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Old 07-01-2006, 09:33 AM   #1
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STAR WARS The War of the Dead



1 year after TJO, War had killed many as the sith and jedi fought the asoume
battles. Darth Grivis as the new emporer had made a seconed Star Forge. That had the power of both the first one and the Death Star. Jaden had lost many jedi to it. The repulic had elected a new Supreme Chancellor. Grivis was making a plan to assanite him and Jaden. Now set back and read SWTWOTD

I shal hopefully post chap 1 today


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Old 07-01-2006, 09:49 AM   #2
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thanks, i finnaly got a pic on my sig but you have to click [click here] on the sig

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That's a sweet pic. Where'd you get it?

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Old 07-01-2006, 11:33 AM   #5
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Old 07-01-2006, 11:35 AM   #6
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Those are cool pictures. You're not using Darth Yoda in this fic, right?



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Old 07-01-2006, 11:36 AM   #7
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yep, i now have darth yoda as my background

NO way on using darth yoda in this fic

EDIT: im about in 5-10min work on chap 1

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Old 07-01-2006, 12:13 PM   #8
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Chapter 1 The Beginning of the War

The battle continued, sith and jedi dying, the Cruins had gone to Yavin 5 to await the jedi. Luke had never seen such a battle. He told Kyle to retreat the jedi. He entered his ship, thinking the same Grivis will soon think- War had begun.

Grivis blocked Nordis’s attack as he sung at him. Nordis turned and jumped into a leaving jedi cruiser. Grivis left to his throne.

There he thought- the battle was over and The War of the Dead had begun.

Grivis walked through the hall leading to his throne, the biggest room in the Star Forge. The jedi were overwhelmed by the power of the Star Forge 2. The speakers came on; “Intruder Jedi inside the emperor’s throne full alert” said the voice. Grivis entered his throne, jumped up and removed the Jedi’s head. Grivis walked to his huge window. There were hundreds of jedi ships approaching! Grivis jumped into his ship and flew into the battle. He flew toward the head ship were Skywalker, Katarn, and the Korrs would be. He entered there hangar, as he flew in he opened his cockpit he jumped out pushing his ship into a group of jedi ships. He ran to the command center and planted a det pack. Then he entered the Jedi consul.

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Old 07-01-2006, 12:36 PM   #9
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Why is the Star Forge in it? If there is a second one I doubt it would be as powerful as the first. Grammar has improved slightly and I also liked the Pic.
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Old 07-01-2006, 12:51 PM   #10
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i thought about making a misture of the star forge and the death star

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Old 07-01-2006, 12:55 PM   #11
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i thought about making a misture of the star forge and the death star
A Mixture of the Star Forge and the Death Star? Interesting... What would it be called? The Death Forge?
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Old 07-01-2006, 01:04 PM   #12
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Old 07-01-2006, 01:12 PM   #14
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Old 07-01-2006, 06:59 PM   #15
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im working 0n chap 2 so hold up it should be poster in less then a hour

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Good chapter, connor. I like the idea of Death Forge, lol.



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Old 07-01-2006, 07:28 PM   #17
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Chapter 2 Fight to the death

Grivis walked up to Skywalker. “Hello, Luke he said. I have a proposition for you, it is…Die!” He through his saber at him then ripped out his X-saber. “I only use this on special accessions”. He activated all 4 blades and charged in a powerful Kata. Luke jumped up and landed behind him. Jaden jumped in front of him, Kyle jumped to his left and Mordale to his right. “Where is Luke Korr” Grivis asked. “Right above you Grivis” Luke K answered as he dropped from the roof. Grivis sung up stabbing him. “NO” Jaden yelled in rage. Grivis jumped up as Jaden’s lightsaber slung where he was standing. “Yes release your anger and turn to the dark side Grivis said hopefully Join me”. “No Jaden, he’s not dead” Luke said. Suddenly a bodyguard entered the room slinging his saber at Grivis. Grivis dodged it ignited his Y-saber and threw it at the jedi, one blade went through his heart and the other his side…

Grivis took out his detonator and hit the button, the explosion distracted the jedi as Grivis jumped to Jaden’s desk and hit the ships self destruct button he jumped back into a escape pod and escaped. Jaden and Luke got the others into another escape pod. Jaden hit the abandon ship alarm and left.

Grivis exited the escape pod and looked around he was on Kamino.

EDIT: and pottsie i see you have detroyed the TMJ


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Old 07-01-2006, 07:52 PM   #18
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has anyone seen a hutt jedi that thought just appered in my mind?????

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Old 07-02-2006, 04:47 AM   #19
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Anyway, I've only noticed this, but is Grivis supposed to be Grevious out of RotS? If it is, Grevious is the correct spelling. Several spelling mistakes, but nothing editing can't fix.

Yes I used the Death Star's power to destroy my Fic . I'm thinking of writing a Trilogy but I don't know what to write about. It might be something around KOTOR.
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Old 07-02-2006, 08:41 AM   #20
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grivis is not grevious Grivis is just grivis

ah,... mabey a mission of kyle and jan... ah continue vote

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Old 07-02-2006, 02:50 PM   #21
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how do you do pic tiltles guys i want to make one?

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Old 07-02-2006, 03:05 PM   #22
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connor: You can request to get someone to make a Title Pic for you in the Avatar/Sig Pic Request/ Discussion Thread in the Ahto Spaceport Cantina and put your Request there.

