I'll start by stating the obvious; this is a very short fic. I also note that you submitted this really early...it would have been better for you to just hang on to it for a while and add more body to the story! The content of the fic also does not really address the topic of "The Things We Do for Love".
Mmm, while individual characters are always open to interpretation, I feel that a character like Nihilus will not be thinking so, for the a lack of a better word, coherently. He is the very personification of hunger, and thus saying things like how he kept the vortex alive in case of survivors is pretty inconsistent with the nature of his being. It would be more likely that he would simply and instinctively drain any Force user which he encountered.
I'm also not too hot on describing the ship as smelling of mold as any organisms can't really grow on bare metal, but I'm nitpicking here
Not to mention that I wonder how Visas saw right through the mask unless it's transparent, lol. Btw, it's good to try to distinguish his thoughts from the general text, e.g. using italics
There's some language errors here and there (e.g. presence not precence, chambers not chabers)
Lastly, I really don't know what to make of this sentence:/
Originally Posted by lord-nihilus
Nihilus walked upon the surface of the planet that was only minutes ago habited and blushed.
I hope that you don't take this too hard, as I don't mean offense, I just want to point out where you can improve. Keep writing! Practice makes perfect