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Old 07-19-2004, 03:02 AM   #81
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Very good.Surprised that Jaden went back to the light side.Keep it coming


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Old 08-12-2004, 07:25 AM   #82
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Episode 40: Sabreclaw's Blitz

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Sabreclaw flew over Coruscant in his sleek Y-Wing. It was a bit hard to control, but it was worth it. The commotion and noisy ambience of any Coruscantian day was in the air. Ships and speeders flying miles over the surface, towering scrapers reaching the sky and and holo-screens around everywhere. But it was not for sight-seeing that Sabreclaw was here. He had to capture and bring a bounty hunter, equppied with two deadly lightsabers.

It didn't take him long to find his target. The Coruscant Residential and Citizen Directory helped a lot. He couldn't believe the bounty hunter's foolishness to be caught in the directory. Unfortunately, the duelist's spying skill was outmatched by his prey. Blasters fired across his ship. Sabreclaw twisted and turned and tried to keep control of his ship. The Coruscant Police were alerted and the chase began.

Verantos' ship zoomed into turbo and launched a homing missile onto Sabreclaw. The police saw this and they launched homing beacons and Magnetic Grappling Hooks onto the ship. Verantos mastered the ship skillfully and evaded the grappling hooks from the cops and the homing beacons. Sabreclaw, meanwhile ducked and made a reverse roll, so as to get behind both the cops and Verantos. The missile followed him, still. Sabreclaw made a complete roll and turboed across a cop, missing him by an inch. The rocket hit the cop and Sabreclaw launched a few dumbfire rockets after Verantos.

Due to the distraction of the missiles, Verantos was cuaght by a hook. His ship lost control as he lost height and was attached by more hooks. The rockets hit Verantos, shooting the limping ship upwards. Verantos shifted to the turbo gear, but it was no use, the Grappling Hooks were drawing him closer to the cop ships. More grappling hooks flung out to the ship like an octopus catching it's prey. Finally, Verantos' ship was sandwiched between two cop ships. The three ships connected to each other and the cops veered towards the police headquarters.

Sabreclaw sighed and shook his head. He targeted two homing missiles on the cops and launched them. Meanwhile, Verantos slashed through the cockpit window with his lightsaber and jumped off ship. Five seconds later, two blasts behind him plummeted him to the ground at double speed. Sabreclaw turboed and caught Verantos. Verantos sliced through the glass with his saber. Away, his ship, burned and damaged at the sides lost altitude and crashed with a large explosion.

Verantos entered the cockpit and grabbing Sabreclaw, threw him out. Sabreclaw clung to the cockpit and got in. His mounted lightsabres ignited. He stabbed Verantos, who ducked and the saber damaged the controls. Verantos ambushed from below with his sabers and made Sabreclaw lose his balance. Sabreclaw gave a small cry and fell below. His hood unfolded and his body made a somersault, so that Sabreclaw falls facedown.

Unfortunately, Verantos wan't particularly out of the mess either. The controls of his burned and he was losing air. As soon as the nose reached a ninety-degree angle with the ground, the ship gained speed and plummeted to the ground. Verantos was held onto the cokpit by the air force flowing at him. Something then hit him and the engines burned, Verantos jumped and rolled away just seconds before the ship crashed nosedown and was fractured badly.

With his sheer sense, Verantos ducked a surprise attack from Sabreclaw. The latter held up his sabers and jeered at Verantos. Verantos stepped back. 'I assure you, I'm no mere bounty hunter.'

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Old 08-12-2004, 07:34 PM   #83
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Old 08-17-2004, 07:23 AM   #84
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Episode 41: Prisoner of the Empire

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Sabreclaw roared and pounced on Verantos. Verantos had enough of this and used his sabers to perform 'Barrier' defense. The deadly sabers cut off Sabreclaw. Sabreclaw wasn't surprised, however. He had been warned of this. He threw away his gauntlets and wore a new pair, with lightsabers.

Verantos went on the offensive and dealt some heavy swings around Sabreclaw. His newfound playmate stepped back, pretending to defend with his sabres. Verantos combined both sabers and engaged in a Kata. Sabreclaw gasped and leaped into the air. He pulled out his comlink and tuned in to the Imperial Coruscant Guard. When he touched the ground, he found Verantos was charging at him.

By now people had gathered around. Sabreclaw used Force Push to hold back Verantos, just when he was inches away. With graceful movements, Sabreclaw silently jumped from ledge to platform to rooftop and hid in a dark corner. Verantos got up and gave chase to Sabreclaw, onl to be caught be two dozen stormtroopers.

Verantos' sabers flew back to his arm as he broke free. Then he turned back to thrust his sabre into a few stormtroopers. He uttered a small cry and fell down. Sabreclaw stood behind him, his sabre ignited and held in a Strong postion. 'You're coming with me.' he said. The stormtroopers picked up Verantos, who was out cold, and took him away. Sabreclaw put on his hood, turned off his saber and put it inside.
'Master Azenite will be pleased.' he said to himself.
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Away in a penal colony in Middle Troxican Desert, Jaden was forced into his cell. His belongings, including his beloved X-Saber were stripped off him and he was made to wear prison suits. The Semi-Hazard Trooper locked the door and went away. Jaden murmured something under his breath.
'Whatchue murmurin' there, all-alone?' a voice came from the back. It was a Human, aparently a skilled veteran in the hard life of the galaxy. Jaden did not reply, but he strode forward and found that the large, dark cell was crowded with may other prisoners. The man who spoke drew Jaden towards him. The man was atleast seven foot tall, and extremely muscular.
'Why all the people in one cell?' Jaden asked. 'What?' the man asked.
A rodian came forward. 'All criminals are... are kept in... in... in group cells before they... they're sent to personal c-cells.' he quivered.
The man was not done though. He picked up Jaden by the collar. jaden jumped away and shot out a stream of two dozen fireballs at the victim. At the end, Jaden slumped down, exhausted. The victim was ashes.
The rest of the prisoners stared in wonder and fear. When Jaden turned towards them, they shrank back. 'Let that be a warning to the rest.' Jaden said out loud.

After a few hours, Jaden and his group were set out for labour in the hot, scorching desert. Tied with laserlocks, the prisoners had to break rocks, of the hard, Troxican quality. The prison was covered inside a ring of peaks. The desert strecthed for miles. And outside the Troxica desert, the Troxica Snow capped the plaent, eliminating any lifeform, save those who come prepared.
Away on the near horizon, a ship came flying in and unloaded a new batch of prisoners. Among them, was Verantos. Verantos, and a few others were sent to Jaden's cell. Verantos worked beside Jaden. 'What're you in for?' Jaden asked. 'Nothing. Just angered the Emperor a bit, and I'm sent to heavy labour prison camps.' Verantos answered. 'And you?'
'Me, well I was the former Emperor. This... This Azenite robbed me of the title. I'm skilled in the force, if you want proof. I supported the Noghri at Wayland, so I guess that's what I'm in for.'
Verantos thought. He then asked Jaden, 'Skilled in the force, huh? Wanna try breaking out?'

