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Old 03-11-2008, 01:05 AM   #1
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Urban Death

This is a fanfic that I just came up with while writing Jedi legacy. It is told in a very Stephen King manner. Anyway here is the prologue

Star Wars: Urban Death

Prologue

A reasonably small ship flew towards a dark space station. It slowly flew there with its wings blaring at high speeds. Across the side of the station in bold lettering it read "RETURNER HEAD" But the rest was scratched out. Quite possibly due to space debris. The ship flew into a small hangar and landed without a hitch. A small hologram appeared on the ship's dashboard.

"Please transmit your Returner identity." A small card was pushed into the dashboard. Immediately words appeared on the hologram.

"Codename: Arch
Species: Kaminoan
Age: 20"

The tall Kaminoan quickly said goodbye to his passenger and stepped off the ship. There were a large amount of guards settled around the hangar. The Kaminoan waited for his ship to lift off and walked up to the nearest.

"You know I never expected you to make it this far." The guard said. He was a dull gammoreanian that the Kaminoan disliked. But he didn't care. He signed away his fate a long time ago. Now he was just breathing. He didn't care anymore. They were all dead, everyone he cared about. Everyone he was fighting for. Now he just wanted to sleep. To stop the pain that was numbing him to the bone. It wasn't always like this. He was once a respected member of the galaxy. But it felt like that was a million years ago.

"Come on. Lets go." The Gammoreanian said pushing him to one side. He led him towards a large turbolift. The Kaminoan decided that he might as well reminisce. It was sort of anti-climactic. He was having his life flash by him. He began to trace his past. Back to the scene of the crime when all of life went to hell.


"There's gotta be a better way to make a living"
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Old 03-11-2008, 08:44 PM   #2
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I am giving this a Running Man feel. Since I have been inspired by it

ACT 1: An offer you can't refuse

Minus 100 and COUNTING...

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don't you know who I am?
I'm the real thing with low-key sensibilities
I don't need what I got half as much as everyone covets it

The New Black - Every time I die
1 Month Earlier

A dark hologram appeared on the desk of the Kaminoan. It slowly flickered back and forth.

"Sir detective Friday to see you."

"Send him in." He responded instantly. The Kaminoan waited sitting in his desk. Ever since he joined he felt a strong sense of racism from the younger detectives. Which he would slowly catch in the air after a while.

A tall Rodian walked inside the office. He was wearing standard issue uniform. Something that wasn't required for detectives. "Arch? You still here? Quiting time was hours ago."

Arch smiled slightly. He stood up and brushed himself. At a clean 6"9 he towered over the Rodian. He slowly walked over to his filing cabinet labeled "RETURNER SCANDLES" It was devoted to 3 cabinets however Arch unlatched it. The three cabinets opened simultaneously to reveal a closet in place of where the Returner Scandles cabinets were.

"Why did you have to custom build that? You might have a case one of these days."

"Don't be stupid." He responded. The Rodian shrugged.

"Why can't you just get a coat hangar like a normal person?" Arch shrugged slightly. He pulled out the black trench coat from the closet and threw it on himself. Arch was a symbol of fear like this. He had his DL-22 in his coat pocket ready for anything. Arch slammed his cabinets shut and walked out the door with the Rodian.

"So Jak where are you going?" He asked him while walking. The thick Coruscant air getting to him. Coruscant was a good place for work. Especially for a Detective in the Coruscant Bureau of law enforcement. CBLE for short. It was basically Coruscant's only law enforcement. When the Returner organization came to power 20 years before they reworked the Galaxy's infrastructure to the bone. Arch joined CBLE when he was 16. But at the time he was recognized as an adult.

"Mostly to the Cantina. Goin to get a drink." The Rodian shrugged. It was what he did every day. Just go to work, bother everyone, wait until he gets off and go to the Cantina without doing any work at all. Arch was surprised he followed him on this daily regiment.

"Count me in." Arch shrugged. The DL-22 in his pocket shaking with every step he made with his digitigrade legs.

Arch was much shorter then a regular Kaminoan. He was a clone of course but decided to go offworld rather then stay and work with offworlders. Arch found out after he was released from his cloning facility that he was the offspring of a special case. As part of a research test 100 Kaminoan clones were mixed with human DNA. All of them spouted wierd defects and were classified as mutants. Except for Arch. He was the success of the test.

