairs and to the Commander. 'Looks like the party began early.' said Jaden, looking out to the scarcely vegetated plain ahead.
'The guests have arrived, it's time for the food, drinks and dance.' replied the Commander. 'Your Strength?'
Jaden turned to the army. 'Five hundred Noghris, I think. The Rebels have provided two-hundred more, I think. How much is that?'
'One thousand five hundred. We had two waves, weak attempts. We expect the next wave soon, and our scouts tell us this is going to be gigantic.' The Commander looked at Jaden. 'We're outnumbered one to five.'

Mordale was boosting morale and shouting battle-cries. He flew to the battlement where Jaden was standing. Jaden explained it all and Mordale didn't reply. A soft click and his internal visor went red. Mordale picked up miniature heat amounts way ahead. He switched to normal and zoomed in. On the horizon, the Black Army was advaning and the roofs of two AT-ATs was seen. Soon, more and more rows appeared and five AT-STs followed. Swoopers were zipping away, overtaking the troops. 'They're here.' he said.
Jaden turned to the Army and shouted, 'Alright! Fight in the name of Nystao!' A great roar and cheers followed and the battlements were slowly filled with soldiers. Vanguards set up themselves in trees and bushes, prepared for an attack from behind. The rocketeers set themselves and targetted the large, grey looming mechs. Jaden and Mordale stood still. Foge and Mordale's companion were somewhere else in the army. The Commander's face looked brutal an suddenly he cried out loud and drawing his blade in the left hand, he fired with his right hand.

The battle began as the forces clashed. Swoopers were killed first by vanguards, who mingled with the army. The Jedi ignited their lightsabers and leapt into battle. As the Imperial army spread into the battle, the rockettroopers took to air and concentrated on Mordale. Mordale was was locked in an air battle, slaughtering rockettroopers. On the ground, the Noghri jumped from the battlements and attacked the stormtroopers. The mechs were intimidating, though. Many Noghri fled at the sight of the grey monsters. AT-STs scampered like wild ostriches across the battlefield, firing at the age-old wall and aiming for the city.
AT-ATs bombarded the plain with laser fire. The rocketeers aimed and fired. The rockets hit the mechs, but only after emptying three-fourths of enemy rockets did the AT-AT alast slump onto the temperate land. Jaden sabered and waded his way through the thick army, and his padawan stayed ground and defended blows masterfully.

The battle was thick and no army seemed to win, though both armies were dwindling in numbers and ammo. Four AT-STs were down by now and one AT-AT walked, burned, but up. Mordale had finished the rockettroopers and swooped into the Imperials like a bird of doom. Jaden had killed many and suffered many blows, but still cut though all. The Noghris had cleared most of the enemy army, but to their misfortune, another wave of the Imperials rushed in, with their last AT-AT.

The Noghri had given up hope and cowered onto the walls. Jaden went back to the battlement. He stood tall against the Noghri like a ruling, battle-ravaged freedom fighter. He cried, 'Nystao!' again and looked away. A Noghri body lay on the battlement where he had stood an hour and a half ago. He sprinted there, to find the Commander breathing his last. The Commander looked at Jaden slowly, but grimly. 'You fought well, and defended the city well...' he said. 'But I'm sorry. We have lost. New Nystao is doomed. You will forever be remembered by the...' He never managed to complete his last words.
Anger stirred up in Jaden as he stood and scornfully looked at the opposing army.
'You will pay...' he said, grinding his teeth.

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Episode 39: The Shadow of the Dark Side

Mordale flew up and picked up a rocket launcher from a dead Rebel soldier. He fired it into the black army and an explosion took place. Several troops ran like fish in water and some were flung into the air by the blast. The AT-AT began firing and the sky was filled with lasers, green, blue and red. Mordale deflected shots in the thick of battle and swung his saber like a wild monkey. There were few Noghri left, but they fought valiantly.
The dead comrades were covered in a white cloak and carried to be cremated. The wounded were sent to hospitals in New Nystao. Jaden had dissapeared in the firefight. Mordale flew up and dropped stormtroopers from the sky. He chose a good piece of land, infested with stormtroopers and rained bolts from his blaster pistols. Then he fired his deadly back-missile, a must for every Mandalorian Armour. The rocket flew blazingly at the stormtroopers and caused a ton of damage.

Foge and Mordale's companion sliced through the innumerable soldiers of their opponent. Foge was struck by a blaster and as was distracted, took another in the arm. He fell down and some Noghri carried him away. Mordale's companion, though, was relentless and demonstrated his mastery of the Force and his lightsaber.
Mordale flew onto the AT-AT and fired at the mechanical monster. But the bolts were useless. He pulled a ARC trooper towards him, stole his rocket launcher and dropped him from the top. He fired the launcher at the head of the AT-AT. A great ball of fire came up and the cockpit was ravaged by the blast.

Mordale found himself waking up in the AT-AT debris, surrounded by Noghri. He couldn't understand what had happened, but memories shot back into his mind. He looked around and got up from the debris. The plain which had seemed lively and beautiful six hours ago was now smoking and littered with dead bodies, fires and debris. His armour was badly burned and scarred. Marks were there all over his body. 'Maybe now I'm equal with Boba...' he thought.
He got up and asked the Noghri, 'Where is everybody?'

One of them replied, 'War kill everybody. Nobody here now.' Mordale zoomed in his visor and took a good look around. 'Where's Jaden?' he asked. 'Captured.' answered a Noghri of higher rank.
'What do you mean he's captured?'
'It is so, unfortunately...'
'What are you guys waiting for? Let's get him!'
Mordale got onto a speeder and some other Noghri followed him over the plains towards the pair of dreadnoughts taking off.
Jaden opened his eyes. He was in a cell, the blaring red wall in front of him told him that. He got up and rubbed his aching back. He groped about his cloak, but their was no lightsaber, no blaster. Jaden banged his fists against the wall, but that only got his fists burned. The wall above was red too, but the floor and three sides of the wall were shiny, glossy metal.
Jaden walked about his cell, wondering what to do. His forms of escape were blocked, his mind was panicky, he wasn't himself. He slumped down and covered his head.
After an hour, Jaden heard something. At first, it was faint, but there was some radio chatter, faint but surely. Just when he thought he was hallucinating, the wall above Jaden switched off, revealing a glossy metal roof. Jaden's rage was building. The dark side was seizing him. He began to shake, and then shook wildly. His face was stern and finally he erupted. In a frenzy, he kicked,punched and ravaged the walls about him. It was in this frenzy that the X-Saber dropped out. Jaden looked at it and picked it up. A horrible grin smeared itself on his face. A grin which marked a return to the dark side.

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'I assure you, I am no mere bounty hunter.'

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