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Old 08-17-2004, 08:07 AM   #85
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Old 08-24-2004, 06:48 AM   #86
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Series 5

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Series 5 Begins!


Jaden is sent to Prison, for being the Emperor's rival. Verantos is temporarily sent there too, and the two end up making plans for escape. Meanwhile, the Dark Emperor Azenite plots to recruit Verantos as a deadly weapon of the Empire. Exar Kun is on a hunt for the Jedi, seeking the likes of Mordale Korr, Kyle Katarn and Luke Skywalker...

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Old 08-28-2004, 07:23 AM   #87
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Episode 42: Exar Kun's Investigation

Kun walked through a corridor of the Vahec Castle. He soon entered the throne room, which was empty. Only once had the Emperor sat there, when the Emperor was crowned. Now, it remains empty. Kun entered the docking bay through a turbolift.
The castle was a tall structure, which had an enormous base, but a tower on the top which ended in a point. The Castle was shaped roughly like a primitive jar, and there were multiple towers on the upper surface of the base. the docking bay lay where the central tower began, on the surface of the palace base.
Lying in a room connected by a long, wide corridor to the docking bay was the Starione, Ku's ship. It was based on the 'Crane' chassis, but was a bit wider and allowed fast turns. Kun hopped in and shot out at low speed through the corridor. He then sped up and took a fast, sharp and deadly turn at the docking bay and headed out. Then he pushed to full speed and he was out of the atmosphere in no time flat.

Soon, the Sith Lord exited hyperspace and entered the jungle of Yalara. A smile came to his face as he remembered the ancient species, a species that only demands peace. He had other intentions, though. He landed at the landing pad and exited the ship. A few Noghri officials came forward, but Kun's very presence set them on fire. They cried for help and as people poured water on them, the water flew elsewhere. The Noghri died in the fire.
It didn't take much Noghri thinking to realise that this new person is no friend. The Mayor strode forward, then backed in horror. Exar Kun's eye caught the cowardly Mayor. He went ahead, caught the Mayor and stood face to face.
'Well, Mayor. I suppose your little planet is home to some Jedi, is it not?' he asked.
The Mayor's reply was feeble, 'Y-Yes. Y-You are... Exar...'
'Kun!' The Sith replied. 'The one and only. Tell me where the Jedi are and I will trouble your meek kind no longer.' His hands where getting hotter already.
The Mayor told Kun all about the incident when the Jedi came and he said that he held no responsibility on the Jedi. Kun, who was not exactly the kindest of people, beheaded the Emperor by using the force to grab a long, sharp knife and slice it through the mayor. And during all this process, he never even used his hands.
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Kun next flew to Wayland, but he wasn't alone. He was spearheading an Imperial bombing run on New Nystao. Kun, however was playing the pre-raid spy at the city. He searched through alleys, buildings, computers and anything he can get his hands on, to find out that three Jedi had arrived before. One is, however missing, and the other two are leaving shortly.
Kun signalled his fleet to stay back and seek cover in a nearby planet. Kun proceeded to the rock-carved Docking Bay. The Bay was enormous, and carved from rock in a large depression. There were hallways, passages and rooms in the rocks, and on the floor, were the parked ships. The Bay was divided into three parts. The Main Depression was carved in reddish, dark rock and was surrounded in greenery and foliage. No ships lay here, only a great crowd rushing around their business.
The General Depression was thrice the size of the large Main. It was divided and forked into many parking slots for ships. The counters claimed that the General holds upto a hundred X-Wing sized ships.
The Private Depression was a bit away from Main. It was also lower than the Main and was surrounded by greenery and foliage, leaving only a hint of the carved rock.

Kun was in the Public Transport 9 Slot of the General. According tothe information he had collected, this was the slot where he should find his targets, the Jedi. The Traffic was low, because of the imminent Imperial danger, but the Public Transports were Empire-approved, and worked at Wayland. Kun pulled his hood put on his shawl to cover his face. He was scorching, but he had no means of cooling. Many gazed at him in wonder, to see a traveller in such hot garments, that too in a sub-tropical climate. Inside, he felt much cooler inside.
Inquiring passengers, he made his way to belowdecks and found the Cargo Bay. A passenger was putting his equipment down. Kun made a stealthy approach.
'I suppose you let the Service Droids put these things down...' Kun said. The passenger was startled and turned back. He stammered something, then shook his head and walked away. Kun caught him by the shoulders.

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Old 09-27-2004, 02:24 AM   #88
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Episode 43: The Inquisition of the Jedi

Kun entered the throne room, pleased with himself. He had an evil smile on his face. Azenite turned.
'What is it?' he asked.
'Well, my apprentice. I had carried out a good deal of investigation during my absence and my efforts are not in vain.' Kun stepped closer, 'There are three Jedi, and one of them is the brother of the rat, Qollous. They seem to share some sort of hatred, or enmity. Not rivalry, mind you.'
'How is that helpful?'
'Ah, yes. We can take advantage of their enmity. Of course, Jaden is sentenced to penal settlement on Troxica, but we must be wary. I had been mentor to him, for a while. He is rash and will do anything to get out. A fine specimen of inter-galactic vermin.'
'Where are the Jedi?'
'Here they come.' Kun stepped aside, and contacted an Imperial Officer via comlink. The officer acknowledged and brought in the three captives. He then left.

The three captives were rugged and without armour or weapons. One of them hung his head, as if sulking, or cowering. The Emperor's metallic voice boomed, 'Where are the Jedi?'
Nobody stirred. Foge raised his eyes to get a better view at the Emperor.
Azenite mercilessly raised his hand and choked the first Jedi. The Jedi remained quiet and did not utter a word. Azenite removed the grip and greeted the Jedi's landing with a rush of Fireballs. The Jedi flew back and became prey to Exar's elegant blade.
The Emperor turned to Foge. 'Do you know Jaden Korr?' The Emperor asked.
Mordale grimaced. Foge started, 'He was...' but was stopped by Mordale. Azenite's featureless helmet turned to Mordale.
'So you are the brother!' he thundered.
Foge stood petrified. Mordale looked up, filled with rage. In a blind frenzy, Mordale pounced on Azenite and attacked like a angered cat. And just like the cat's victim, Azenite brushed away the mad Jedi.
'I do not see your cause for being so insane,' Azenite turned to Foge, 'but you, are a worthy Dark Jedi.'
'No!' Mordale screamed like a disaster-struck banshee.
Foge looked expectantly at the mechanical Emperor.

