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Old 09-24-2006, 02:59 PM   #1
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[AU]Darth Yoda:The Power of The Dark Side

Okay this will be my next fic that I will start after the alternate endings on my current fic about Yoda turning to the Dark Side bringing a whole new Saga. Some things will happen from the movie but changed some. Hope you enjoy it The Prologue will come soon.

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Old 09-24-2006, 03:03 PM   #2
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I'm looking foward to it. Your grammar still needs improving though. If you want, I can be your beta reader and improve several things for you. Of course, you've improved over the course of your trilogy. Your choice though.
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Old 09-24-2006, 03:16 PM   #3
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you can if you want but if it gets in the way of your fics stop.

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Old 09-24-2006, 03:18 PM   #4
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Okay then. I'll do it. For a while maybe. As I said before, I'm looking foward to the Fic. When does the first Chapter come out?
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I don't know...I just got the alternate endings out I guess probaly today but I can't deside how Yoda turns it has to be before Ep 1...any ideas...

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I don't know...I just got the alternate endings out I guess probaly today but I can't deside how Yoda turns it has to be before Ep 1...any ideas...
Perhaps it could be set after Revenge of the Sith. I mean, too much would go wrong for the Republic if it was in Episode I. Your choice though.
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Perhaps it could be set after Revenge of the Sith. I mean, too much would go wrong for the Republic if it was in Episode I. Your choice though.
Yeah I might do that...But I think I'll start it when he is meditating on Polis Massa...okay starting now

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Old 09-24-2006, 04:14 PM   #8
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Darth Yoda? Interesting. I can't wait to see how deep Yoda fall into Dark side. Hope Count Dooku is redeemed and come back to finish his epic duel with master Yoda! Or Maybe Sidious will be back, too? (Nope. He's too dangerous to be left alive!--Mace Windu)




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Count get's his head cut off remember

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Count get's his head cut off remember
True but this is AU remember? Anything can happen.
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Old 09-24-2006, 05:02 PM   #11
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It takes place after the battle of Yoda vs Darth Sidious and I am currently making Chapter 1 now

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There is no try-Yoda

Yoda sat in the small room of the base on Polis Massa. He felt a tremendous amount of anger going through him. He had also felt it during the battle against Darth Sidious, he knew what it was it was the dark side. He tried to fight against it. “No” he said out loud “there is no try.” He fought as hard as he could but it was no use it won. Suddenly Senator Bail Organa walked in.

“Master Yoda we have another message from the Emperor” he spat the word.

“He knows were here does he” Yoda said shocked.

“Yes, I don’t know how though.”

Yoda and Bail walked to the communication room. There sat the holo Sidious.

“Ah, Master Yoda you wonder why I know you’re here?”

“Yes”

Sidious looked at Organa, “Leave us Organa”

“Yes my Honor”

Sidious looked back at Yoda “I knew you were here by the Great power of your anger I coming to see you.”

The message ended, Yoda for some reason felt so much closer to the dark side. Yoda turned and walked out of the room. Organa stood there waiting for him.

“Master Yoda, Master Kenobi has arrived.”

“Good that is.”

Yoda walked pass Organa to see Obi-Wan. Inside the hangar Obi-Wan faced Yoda.

“Master, even on Mustafar I could feel your anger.”

The great anger filled him again. He used the force to pull Vader’s lightsaber from Kenobi. It flew to his hand, he activated it. Obi-Wan seeing this backed off. He looked into Yoda’s eyes, they were blood red. Fear hit Obi-Wan, Master Yoda was turning to the dark side too. Yoda flipped up swung at Kenobi than flipped again even before he hit the ground. Obi-Wan blocked them with his lightsaber then he turned and ran back up the ramp into Padme’s ship. He had to go to somewhere else to heal Padme and fast. He took off flying away.

Yoda stood shocked at what he had done. He had turned to the dark side and tried to kill Ob-Wan. He left the hangar and walked down the hall. Organa walked toward him “Master Yoda what happened, Obi-Wan just blasted off the asteroid.” Yoda activated his saber and thrust it into Organa’s skull. Soon Darth Sidious would arrive.


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Good. I liked this. Only noticed one mistake. I'm looking foward to more.
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yup, like this. Yoda had fall into dark side...What happened next?




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yup, like this. Yoda had fall into dark side...What happened next?
We'll find out.
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Old 09-25-2006, 01:42 AM   #16
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Yeah. Good point.

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Sigh...Seriously, it's my time to be redeemed. I have suffered enough hunger, pain, hatred, and anger. Now it's my time to save the galaxy. [looking at his crimson lightsaber, he closed his eyes. And used "Force Crush" to crush it into thousands of pieces.] Farewell, Dark side! May the force with all Jedi.