Sometimes people would question Arch's human-like nature. In which he would just insult them as usual.

Arch walked into the nearby Cantina with Jak Friday. Hoping to get a good Ruby Bliels before he had to go home.


"There's gotta be a better way to make a living"
-Kyle Katarn

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Old 03-11-2008, 10:58 PM   #3
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Old 03-12-2008, 12:23 AM   #4
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with money in his hand
with grease between the wheels
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The Cantina was a usual hot spot. Trandoshan gangsters would stay to the side of the cantina talking among themselves. The hutts would have a private room to themselves. Many of the patrons were either offworlders or workers.

When Jak and Arch walked into the Cantina Arch felt like a drink. He walked up to the nearby bartender and slumped down on a chair

"Ruby Bliels." He spouted. Throwing a few credits on the counter. Jak meanwhile was near the Twi-lek dancers. Thinking he was in a whore house and was getting a lap dance. But Jak never really got into any trouble. He was a regular and well known by now.

When Arch's drink finally came he downed it in half a minute and asked for another. It had been a hard day of course. But exceptionally hard since he didn't have a single break in his latest case. Some kidnapping charge.

Jak finally got bored and sat down with him. "This place is great isn't it?"

"Jak you come here 5 days a week. Give it a rest." Specifically it was day number 5. Arch's favorite day of the week.

"Correlian Ale" He said to the bartender. After Arch downed his third glass he got up.

"Well there's my limit. Got to go Jak."

"Oh come on." he said disappointed. Arch was always someone to talk to who wasn't slurring incoherently.

Suddenly Arch heard a scuffle in the middle of the Cantina. The music had stopped playing and the Twi-leks stopped dancing. Many of the Trandoshan's were in the middle of the Cantina. The crowd had dispersed to the edges of the bar. Arch turned around and noticed the doors were locked.

"We are the 5 hand gang. This is a raid." One of them yelled in heavy trandoshan. Arch understood it however. In the CBLE academy he aced his language exam. The Trandoshans all had blasters. They began firing at the ceiling and aiming them at pedestrians.

Arch motioned to Jak. He did a swirling hand signal and waited. He took his DL-22 out and pointed it at a nearby Trandoshan. He fired at the Trandoshan's head, instantly downing him.

Almost all eyes were put on Arch. He dived across the counter to avoid blaster shots. Arch waited for Jak to hit a Trandoshan. Then when he did Arch stood up and fired at some more of them.

Arch quickly walked towards one on the ground. He purposely stunned with a weapon modification he fitted on his DL-22.

"Jak i'm going back to book this guy. You good here." Jak made an appreciative jesture. Arch quickly took the Trandoshan by his clothing and lead him out of the Cantina. Not noticing a security camera on top of the door recording everything.


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Old 03-12-2008, 09:47 PM   #5
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Ive been reading a few dystopian novels like 1984 and Brave new world. I must say that I am getting a lot of good ideas on where I should go with my plot.

Minus 98 and COUNTING...

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I'm in the mood, the rhythm is right,
Move to the music, we can roll all night.

Slow Ride - Foghat
Booking was a very simple procedure. But Arch didn't do any of it. All he did was take the bad guys in and let the officers book them

Arch walked towards the CBLE landing bay at around midnight. He was tired as usual but even more so. Arch's ship was an old thing. He received the parts of the Moldy Crow which was Kyle Katarn's ship. After the supposed battle of Ruusan he sold the parts and Arch managed to acquire them. With them all on a CBLE detective's budget he managed to create a new ship called the Platinum Crow. But it was just the Moldy crow just shiner and new.

He slowly climbed into the pilot's chair and lifted off. Flying was one of Arch's favorite hobbies. Whenever he was off duty he would just fly around Coruscant for hours.

This time he wanted to just head home. He flew the ship near the incoming traffic. It took him around 10 minutes to make it to his place. It was a small apartment in a large building. He landed his ship and walked inside his apartment

~~Meanwhile~~

"Sir Ruther has been dispatched."

"Who's the detective who did it?"

"We have a security camera right here."

A hologram began playing in the pitch black darkness. It showed of Arch firing at the Trandoshan and making a hand signal to Jak.