'Join Me, Jedi.' said Azenite, holding out his hand. Foge stepped ahead brought out his hand to place it in Azenite's. Mordale got up. Foge's eyes shined. A slight smile spread on his face. The Emperor's helmet turned to a door on the left.
Suddenly, a guard flew from the right door and crashed on the floor. The Emperor pushed back Foge and went towards the guard. He was blackened and charred, a mark of an explosion. Instantly, a burst of blaster bolts flew from the right door.
Azenite got up and faced the door. Away, through the door, on a background of the setting Coruscant sun, was a famed bounty hunter in Mandalorian armour. Aiming for half a second, the silhouette fired a rocket at the Emperor. Azenite reversed the rocket's position with Force Push. The Bounty Hunter entered the room and setting some controls on his wrist, he took to the air. He gestured to the Jedi to follow him.
Mordale and Foge ran after Fett, but were stopped by Azenite's Force Push. In a desperate attempt, Foge released all of his thunder onto the Emperor. Azenite used his saber-lance to absorb the lightning and released a strong surge of Energy Pull. However, his concentration in the Jedi was so deep-rooted, he lost his balance after a rocket, courtesy of Boba Fett, hit his chest hard.

Mordale and Foge spin-kicked through the punctured glass and fell into Boba's ship, Slave II. Boba took the controls and left. Azenite informed the Army. The Slave II was fast, evading the Coruscant traffic and the chasing Imperials, but it took Foge's observation to make a simple discovery.
'Hey, wait. What's that shadow?' he asked, looking up, 'Great. A Star Destroyer is tracking us down. We'll never leave Coruscant alive as long as it covers the skies.'
'That Azenite turned out to be a tough nut, literally.' said Fett, 'We need to blast this destroyer off our way.'
'And how... do we destroy a Destroyer? We are completely bare of weapons.' asked Mordale.
Boba Fett punched in some buttons on the controls and a rack slid through the cockpit's back wall. On the rack were all sorts of weapons. Repeaters, Disruptors, blasters, rockets and lots more. The Jedi armed themselves and awaited for action.

'We're going in at full speed.' Boba said, pulling down the throttle.

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Episode 44: Escape

"I still don't see how it will work." Jaden said, as his thoughts of escape were pessimistic.
"Relax. You sneak into the armoury after that. I'll go and break the codes for the ventilation system, and plan a way to get us to the dock." Verantos explained.
"Alright, I'll get the weapons. I think it would be better to scout out an escape route before we actually do it. We don't want to blow it midway."
"Right. But Phase 1 is gonna take up a lot from us. Doing it twice..."
"We'll do it this evening. The escape will be tomorrow."
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Evening, Troxica Penal Camp

The cold, callous winds blew over the steel building, placed stratigically in the middle of an 'alley' formed by a great cliff. The snowfall was unusually low, but the mist had not subsided. Inside, however, more had been going around.

"Where did you get this comlink?" Jaden spoke from his cell, over comlink.
"Mind-tricked one of those dumb Stormtrooper Officers. Anyways, you ready?"
"Ready."
"Go!"

Jaden hung up and stepped next to the red laser constraint wall. He closed his eyes, which soon puckered up into a frown and concentrated hard. He held up his hand and then clenched it a bit. The pressure he put on the hand was tremendous, good enough to bend a sheet of iron. He then fell forward and shook his head in a shock.
He stood breathing heavily, then stood back at his former position. His comlink crackled.
"Phew. That's done. I'm outta this cell. Let's go."
"Wait. I can't get to the pad. It's too tough."
"What? Oh, Ok. I'll enter the code. Wait a while. Try if you must."
Jaden switched off his communicator and focused again, but satisfying sound of laser deactivating removed his focus. Jaden ran out to a hallway. In one of the recesses, he found Verantos bending over a computer system, looking intently at one of the screens.
"I'm out." Jaden informed Verantos.
"Good. Come here." Verantos sai motioned Jaden to come closer.
Jaden came up, to find Verantos shaking his head and punching the controls with his fist.
"Useless. We'll have to hack into the main system to make a path for ourselves. Fortunately, I took a map of the prison on this holovision recorder."
He looked away and held his hand straight, with the holo-recorder in his palm. The holovision image flickered out. It was a very complicated system. Lots of hallways, ventilation tubes, rooms and of course, Thousands of cells.
Jaden used his finger to track a path from their current location to the hangar. The path became highlighted and was zoomed into.
"Most logical path," Verantos offered, "but we will still have to get into that computer system.
"Where?"
"Elevator, two floors down. One straight, one right, and one straight hallway."
Jaden nodded and began his way.
"Wait."
Jaden Stopped.
"Armoury, remember?"
"Right."

After busting into the armoury, Jaden managed to make an X-saber, Verantos' sabers and a few blasters his own. After a trip through a ventilation pipe, he got to the Main Control Room, where Verantos was leaning upon a deck of controls, switches and screens.
Jaden got around a mound of dead stormtroopers and officers.
"I told you to leave some for me." Jaden reminded his companion.
Verantos didn't answer. After a few moments, he spoke, "Jaden, cover me, this'll take a while. The main controls are locked. Gotta find a code buried deep inside this computer."
"How long?"
"I dunno. It'll take more than a few minutes, though."
"You haven't alerted the entire army have you?"
"Hopefully not. Let's hope none of these stormtroopers were snitches."

It definitely took a while, as Verantos said. Jaden got bored often and practised with the dead stormtrooper armour. He used the force to get them up, walking and practised various saber moves. On his fifteenth attempt, he thumped on a wall and heard voices on the other side.
"What was that?" the familiar Stormtrooper chatter asked.
"Look Inside. There might be trouble." a human's voice spoke.
"Verantos, we have company!" Jaden informed as he bounced off the opening door. The stormtroopers chattered something and began shooting. Jaden blocked with his X-Saber. Unfortunately, another group of troopers rushed in. Then another. And so on, till jaden couldn't handle it.
Finally, Jaden heard the satisfying sound of the ventilation pipe clicking open. He jumped up, but Verantos was shot.
"Jaden!" Verantos yelled.
Jaden gave a sneer and his eyes were filled with malice.
"Too late, partner. The Empire has you now." He pulled out Verantos' lightsabres. "And look! I forgot to give you your favourite toy."
"Jaden! No!" the fallen Verantos yelled again.
"Alright. I'll take them. Besides, you don't look good with them." His expression turned to seriousness. "You will never go to the dark side. The dark side doesn't need you. Now rot." And so he crouched away through the pipe, evading blaster fire.
"I'll never forgive you, Jaden." Verantos mumbled as the Stormtroopers tied his hands and threw him to solitary confinement.