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thanks everyone im working on chap 2

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Yup, this is good, and on the rise. I hope we see some serious trydactil-Yoda like backside whoopin'. Great job Grivis.

Also, john_ctg, where in the heck did you get that quote? ^o)

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Old 09-25-2006, 06:46 PM   #20
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^^^thanks Jason and soon you will

I hear a new apprentice you have Emperor. Or should I call you Darth Sidious-Yoda

Chapter 2 The Taking of the Throne

Sidious flew into the Polis Massa hangar after making sure Vader was alright in his new armor. He looked forward for Yoda to join him on the dark side. He landed and saw Yoda waiting for him. He walked toward him, “Ah Master Yoda how are you.”

“No longer Yoda I am now I am Darth Yoda.”

“I see Darth Yoda, I look forward to our rule of the galaxy.”

“Not much to look forward there is, about to end your rule is.”

Yoda activated Anakin’s lightsaber, Sidious did the same. “You have lied to me Master Yoda.”

“Lied I have not, just know rule you will have my rule it will be.”

Yoda flipped to the side throwing his saber at Sidious. Distracted Sidious turned to stop the twirling saber. Yoda picked up Sidious’s ship and threw it at him. It hit Sidious and sent him flying. Yoda grabbed Sidious’s blood red saber and thrust it into Sidious skull. He then turned and got in the CIS bomber that Obi-Wan had left on his way back from Utapau. He sent out a distress signal to the Star Destroyer that Sidious came in saying Yoda had betrayed him. The Star Destroyer decided to let him in. He landed the Imperial shuttle in the Star Destroyer in the hangar and walked to the ramp. He paused the stormtroopers might shoot him if they saw him. He pushed the access button to lower the ramp. He walked down, the Stormtroopers raised there blasters as they saw him.

“What is this where is the Emperor” the ship’s Admiral demanded.

“No longer Emperor Palpatine is.”

“What!”

“Died he has, Emperor I am now.”

“This is outrages.”

Darth Yoda had enough, he activated Anakin’s saber and cut down the officer. Another officer ordered the Stormtroopers to put down there blasters. He stepped up, “My lord, my ship since I am now Admiral” he said as he glanced down at the formal Admiral’s dead body. “Agrees to your grasp for power and will fight with you.”

“Good” Yoda replied. “Now take me to the last place you were you must.” With that Yoda turned and walked away to his new throne room.

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Good, a little short in light, but that is okay. I also doubt Sidious would be easily killed like that. By major Yoda-like backside whoopin' i meant all thos jumps and swings he made. But it's okay, nobody and nothing's perfect.

This seems to have a bright future though.

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Old 09-25-2006, 10:01 PM   #22
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Question

I know what you meant though I meant soon as in next chapter
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I don't recall saying Sidious is truly dead[clone]

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Yup, this is good, and on the rise. I hope we see some serious trydactil-Yoda like *** whoopin'. Great job Grivis.

Also, john_ctg, where in the heck did you get that quote? ^o)
I made it up. If it is not appropriate, I will change it. Just for fun.




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“This is outrages.”
Outrageous. Still some mistakes but still okay.
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Old 09-26-2006, 05:22 AM   #25
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OH, THAT thing. Well, alright then, i'll just read my EU books while waiting for the next chapter.
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Old 09-26-2006, 12:31 PM   #26
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OK, I'll enjoy mine while we wait for the next chapter.




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Does anyone know where Vader was brought to get in his suit??

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Hmm, i believe it was in a ship. Those Y-shaped or something.
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oh okay Thanks

*changes part of Chapter*

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Chapter 3 Yoda’s Two Apprentices

Obi-Wan landed on Dantooine, the planet had most of the med droids now which was just what he needed. It wouldn’t take long to find one that would serve Padme right. After he found one he had tricked the droid into letting him stay in the room. He sat in the chair beside the bed and waited. Soon he fell to sleep… He was back on Mustafar though in the distance he could see Padme’s ship flying off. He turned and saw the Emperor walking down to where Vader lay. Vader was not on fire now but he could see burnt skin, ash, and small sparks still on him. He looked away, He had failed him, he had failed him. It took a while to get use to it. Then he looked back, Sidious was kneeling beside Vader and the clones where gathered around him. Obi-Wan snuck aboard the ship and entered an escape pod to stay in. Later they took off, and Ob-Wan snuck out of the escape pod to find Vader.
Finally Obi-Wan entered a big room and saw the Emperor standing by a metal table binding a metallic black figure down to it. Instantly he knew it was Vader, the table turned up and down and a deep mechanical breath came out of him. After some talking that Obi-Wan couldn’t catch Vader broke his bonds and lightning erupted from his hands Obi-Wan woke up and turned his attention to Padme who was having her twins.