Also I started the whole Title Pic idea (I first got the idea of Alkonium's Fics).
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Old 07-02-2006, 03:11 PM   #23
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thanks pottsie i did what you said

EDIT: chap 3 should be up tomorrow since i got a headache (ahhhhhhh) sorry
while you waitdarth potter,
darth yoda3, a lot of funny sw pics


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Good chapter, connor. Btw, those are some pretty funny pictures.



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Old 07-03-2006, 02:33 PM   #25
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i shall now start working on chapter 3

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Chapter 3 The Chase of Death

Grivis waited for the jedi to land, when they did Grivis jumped up into one of there fighters and flew off. They followed, Grivis grinned he used the force to make the 2 jedi ships blow up. Jaden shot a missile at him. He dodged it by jumping out of the ship and landing on a Jedi’s ship. He activated his lightsaber and used the force to open the cockpit. He pulled the jedi out and through him into space and got in shut the cockpit. His old ship has shot down by Jaden. “Mission Complete Luke he said I’m returning now”. Grivis opened his cockpit and landed on Jaden’s ship he stuck his lightsaber through the glass and Jaden’s heart killing him. He set the ships auto pilot for there cruiser. He jumped back to his ship and flew to the Death Forge.

Grivis entered Arca and Forus’s room and explained his plan… Grivis entered the jedi temple on Yavin 5, the jedi were still returning. Grivis killed the jedi there and left. Then he entered the new Senate chamber during a meeting, the chancellor was speaking. Grivis pushed him off his private senate stand he fell thousands of feet to the ground. He had made one of his sith lords become the vice chancellor before the war he was now chancellor. Grivis entered his ship and hit his det detonator and the jedi temple blew up.

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jadens not dead


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Good chapter. There was lots of action.
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i have a new pic on my sig everyone click yoda machine gun


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Old 07-04-2006, 01:36 AM   #29
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thanks pottsie,
sorry every one i can't do any do chapter 4 for probaly 4 days becuase im going to a game tonight and a trip tommorrw


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Four days? I hadn't posted a chapter for mine in like two weeks. That's okay.



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okay guys im hopeing to post the next chap tomorrow

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man there tons of new fics...my computer crashed so ive been out for a while. oh well

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man there tons of new fics...my computer crashed so ive been out for a while. oh well
Iwas beginning to wonder if you would ever return. Nice to see you back. You have a review for The Sith Order in The Critic's Two Cents.
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Chapter 4 The War Continues

Luke k ran to the Jaden’s ship it had been severely damaged. He jumped up cutting open the cockpit with his saber. Jaden lay there with a hole in his chest. Luke lifted him up fearing that he was dead…

Grivis landed in the Death Forge, he jumped out of his ship it was over Jaden was dead Luke k was his next target. He told Maul to set course for there new secret base on Dagabah…On Dagabah, Grivis moved through the swamps with Forus and Arca.
I wished he left Arca behind he thought all he did was complain. “This is boring and gross” he complained. “Oh, shut up” Grivis replied. They walked a little more till they reached the rebel base. He leaped up slicing the guards head off. Forus flanked the rebel sarge. Arca jumped up landing behind the sarge, Grivis charged and cut him in half. “Well done, both of you” Grivis said. Suddenly Forus swung his saber killing Arca, and then he turned on Grivis. “I thought I sensed too much power in you, I just didn’t think you’d try to kill me too” Grivis said. Forus stabbed at Grivis but he simply jumped aside and destroyed the saber. Forus leaped back and used the force to get Arca’s saber. Grivis stepped back and swung to the left twirling catching his breath, then he slashed his back then cut off his head. He then took Arca’s saber, completed the new base and flew to Dantooine.


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One thing I must say connor. Well done. You've improved alot, though there are still some mistakes. Check out the Entertainment Centre Awards 2006 Thread too. There is a suprise for you there. Also will you put The Sith Order and The Jedi Order in the Jedi Archives?
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Chapter 5 The Attack of Maul

Grivis landed on Dantooine, He walked down the ramp of an imperial shuttle.
He then killed the jedi guarding the temple. Then he used the force to blow open the door. Suddenly Obi-wan Kenobi jumped out of the door and stabbed Grivis.

Maul suddenly stopped in the middle of his speech as 2nd command. “Continue, Lord Maul” said a member of the counsel. “I have suddenly felt a stunning disturbance Maul started but only the sith that knows this order must follow me…Order 166, move. Maul led the troops to Dantooine, “You know the routine order 166 Lord Grivis is in danger” Maul shouted. As the soldiers charged killing jedi after jedi Maul pulled out his comlink, “To HQ send in all available troops to Dantooine order 166”. Maul then joined the search for Grivis.

Maul ran down to the brig, he found Grivis in a cell with a hole in his chest. Maul opened the cell, pick up Grivis and left. He was just going across the bridge when Grivis woke up. “Where am I” he asked. Maul was about to answer him as a grenade hit near them sending Grivis down toward the ocean.


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Obi-Wan is alive? Dear. Anyway it was okay, a bit short. Congrats on getting The Sith Order/The Jedi Order in the Jedi Archives.
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yes because of the crystal in the jedi order yes it was short i ran out of time

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