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Episode 45: A Sign To The Empire

"This must be stopped, it's going too far."Luke expressed as his concerned face made a frown.
Kyle sighed. "Maybe I can send spies to negotiate with the Jedi at Imperial Penal Colonies."
"Yes. Do that."
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The Slave II slowly docked horizontallly onto the floor of the Star Destroyer. Rooms away, an officer congratulated his quick wit. Mordale crept to the cockpit and used his sensing abilities. A bunch was stormtroopers marched towards the defeated ship. Boba was in no mood to compromise with the approaching party.
"Alright. Now we're in a tough spot. These Imperial ships are much more stronger than I figured. You too Jedi will have to hold off the stormtroopers. I'm blasting this ship."
"And how do you do that?" Foge asked.
"By placing detonators at the Ion Core, which should be back near the engines."
"So, we'll be escorting you..."
Shots fired at the Slave II. The barricaded heroes did not answer. Boba's anger for damaging his most prized possesion grew. He motioned one to three with his fingers and took to the air from the cockpit. Foge and Mordale nodded at each other and jumped out, lightsabres blazing around. The Imperial party dispersed and attacked from all directions, making sure that the Jedi's thin protection sabres wouldn't hit their bolts. Boba used his blaster pistol and a rocket launcher, when some dimwitted stormtroopers would gather up in one location. Boba flew swiftly and waited for the Jedi to catch up.

The bounty hunter pointed to the ground, meaning that the Jedi should stand ground and protect Boba, who was placing detonators all across the Ion Core, that fueled the great Destroyer. The Bridge was alerted and Hazardtroopers were sent in. The Jedi could do nothing but defend hastily and keep a watch on Boba Fett. After the detonators were placed, the Jedi sprinted through the halls to the docking bay. "Job isn't over. We'll have to disable the tractor beam." Boba said.
Mordale was in a hurry. He worried about Jaden. "No! The explosion might give us way." he explained.
"We don't have time! Those detonators work on time. We have a minute."
Foge jumped into the Slave II. Boba and Mordale followed. But at the last minute, the Slave got a holocam message. Boba clicked the button and a blue figure of an Imperial Officer flickered onto the screen.
"We have you. Those detonators have been traced and disabled. Our tractor beam prevents all modes of escape for you."
Boba looked at a screen on his wrist. Within seconds the floor shook as rooms away, the core exploded and the ion particles contained within flew in all directions. The metal interior stretched and bent and eroded away. The Imperials ran the sirens.
"They're spreading! The Ion!" Boba warned.
The fire and the explosion entered the bay after passing through one badly charred and decaled passageway. The fire covered Slave. The heat was all over the three passengers.
"Quick, or we'll ALL be blasted!" Foge yelled.
The bridge of the Destroyer broke away on the explosion. The Destroyer was breaking apart. It cracked into two, roughly across it's symmetry. With a yell, Boba fired the engines and broke away from the Tractor beam, and flew down, down to Coruscant. The Stingers assaulted the Slave, ready outside the Destroyer. Most evaded the falling explosions and debris, but a few unlucky ones had to fall. The Slave flew fast at top speed and as the Stingers chased, the Destroyer finally triggered the largest explosion, breaking into an enormous fireball. The Stingers fell victim to the expanding fire and the Slave was almost with them. It evaded them and didn't spend a moment to get into Hyperspace upon reaching space.

And upon the Coruscant Atmosphere, was a great disc of fire spreading, a preview sent by a burning soul to the Empire that no matter how great the evil, those who seek truth, no matter how small will always be victorious.

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Episode 46: Preparations

"You have all been called here, Jedi for the final battle is coming. The rebellion is slowly turning to the winning side and it won't be long before the Empire collapses. We would be ready for that, however. I have contacted with the Rebellion's top leaders and we have negotiated a plan. I have sent Master Thae, Master Xalicutas and Jedi Knight Herazas in a mission to attack top mineral mines across the galaxy. This would serve as a distraction as well as loss for the Empire. Of Course, This mission will be backed by an army of Rebellion troopers. We are leaving this base, once and for all. Your missions will be given. Each one of you, save apprentices will lead a Rebel team into battle. Mon Mothma has commanded a blitz to capture various planets across the galaxy, simulteanously. The Empire may know of our attack, but we will charge relentlessly. Till now the Rebellion and the Jedi have fought under shadows, cowering under the Empire's might. But not now. This time the outburst is humongous. This time, we will have the Empire. The Final battle is coming. Take courage, for with courage and hope, even the Emperor can be defeated."
The Jedi rose with cheers, filled with morale. They were now ready to bring the Empire to it's knees. Luke concluded his speech and began giving orders to each Jedi. Rebel Officers looked at the Jedi, with success in their eyes. Kyle and Luke were to lead the greatest Rebellion force on an attack to the Emperor's castle. On the same planet, thirty more squads would raid the Empire's soldiers. Rosh and others would go to Corellia. Verantos was present, and he was in one of the Coruscant parties. He had escaped a few weeks after Jaden and wanted both, the Emperor and Darth Qollous.
X-Wings and starfighters flew away like birds from the planet of Belkadan at full speed. The Rebellion was alerted and the war had begun.
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The Slave II docked at a spaceport on Kamino, lasers firing at Imperial Troops. Fett, Foge and Mordale exited the graceful starfighter and raided the facilities, cleansing them of Imperial troops. Fett found his apartment and opened it. His nostalgic memories shot him, but he shaked them away. He ahd stored a lot of ammunition and weaponry in the apartment before he left for his apartment at Coruscant. "Load up, we don't have time." he ordered. Foge and Mordale equipped themselves with small-scale weapons such as disruptors, blasters and pistols. After that, they exited and flew to the capital city of the Kaminoans, where the security district was located. Imperials began firing and the Slave II was bruised. In anger, it fired lasers and satchel charges, causing damage to the elegant Kaminoan architecture, but clearing the stormtroopers. Boba landed the ship at a spaceport near the Security District and infilitrated it. With much hindrance and lightsaber slashing, the three reached the turret and droid control HQ, where they defected the droids to their side and set the turrets to attack stormtroopers. The three were surronded, though. Imperials had got the entire area sealed and were preparing to drown the Jedi and Fett. The effecient Imperial tactics worked. With the help of a few rocket launchers and an air stroke, a great hole was created on top of the great dome-shaped building.
Foge and Mordale looked for exits, but they were sealed. The Imperials found it easy to take down droids and turrets whose tactics they knew. Soon, a starship connected it's hole to the dome's hole and it launched collected water at full speed and many others joined. The controls sparked and some blasted. The water level was rising. It had already reached the chest.
"Now what?" Boba asked. "The door controls are in the other building."
"Maybe we can get out through that hole," Foge suggested, pointing to the hole on the top.
"The Imperials know us. They know now we aren't ordinary foes. They'll have us fried if we go outside."
Mordale was looking at a ventilation pipe about halfway between the the top of the dome and the floor, till the water level went over his head. Boba took off his helmet and the three swam up to breathe. Mordale waded through to a pipe and jumped higher and higher to the ventilation pipe. He looked down to signal the other two, but Boba was already being drawn up by a grappling hook and Foge was jumping up.
The next batch of water made Foge lose his grip and he slipped off, hitting his head on another pipe as he fell and losing his consciousness.