Darth Yoda was on the way to Coruscant to claim the full throne of the Empire. On the way he started to build a new lightsaber. He had built the handle to fit him the same way the other had but at the bottom the had a curved spike strong enough to cut through three lightsaber handles at once and cut off there hand. He opened the hatch and put in Sidious’s red crystal. He turned the saber on, a blood red blade raised out of the handle. He swung the saber in the air and deactivated it. There would soon be a time to use it but not now. Now he had to take the throne from Vader and make him one of his new apprentices.

Yoda landed on Coruscant and entered the Senate, as he entered the main chamber he heard yelling and shouting at a metallic black figure who just stood there annoying them. Vader turned and saw Yoda Vader paused as he activated his new saber. Darth Yoda also activated his newly constructed blood red saber. He jumped across the senate floating pods at Vader, and then in a series of flips he landed his saber right on Vader’s. In another series of flips attacking Vader he made him retreat to another pod. Vader force pushed Yoda to another pod full of three senators. Yoda swung his saber removing the senator’s heads as he jumped back to Vader. He kicked Vader sending him plummeting toward the ground. Vader started screaming with his mechanical voice as he fell. Yoda reached out and stopped him from falling. He brought him up to him.

“Become my apprentice Vader you must and I will offer you more power then Sidious and together hunt down Padme we can.”

“I will join you…Master.”

“Good now go to Kessel you must to find Kyp Durron a force-sensitive child in slavery in the spice mines.”

“Yes Master.” Vader said as he walked away.

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Chapter 4 The Way of the Dark Side

Kyp was born on the Deyer colony of the Anoat System. In an Imperial roundup of dissidents, he and his family were enslaved and sent to the Kessel spice mines. His older brother Zeth was retrieved by Imperials to work as a Stormtrooper in an Imperial Academy.

Obi-Wan helped with the babies and finally got them to go to sleep. After much difficulty the med droids had been able to keep Padme alive. For now. Obi-Wan sinced that she would make it but was not completely sure. She had named them Luke for the boy and Leia for the girl. He was given the job to be there god father and to keep them from Yoda and Vader. He intended to do a good job.

Vader landed on Kessel and started his search for this Kyp Durron in the mines. He walked through the mines till he reached the first checkpoint. He walked up to the director. “Who are you?” The director demanded of him.

“I am Darth Vader sent here under the Emperor himself.”

“The Emperor?”

“Yes”

“Fine, what do you need?”

“I need a slave named Kyp Durron he is coming with me.”

“One second.” The man walked away. 5 minitues later he returned with a small boy and some pleading parents. “If you take the boy you get the parents.” Vader nodded and took the three with him. The three walked silently back to the ship. They entered and took off back to Coruscant.

Darth Yoda was pleased when Vader entered with the boy and his parents.

“Ah Mister and Mrs. Durron this is?”

“Yes”

“Good that is.” Yoda explained his intintions to the two parents for there son.

“And if we refuse.” Asked the Dad Michal.

“Through you back into the spice mines I will.” They agreed and were sent out of the room. Yoda brought the boy Kyp into the half rebuilt Jedi temple that was now a sith temple. He brought the boy into a sleeping quarters for the night. For a while the parents will sleep with him but soon the parents will have to leave.
Than Yoda turned his attention to Vader.

“With my power make your body better I can.”

“How.”

“Feed force power from someone else we must then force and air to you will and get rid of you suit we can but need a jedi we do.”

“I will find one my master.” With that Vader went off on the new mission. Yoda them turned and walked back to his throne.

Obi-Wan stared as Padme stirred. Finally she was awaking, she looked up at him.

“Obi-Wan” she asked “Is Anakin alright.”

“No, he and Yoda turned to the Dark Side.”

“Yoda?”

“Yes he killed Sidious and became the Empereor himself its on the HNE right now.”

Padme watched the HNE for a while then looked away. Obi-Wan swiched it off.

“We will turn them back no matter what, Padme.”

She nodded but did not catch his eye. Instead she got up and looked over her children. Soon, she vowed I will make a allience against this new evil Empire and win.

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Two good Chapters. Yoda should become Emperor of the Galaxy. Interesting that Padme survived. One question. I haven't read many EU books, but Kyp wasn't born yet. Or was he?
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I don't know...But I think the chapters are good. Interesting Padme survived. Well, is Luke and Leia going to redeem Yoda and Vader? Seriously, Yoda is too strong than Vader. He needs somebody as strong as Darth Nihilus, or Redeemed Nihilus, or Darth Malak, or Darth Sion, or Revan, or the Exile, or Emperor Devon or Jae Onasi to defeat him.




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Old 09-27-2006, 04:40 AM   #34
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Not really, Sidious defeated him, and Vader can easily pick him up and throw him to a tube of blue electriciy. But now, really, the chapters are good, the grammar has increased, and so has the length. I also only noted one error in the part where Yoda was building the saber.