"Very good." A voice said into the darkness

~~Meanwhile~~

Arch slipped out of his trech coat and placed his DL-22 on the table. He stared at his datapad on a table. He had a new message.

"Dear Arch.

We hope you are well. We made it back to Rhen Var. Most of us didn't make it though. We thought going back here would stop the spread. Yet we were wrong.

Don't take it personally. We appreciate how you helped."

Arch switched off the datapad. It was a message from his fiance Du'Karn. She was a Kaminoan that Arch met shortly before joining with CBLE. He eventually married her which was very uncommon between Kaminoans. But he eventually persuaded her to do it.

However she was traced with Stigma shortly afterwards. Stigma was a very common virus that affected 90% of organisms. It was viral and completely uncureable. If one contracted Stigma the organism would die in a matter of years. It was highly contagious. That was why Karn wanted to leave Arch behind. She wanted to go somewhere where she couldn't infect the people she loved. She went traveling with a number of other people who had it.

That was several years before. Arch decided to ignore it. He had a day off he was planning on using. He switched off his datapad and closed his blinds

~~Meanwhile~~

"Sir I have found more information about your "subject." An Aqualish said holding a beige file. He threw it across a thick metal desk towards a shadowy figure.

"Excellent. That means we finally have the twentieth member. Did you find something we can use?"

"Yes sir. He has a soldier of fortune. Check under his spouse column."

"Ah she has Stigma. This will be very easy to do. Get Locke on the comlink..."


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Old 03-14-2008, 01:17 AM   #6
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Ah, another RakataDark fan-fic. I must say that it is looking good!

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Old 03-15-2008, 01:52 AM   #7
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18 and Life - Skid Row
When Arch awoke the next day he felt miserable. Knowing he had to get up in a few hours to go to CBLE headquarters. But then he noticed his alarm didn't go off. It was his day off

He slowly got up and walked around in his small Coruscant apartment. He quickly turned on his holonet and watched a news broadcast

"Team Hornet has finally been eliminated by the Hunters. A new team is being sought out now." It was another broadcast. It was about a long running event called the Urban Death. In which 2 teams of approximately 10 people would be able to hide out around the galaxy for a specific amount of time. If they survived the amount of time they would be set for life. A huge amount of credits and an unimaginable amount of fame. Of course both teams would be constantly hunted by a team of people called the Hunters. The Hunters were a neo-nazi group who hunted for sport. Though they killed within the Urban Death their reputation for assassins and torturers were well earned.

After relaxing for a while Arch thought about going for a flight. He slipped into his trench coat and walked out of his apartment. The sunny Coruscant day glistening in his face. He slowly scrambled into the Platinum Crow and started it up. He felt the rumbling of its engine as it lurched forwards.

The Platinum Crow reflected the entire city on its outer plating. Arch flew the ship through Coruscant's many boroughs and neighborhoods. Then after around an hour he became bored and flew towards a small Cantina. It was around 11 AM when he made it there

Cantina's were usually a place of commerce rather then a place to get drunk. Although the latter still happened that was not why Arch was there. He slowly landed the Platinum Crow and walked into the Cantina. Hoping he could recognize another offduty detective.


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-Kyle Katarn
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Ah, so Arch is going to be in a 'game-show'? Very interesting.

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Old 03-15-2008, 07:15 PM   #9
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It's time to let the bedbugs bite

Dare to be stupid - Weird Al Yankovic
Arch sat at a nearby table and looked around. The meaningless patrons everywhere were doing many things. There were Rodians at one table huddled around Bacta. There were Gammoreanians around another with Blue milk. Apparently Arch was the only one alone

But it wasn't for long. He quickly saw a tall Ughnaut walking towards him. He recognised him immediately. His name was Uh' Dunal. He was the only Ughnaut working at CBLE. Just like Arch was the only Kaminoan working at CBLE.

He quickly sat opposite him. "Hey Arch. You off duty?" Arch nodded slowly.

"You hear? Team Hornet got eliminated yesterday. The hunters found the remaining three hiding out on Mustafar and destroyed the building they were hiding out in by lowering its supports in Lava." Arch shrugged slightly. He didn't really follow Urban Death that much. It didn't really concern him.