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Episode 47: Death of a Demon

Fire and lasers flew all over the urban jungle of Coruscant as the Rebel strike-force met heavy resistance. Verantos was under command of another Jedi and together they were unstoppable. Verantos clearly wiped out any opposition he met with very little effort as he slowly got more and more attached to the X-Wing granted to him. Little did he know, it wasn't going to last. Just seconds after he commented on the efficiency of his starfighter, it was shot by a stinger and was plummeting to the ground at full speed. He opened his canopy and ejected just before the X-Wing smashed into pieces to the debris.
Overhead, the battle was furious. He ran into a shield factory to avoid the rain of lasers and attempted to find a way out. His entrance was blocked by debris. He walked around the sleek interior and all around. The booming sound of crashing starfighters and lasers sounded somewhat muffled. Soon enough, Verantos heard a familiar voice.
"Wimping out, huh?" It said.
Verantos looked up. Atop a ledge stood Sabreclaw, in his menacing dark, avatar. His glared with his eyes and jumped down, his eyes turning to malice.
"Cowardice, too is a part of warfare." replied Verantos.
"The weak part." Sabreclaw corrected.
After a session of the stare-game, Sabreclaw lit his mounted sabers. Verantos took out his, unignited.
"Let's finish this."
With those words, the Sith Apprentice pounced on Verantos. The latter ducked and kicked Sabreclaw, who fell down hard. Without delay he got up again and engaged in a flying kata over Verantos who kept his adversary away with a good dose of Force Push. Enraged, Sabreclaw roared out stabbed Verantos' upper waist. Verantos dodged and ignited his lightsabers, detached them and made a few slow, but perilous swings at Sabreclaw. His adversary had the advantage of fast stabbing and slashing and waisted no time in an attempt to behead Verantos. He ducked in time and cut off Sabreclaw's left gauntlet. Sabreclaw retreated his left hand and a gauntlet slipped in as his distracted the Jedi with a slashing attack. The duel was long and eventually tired both out. They were not stopping, however. Both were agile, intelligent and were masters with the laser blade. Sabreclaw faltered and inserted his saber deep inside a control panel, which erupted in sparks and flames and burst. Verantos, who made a surprise attack from behind fell victim to this explosion as Sabreclaw fled. He watched from a distance, the burning soul of Verantos in his eyes.
Eventually, Verantos was freed and realised that a vaccuum tube was opened due to the blast. The hunt then began, as each eyed every nook and corner for their adversaries. They met again, soon enough. Verantos dropped down a pipe onto a conveyor belt and Sabreclaw started it before jumping onto the conveyor. The belt rolled as another duel broke out between the two. Among the debris and minerals, red and yellow sabers flashed, attempting to eat some flesh. Verantos switched quickly from slow, powerful strokes, to the faster kata-like swings. The laser and blasts from outside were more loud. The wall beside the belt smashed as a stinger fell, but the two were not stopping. This was a duel to the end. It took them from room to room, until eventually, Sabre claw fell, his arm sliced and his shoulder burning. As he got up, he lunged at Verantos, who dodged, sending Sabreclaw at a very high speed through the vaccuum tube. He was sucked in, too and zipped past. He looked intently for signs of his enemy such as lightsaber decals, and suffered many injuries as the tube turned suddenly. The tube opened up in the Coruscant sky, where Sabreclaw was speeding upwards. Verantos shot out of the tube, and sped upwards like a bullet. He used some force, logic and co-ordination to fall faster and nearer his target. They fell on two crashing speeder and ended up in adebris junkyard. Sabreclaw fell out, nearly dead and was followed by a limping Verantos, blackened by the smoke.
Sabreclaw looked back in admiration for his opponent's victory. He nodded and tossed his head back in pride and passed away quietly. Verantos leaned over the body and paid his honour to the worthy adversary and hodge-podge burial. He looked back, all alone in the falling street, under the violent shades of the setting sun.
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The Emperor received a holographic message, It was of poor quality as it was done during wartime at Yavin IV. Exar delivered his report in it. "The Tide has turned Emperor, Now we will strike. Our forces have been set and a surprise attack will push back the advancing Rebels. Spacetroopers are put into action. Belkadan is under siege by the Sith and we need your help, Emperor. I will return to Coruscant to manage details. General Orwe, Tygere and Nam should help in the Belkadan assault."

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Episode 48: A Heavy Loss

The Chaos ensued in the Galaxy which would probably never know proper peace and understanding. The Empire frantically tried to push the swarming Rebels frantically as more and more people across the Galaxy defected to the Side of Light. With the inspiration by the Jedi, the Rebellion slowly spreads it's arms around the Outer Rim, gathering as many planets to their cause as possible. The Planets now stand united on the shoulders of either the Rebellion or the Empire. Some Planets remain neutral, and some, are enveloped in an air of war and destruction.
The Rebellion strikes Coruscant, the heart of the Galaxy, only in vain. The thick Imperial security neutralizes the Rebels and expand their powers and fortify them towards the Rims away.

One planet that is probably the control for the battle, is Belkadan. It's tropics and beautiful sunsets are soon to be spoiled by war. The Sith and the Jedi battle day and night, as blasters and lightsabers flash everywhere.
Another one, is Kamino. The distinguished planet is often ignored and forgotten, making it a perfect spot for the Imperials to ground their Turret and Droid Control Systems. With the flip of a switch, all Imperial-made droids and turrets would freeze and their memories would be erased. Boba Fett, a bounty hunter born on this ocean planet seeks to destroy the systems and turn off what could be one of the Empire's limbs in this War.