And also, Kyp was born on 5 ABY, but then, this IS AU.
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Chapter 5 The New order of the Sith and the remains of the Jedi

After the clone wars the jedi knight Sip-ganc was in hiding from his old master Yoda. The planet Dantooine wasn’t to far from Coruscant so he was afraid to muve off-planet from fear of Yoda finding him. He had heard a senator ship had landed on Dantooine so he was heading to see it. As soon as he saw it he immediately reconized it as Padme’s ship. He used the force to since where she was. He ran into a med center and ran to the nearest worker he could find.

“Do you know where I can find a Padme?” He asked.

The man told him the room number, he nodded and headed for the room.

Obi-Wan was startled when the door suddenly opened he reached for his lightsaber and pulled it out and activated it. He was even more surprised when the jedi Sip-Ganc walked in. He saw the man’s eyes widen when he saw Obi-Wan.

“But the order 66, ho-” Sip stumbled.

“I escaped.”

“So did I.”

Obi-Wan motioned to be quiet as he opened the door behind him. There was Padme standing there with two babies. Sip opened his mouth to speak when Obi-Wan shut the door again.

“How.” Sip started.

“It’s a long story, my apprentice Anakin Skywalker sometime during the clone wars must have married her. Later they had these.” Obi-Wan said indicating the babies. “Anakin turned to the dark side a few days ago Coruscant time.”

Still partly startled Sip sat down to think. Obi-Wan sat in the chair beside him. He knew Sip was thinking about his own apprentice, Hatan Korr. He had also broke a jedi rule and had a son. He instead of turning like Anakin he through away his jedi path and never even told his own wife he had been a jedi. Obi-Wan had always liked the boy and was saddend when he had left the jedi order. He had also been saddend when the boy Ferus Olin left the order a few months before. But it was life, though he wished his apprentice had left instead of turning to the dark side as well.

Darth Yoda had sent out a whole army of clones to find all the force sensitive children in the galaxy. He had over 50 canidates already he called them forth to resite the true sith code.

“There is no peace, there is anger.
There is no fear, there is power.
There is no death, there is immortality.
There is no weakness, there is the Dark Side.
I am the Heart of Darkness.
I know no fear,
But rather I instill it in my enemies.
I am the destoyer of worlds.
I know the power of the Dark Side.
I am the fire of hate.
All the Universe bows before me.
I pledge myself to the Darkness.
For I have found true life,
In the death of the light.”

Soon every student knew this and they were ready to begin there sith training. Though his own apprintice Kyp now not already knew the code he was also living it. He was a powerful student who would soon pass even Vader’s power. Darth Yoda was at first surprised at the growing rate of the sith canidates at the newly rebuilt Sith temple. He had hoped that some would come quickly but he was still overwhelmed at the amount. Though many would fail the dark side and might turn to the weak light side of the force.

TK-421 commanded the armies movment as Sarge. His mission was to take what was called a force scanner and scan the many planets of the galaxy for force sensitive children. The main place to find canidates war the planet Dathomir or known as the home of the rancors. He was on the flight to this planet on full speed toward the planet. Darth Yoda had ordered him to search every planet, so that’s what he’ll do.

Tarkin had been Palpatine’s personal Grand Moff before the whole galaxy even knew his great rule. Then he had died after a few days of rule. But the Emperor had known how to clone anyone with there same memories and powers. The knoledge of how had been passed on to him. Though he didn’t think he would have had to use it so early. His knew when and how to use it and he would. The power of the cloning power was secret, he had informed his fleets that were not loyal to Darth Yoda that Palpatine was still “Alive”. From a certain point of view. They knew that he had some information that he would not tell them but they were patient, for now. He incerted the data to clone into the cloning machine. Soon they would overthrow Yoda, soon they will have revenge. But now the war for the throne would begin.
The machine beeped, steam emerged from the clone shaft. He ran to the shaft and through the Sidious’s cloak into the shaft. A few minitues later Sidious emerged from the shaft.

“You have don well, Tarkin.”

Thank you my lord.”
He grinned as he thought: The War of the Throne would now begin.

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Several spelling mistakes. Darth Grivis, I don't mind you PMing me the Chapters and I'll correct them as much as possible. But on a happier note, I'm looking foward to the War of the Throne. Also is Hatan Korr related to Jaden Korr? Anyway I'm looking foward to more.
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Yah, some mistakes here and there, but it was overall a good chapter. Looking forward for the Throne War.
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I have a title pic on the first chapter now Made by xmovingpicsx Thanks btw

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I've been reading this, and I gotta say it's one of the best fics I've read this year. You gotta up the grammer level here though, as I'm sure your aware. But all in all, an amazing fic. I've got a soft spot for alternate universes.


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Ah. Alternative Universes...AU...Interesting chapter. Looking foward to see more.

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