"Foge!" Mordale cried as the apprentice fell. The water level was rising and Foge had gone deep in. Mordale sighed, took a deep breath and dived in. Boba noticed him go off and zipped to the pipe.
Mordale was underwater and looked around. Foge was sinking as if lifeless, until he reached the bottom. Mordale grabbed him, put Foge's arm over him and swam upwards steadily. The water rate had increased and the unforgiving water was getting nearer to the pipe. Mordale mustered all his strength and with the Force, shot away from the water and into the pipe. He scrambled with Foge through the pipe. There was light at the other end and it was open, probably by Boba.
And then Mordale's greatest fear came alive. Water had entered the pipe. He crawled faster, fastening his grip on Foge and when he was a couple of meters from the exit, the great rumbling began and the water flushed out Mordale. He was now outside and in a shadow of the building. He cowered there for a while and then his comlink beeped. It was a message from Boba.
"Done. But the turrets and droids will function for... 24 hours."
"Well done," Mordale replied, "Now what?"
"Now we go to Coruscant."
"Are you insane? Foge is unconcious, and Coruscant is becoming a warring hellhole!"
"Best opportunity to topple the Emperor."
"And Foge?"
"Drop him at Yalara. Those Noghri will appreciate it."
"You can't be serious."
"I am. The Emperor started all this and the Jedi will stop at nothing to kill Darth Horfrost."
"He is invincible!"
"Not so. I had talked Rebels before. There is a flaw in his armour. A well aimed stab at his lower-right waist will eliminate his shield. That way, he'll be easier. Anyways, I'm going to Coruscant, like it or not."
With that he cut communication and Mordale began sneaking for a ship.


Jaden landed his old stinger at Belkadan and looked out, with a smirk on his face and destruction on his mind.

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Old 12-04-2004, 07:03 PM   #94
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The words best fan-fic ever come to my mind.You are now officially my favorite fanfic writer.Ecore my good man Encore i must read more of this story.For this story i am eternally endebted to you lol.


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Episode 49: The Wraith

That's high praise, Master Jaxu. But you should really look for more fanfics. Mine is but a feeble attempt of theorising what happened Jedi Academy's uncanny ending. Still, Thanks.
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Battle ensued upon the jungle planet of Belkadan. Here, the Jedi and the Imperials had much more face than red-crested jaguars attacking from the trees. The birds had flown long ago and now the forest burned as lasers and missiles flashed from one point to another. From forest clearings to ruined buildings, all was laid waste in the war.
Meanwhile, high above a cliff, Jaden had invited trouble. His sniper laser had picked off one of Exar Kun's best warriors and Kun himself was sure of what he had sensed earlier. Darth Qollous was on the planet.
Exar was onto the cliff in mere seconds and had an unpleasant air around him. His face spelt death, onto Qollous. Darth Qollous himself was not afraid. He knew he would have to face Kun someday. He always wanted to face this smart mentor, feared warrior and unfirgivable sinner.
This time, it was different. Qollous' opponent was truly a force to be feared. Only the unlucky have the massive relentless power of the juggernaut. And Qollous, the daredevil was off to challenge him.
Qollous ignited his X-Saber and performed some quick practice strokes. Kun broke out in a grin. He stood alone, a blaster pistol and lightsaber had his belt, on the parched clifftop. Qollous eyed his opponent carefully, up and down. Kun simply stared callously at Qollous' eyes. Finally Kun broke the silence.
"You know my strength. You do know what messing with me is like. But relax, I'm not killing you easy. My apprentice will be here any moment. He will finish you. I will merely have to keep you busy till then. What a shame."
"Now, it's a fight to death, Kun."
Qollous let loose his anger and rushed through the dusty, parched ground towards Kun. Within seconds, Kun unleashed his saberstaff and the two broke out into a frantic duel. Jaden had the advantage of four blades, but Kun was a mastermind tactician and his speed was near impossible. Jaden was overwhelmed by the dark fury and caused an earthquake, breaking the ground to make a rift heading for Kun.
Kun, who was wiser, jumped and with a few quick moments of his hand, Force Fireballs flew out like lasers from the rift. Jaden was caught in the fire and rocketed to the sky. He launched his own hail of fireballs, and the pleasant clifftop turned into a raging inferno.
Kun dodged the fireballs and utilised his force abilites well. Using his Speed, he was all around Jaden, who was confused. Jaden landed back onto the ground, blackened and torn. He was caught unaware by Kun, who sliced off Jaden's left hand. Qollous yelled and managed to scratch Kun and then burn him with a mix of lightsaber throws and fireballs. Kun stumbled, but used his immense Force Push to keep Qollous away. Qollous absorbed his energy. He had gone too deep into the Dark Energies now. Too far to be stopped. Kun made a backflip only to be hurt by the X-Saber. Kun restarted a duel, but Jaden sliced the other's saberstaff. Kun was aghast. Now he had a reason to stay away. He turned on his comlink.
"Emperor, Jaden is here. He's..."
The static was too interrupting. But Jaden had fallen for the Dark Lord's trap. Kun jumped up and kicked Qollous. Qollous was weakened and impaired and Kun's force push threw him straight to the edge of the cliff. He hung on for dear life while the sinister foe looked on from above. Jaden's hand was loosing grip, but he jumped up and unleashed thunder onto Kun. Kun pulled Jaden and punched him in the face. He then pushed him and repeated the process. He was manipulating Jaden.
Qollous was angry, and a sudden surge of energy shot him past Kun's barriers to finally slash Kun's hand and char his abdomen. Kun fell back and unleashed his own heart-carving lightning. Qollous screamed and kneeled. His body's energies depleted with his health as the Dark Lord's twisted face flourished with the Force. In a meek attempt, Jaden force pushed, only to fall down, nearly lifeless. Kun turned back, assuming he was dead. He stood at the edge of the cliff, and spoke gloriously to the Emperor that the Belkadan situation had been taken care of and there was no need for him to come.
Jaden silently staggered up and fumbled. Kun turned back slowly. His merciful attitude betrayed his Sith energies and Jaden unleashed all of his energy in one massive Force Push. Kun tried to stop it, but it was too powerful. His eyes opened wide in shock as he flew from the cliff and down onto the forest canopy below. Jaden got up, his hand covering his burned abdomen. His face blackened and a grin spread on his face. A grin which showed that he had finished a job waiting for four years, he had finished Exar Kun.

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Dude i've read about 500+- fan fics and yours is one of the best.Keep em coming


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Episode 50: Redemption

The battle over Coruscant was unstoppable. Rebels and Imperials clashed agaisnt each other mercilessly, showing their battle finesse. Mercenaries, bounty hunters and scum raided the dead, scavenging their loot. But away from it all, the Emperor was in his underground lair, the most unthinkable area to find the Emperor. Rebel spies and recon were no less. They scouted out the Emperor's little burrow early on Master Skywalker, Master Katarn, Jedi Knight Mordale Korr and their Republic strike force were to lay siege to the Emperor.
Darth Qollous was not to be left out. After his long-awaited revenge againts Exar Kun, he had to claim his title of Emperor and Sith Lord by defeating Azenite. But as he flew his trusty Stinger to Coruscant, he mind bothered him. Jaden couldn't decide where to go. The Light, or the Darkness. He was to go back to light side, when one touch to the X-Saber reminded him why and how he was here. Because of the Dark Side,

Mordale entered the atmosphere with Rosh at his side as he turned towards the Emperor's Palace. The tall structure seemed intimidating, but Mordale was intimidated. He had all of his senses focused on the docking bay. Soon two more X-Wings joined them and they landed succesfully in the docking bay as the chaotic Coruscant sky still burned golden. Their welcoming committee too was poorly prepared. In rushed an entire group of stormtroopers. The Jedi didn't feel much in killing them, but at their end, awaited a surprise. The Series 2 Droideka. The sleek silver ball rolled out of the shadows at a high speed and blades popped out from it. Skywalker ducked just in time to avoid it. The Droideka assembled it's legs even before it landed. It stood high at 6'5", coloured in silver and black with red lights in a few places. On it's arms were dual high-speed blasters and it's body housed grenade-launchers, rocket launchers, disruptors and many more. Within milliseconds, it deployed it's protective shield, green and translucent. It's cloaking device activated and the droid became partially invisble, but covered by a slight white aura. The droid moved into a shadow and the Jedi stood in the Docking Bay, wondering the prototype's next move.
As the droid began firing, the Jedi separated like flies. Through a hidden security camera, Azenite watched the Jedi's plight as they were helpless against the seemingly invincible droid. nfortunately, the droid could never cope with a Jedi's intelligence. Mordale led the droid to a power conduit, and blasted it with a lightsaber. The conduit burst, badly scarring the tall droid.
But only the droids body was damaged. His functionality still worked and with the new experience, the droid learned to stay away from loose power conduits. He began firing homing rockets and the Jedi were in trouble. Force Push didn't work, as the rockets were pre-programmed and the droids shields were active, damaged, but active. The pursuit brought them back to the docking bay, whose doors were open, for some reason. The droid cornered the Jedi and readied his arsenal for an unforgiving attack, depleting all of his weapons. And then, Jaden's stinger came out of nowhere, ramming straight into the droid. Jaden had ejected just as the ship entered the bay. The droid was destroyed, but so was Jaden's ship.
"Jaden!" Kyle called.
Jaden paid no attention, but ran through the exit, seeking the Emperor's corpse.

The Emperor expected the raiding party, and was prepared to face them all. He decided to make some quick changes in plan to hinder the progress of the Jedi. Snipers shot from hidden slits and ventilation shafts. Azenite knew they were no match against the raiding party, but he employed them anyways.
Jaden reached the throne room first, after hundreds of slashes with his lightsabre. The Emperor was prepared for his arrival.
"It is you, Jaden. You have killed my master, have you not?"
"I made sure that he would think and suffer on his way down the cliff."
"Good, I wanted to get rid of him anyways. Jaden, you desire to be the Sith Lord."
"I want to see you dead!"
"No, you want the throne, you want domination. Am I not speaking the truth?"
Jaden remained silent.
"You want to be the Sith Lord, but let me tell you this. In the galaxy, the Sith will always be there, but with one Sith Lord. Either you, or me."
Jaden launched a surprise attack at the armoured foe and managed to only scratch his shoulder-cover. The Empeor's cold, callous laugh thundered through the great room.
"Do you think that your feeble X-Sabre could even penetrate my armour defenses? I am no weakling like you."
With that, Azenite threw his Sabrelance and attempted to behead Jaden. Jaden ducked a few times, rolled, jumped up high and delivered a head stab. The sabre instead bounced off the Emperor's helmet and lightly parried the incoming blow. Jaden spinned and in that crucial second, the Emperor Force Pushed Jaden. Jaden flew like a ragdoll, but got his balance right and made a quick landing on the throne. He setup himself and launched himself like a missile.
The Emperor on the other hand had pushed Jaden to welcome his new guests, the Jedi. As he turned to protect himself from any Jedi sneak attack, Jaden landed on the Emperor's shoulders and dug two blades into them. The Emperor was a hard nut and with a simple flick of his wrist, Jaden was somersaulted straight to the ground.
"So the deliverers of justice have arrived, have they?"
"Azenite, you can still be redeemed. Give it up, the Empire is no form of controlling the Galaxy." Master Skywalker said.
"Is it? And the Republic is? If that is true, why isn't the Republic here? Why did it fall like a pebble in front of my might?"
Verantos was not for words, however. He cried and penetrated straight into Azenite's leg. Azenite choked him and pushed him to a corner. Kyle, Luke and Mordale launched a co-ordinating attack the Emperor, who used a good mix of various Force Powers and Sabrelance skills to defend.

According to the plan, Mordale attempted to strike the Emperor's lower-right abdomen, but the Emperor had caught him in the act. He choked Mordale and tossed him away. As the lightsabers flashed and the fight grew, Jaden looked up. He sprang up and looked at the Emperor, who was defending each blow with pin-point accuracy. Jaden got up sprinted to the Emperor. Azenite was busy with the Jedi and didn't expect Jaden to rise. Jaden activated Force Speed and in one second, the second of judgement, he slashed the lower-right abdomen.
The Emperor gave a powerful Force Push from his body that broke the Jedi plans.
The Jedi stopped, reconsidering their strategy. Kyle took a look a Jaden, imagining how his tremendous power can be used. "We need Jaden." he whispered under his breath. Mordale got up. Verantos was up, too. The Emperor looked all around him, slowly, calculating every possible step his opponents could make. He had defense on his priority and in a sudden adrenaline surge, he sped like the wind and drove his sabrelance straight through Verantos. Verantos wailed, his eyes wide open. As the sabrelance went out of his body, he fell down kneeling and fell with his forehead at the Emperor's feet. The Jedi attacked from behind, but one sudden swing of Azenite's sabre ensured that some of the Jedi get their burns and bruises.
Calling forth the energy of the dark side, Darth Qollous absorbed the Force all around him. He soaked it all in to heal all fatigue, all damage and his power multiplied considerably. The Jedi felt weak and Azenite continued his stare in a ready pose.
Jaden unleashed his true strength, sending out thousands of arcs of thunder, fireballs and spreading pain. He was being possesed, by Exar Kun. Azenite was devastated. His armour was charred, broken and burning.
Darth Qollous tried to fend off the invading spirit, and nearly succeeded. At the end, he choked himself in a desperate attempt. The Jedi rushed to his aid and tried to make it stop, but the sheer power within him made a barrier. Jaden suffocated and fell limp. The spirit left and Jaden's will kept him alive. Kun had stolen all of Jaden's power and began transferring it to Azenite. Jaden got up and limped to the regenrating Azenite. Summoning all his power and his strength, he rooted the X-Sabre deep into Azenite's skull. Sparks flew from within and his death was imminent. Kun faded and Jaden slashed the body several times. He huge goliath eventually fell and his helmet toppled. His face was visible, but only parts. The rest was made up of metal and wires, which were now cut up.

Jaden himself fell back and breathed heavily. Verantos had seen all of this and with his last traces of the Force, he limped toward Jaden.
The Jedi assembled around Jaden's body. Jaden looked at them all carefully.
"Kyle..." he wailed.
"Yes, Jaden. You are redeemed."
"Luke..."
"You are welcome to undo your actions, Jaden."
Mordale took off his helmet and looked.
"Mordale... brother."
"You have been redeemed, brother."
"Thank you. Goodbye, everyone."
Verantos kneeled next to Jaden.
"Sorry I took your revenge, Ver..."
"It's alright. Just don't go, not now. The Jedi will have use for you."
Jaden looked at everyone carefully and asked one final question.
"Kyle, was I good, or evil?"
"You were good, Jaden. You were truly good."
"Thank you."
With that, he closed his eyes and departed his body peacefully.

It was a strange moment. The death of the Jaden and the sadness in the room as compared to the joy of victory in the X-Wings outside.



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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!WHY MUST IT END!?!?!?


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NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!WHY MUST IT END!?!?!?
Relax. I'm planning another fanfic on Knights of the Old Republic, another "what if" fanfic.


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Relax. I'm planning another fanfic on Knights of the Old Republic, another "what if" fanfic.
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Old 01-01-2005, 08:08 AM   #102
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Continue Jaden Korr!You could make a series!


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Old 01-03-2005, 06:34 AM   #103
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Die, die, die my darlin',
Shut your pretty eyes"

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Old 01-05-2005, 11:34 AM   #104
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wow man this stories were pretty good!!




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Old 01-29-2005, 12:25 AM   #105
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And so ends the story. Thanks to everyone who commented on the fanfic. 'twas great writing all of this and reading the feedback.

And finally, thanks for reading.

*Star Wars credits theme*


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Old 01-29-2005, 09:49 AM   #106
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VERY good.


I heard when you're a Super Mod, you get to kill people instead of banning them.
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Old 05-05-2005, 03:18 AM   #107
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Wow! Long time no see. I have just posted to update you guys. I've been working on a Jaden Korr - Darth Qollous SE version, including several fixes, spelling & grammar fixed etc. It will also contain every single comment to date. Finally, it will contain a Prologue detailing the storyline of Jedi Knight: Jedi Academy and an Epilogue, which will answer the questions of what happened after the story. I've included a little surprise in there.

The SE is fully formatted in Word and I hope to send it to several Fanfic databases across the web. (who knows? Maybe I can catch GL's attention )


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Old 05-11-2005, 08:00 AM   #108
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3D Stinger Model Unveiled

Stinger in flight:


Stinger in manoeverability mode:


Looks rather cool if you ask me. I'm currently also working on a Stinger wallpaper and and planning the "New Stormtrooper" as a skin for Jedi Academy.


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Old 05-15-2005, 08:01 PM   #109
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cool. today i checked my mail addy and found out your still posting on this thread. had to read very long to get back to the story, but very great.


Now I know their weak point!! - Without head, they are powerless
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Old 05-16-2005, 12:25 AM   #110
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still posting
The story's over, friend. If you're interested, check out 'The Superlaser Conspiracy'.


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Old 08-09-2005, 06:03 PM   #111
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Sabre,you are a fanfic GOD.


Go ahead. Impress me. Do something intelligent.
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Old 09-03-2005, 10:23 PM   #112
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BEAUTIFUL man PURE GENIUS SABRECLAW IS ALMOST EXACTLY LIKE ONE OF MY CHARACTER's I HAVE MADE PRETTY COOL HOPE TO SEE MORE OF THAT IN DA FUTURE THUMPS WAY UP!!!!!

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Old 09-08-2005, 01:41 AM   #113
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j..jayden korr dead nooooooooo

nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
why does it have to end like this jayden dead i love jayden but make a mod and maybe raven will make outta this a jk4

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Old 10-29-2005, 07:48 AM   #114
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Jaden Korr - Darth Qollous SE

After much delay, the Second Edition of Jaden Korr - Darth Qollous is finally online, at Fanfiction.net. Here's the usual, convenient linky.

The SE contains many spelling fixes and changes in chapter names, but the content is completely unchanged. Of course, I have a special .doc version of the story, (with a Comments section and Changes section under construction). If anybody wants that, e-mail me!

The SE is still being updated at Fanfiction.net, so keep checking!


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Old 12-18-2005, 07:13 AM   #115
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And that's a good story i say!


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Old 01-19-2006, 04:48 AM   #116
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Jaden Korr Darth Qollous SE is CANCELLED.

Yep, cancelled. For 3 reasons:

1. I could not find the time to update the fic.
2. The reviews there were not exactly favourable.
3. I don't see the point of it all.


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Old 01-20-2006, 07:34 PM   #117
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Hi Sabretooth...I have the .doc version of your story and it's really good....The fanfiction guys are @$$holes, most of them critisize your work and say it's garbage and then you read theirs and it's evem more crappy than what you wrote....don't let it get to you, the people out here loved your fic and I'm one of them...that is what counts...the people who love your writting are right here forget about those fanfiction scumbags they just hurt people because they want to....don't get discouraged



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That's ok, Lyla, but really I don't see the point of making a clone of this fanfic somewhere else. Besides, I don't really get much time and my slow internet often takes minutes to connect to fanfiction.net. So thanks for the support, but it is all in vain...

(Besides, now that I have reread the fic and gained more Star Wars lore, this fic does seem a bit stupid. )


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Old 01-28-2006, 05:53 AM   #119
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2. The reviews there were not exactly favourable.
That's why you rewrite.

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Looking at your fanfic, you do seem to be disappointing a couple rabid fans you've picked up somewhere along the Internet...


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Old 01-30-2006, 01:24 PM   #120
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Hmm... that's interesting... I've got a couple of fanfiction.net accounts and both of them seem to be doing alright... sorry your experience there wasn't that great, Sabertooth... but I agree with both Lyla and Redwing.

The story's pretty interesting, pretty good.

Never ever think you're done revising. I do a lot of fiction writing and even I'm never quite happy with what I've written. It can always use a little revision (that's probably why I don't have anything published... well, that and the fact I can't seem to finish something )


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