"So what are you doing here?" Arch asked Dunal. Dunal shrugged slightly. "Nothing really. Nothing to do when your off duty." Dunal spotted a waiter droid and brought him over.

"Ruby Bliels." Arch said. "Arch its nearly noon." He shrugged. Dunal whispered something in the droid's ear and it left

"So would you ever want to go on Urban death?" Dunal asked him. Arch shook his head slowly.

"No. Its a death sentence. The hunters are trained professionals and will kill you."

"You know I heard they are thinking of adding a canister of Horizons along with the prize money?" Arch shuddered when he heard this. Horizons was a vaccine to Stigma. It would instantly cure the patient. However Horizons was dangerous to brew and was very rarely found. Its value was around 1000 000 credits roughly. It was one of the most sought out for objects in the galaxy currently. Unlike the medicine Alpha which mearly kept the patient at bay, Horizons would take months to synthisise and even then it didn't always work

"Whatever." Arch said slowly. Their drinks came to them a few seconds later.

"You know I heard about what happened at the Cantina last night." Arch nodded. He quickly took a sip from his Ruby Bliels. The golden scarlet liquid made him feel much better. "Ive heard from my superiors that you are..." Arch slowly felt drousy and didn't hear what Dunal said. He slowly closed his eyes and his head fell on the table.

Dunal motioned to 3 rodians. They slowly picked Arch up and dragged him out of the Cantina towards a ship.

The ship flew off Coruscant towards a dark space station. Along its hull it read "RETURNER HEADQUARTERS." It slowly docked with it.


"There's gotta be a better way to make a living"
-Kyle Katarn

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Very nice job! Keep up the great suspenseful work!

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Old 07-23-2008, 02:15 AM   #11
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I doubt I will be continuing Jedi Legacy. Mostly because I really prefer this fanfic a lot more.

Anyway I returned to this forum for various reasons. Several months ago I had several epiphanies about myself and how I write. I began to read very many older novels that blew me away with their plot twists and writing styles. It was as if I knew the ending, but it still completely surprised me. I took a long break from fanfic writing and began to pursue other interests. (Such as gaming. I got a 360 and began to play many games on it). Then just today I decided to play Knights of the old republic and instantly thousands of new ideas on where to take this fanfic exploded into my mind.

I am going to edit this post in a few hours with a new chapter.

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Minus 95 and COUNTING...

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And the days go by
Like a strand in the wind
In the web that is my own
I begin again


Edge of Seventeen - Stevie Nicks
Arch awoke from a dull haze. Strange feelings went through his mind as he did. "Strangers in the night..." Just as Arch began to awake strange emotions ran across the side of his mind. Ones of squemishness and filth. As if he was swimming in pale vomit. As he opened his eyes a strange foggy effect went over his vision. His hands appeared to slow down and speed up several times as he moved them around.

Arch began to visualise his surroundings. It appeared to be a medical area on a star cruiser. His bed was dull yellow and had patches in the fabric. Bits of fluff and dirt spewed out of the fluff as he ran his hand through it. Arch peered out the window his bed was near. As he did a strange sense of vertigo went through him. Suddenly he recalled his meeting with Dunal.

Arch sat up and shook his head several times. His trench coat hung from a nearby coat hanger. As he ran his hands through the old leather he shivvered from the drink still going through his system.

Arch quickly got into his clothing. All of his other clothing was surprisingly not there. Instead there was a white shirt and black pants with matching boots. The shirt was quite light on his frame and seemed to have padding on his chest. The pants were slightly baggy and were much to long to tuck into the boots. After Arch changed he threw on his trench coat. Noticing his DL-22 was still in it's coat pocket.

That's odd. Why not disarm me? The question ran through his head. As well as other questions. Like where he was and if he was kidnapped, why not take his weapon away. The gun still felt good around his hand as he clutched it. Arch had been in situations where he had no weapon. But not in a situation where he was kidnapped and kept his weapon.

Suddenly a loud feedback entered his ears. Arch recoiled in pain as the feedback soon became painful. Then it quickly stopped as soon as it became to unbearable for him. Arch stood up from the crouching position he was in and coughed. A tinnitus-like sound was still present in his ears.

"Ah he is awake" A voice said on the intercom. As soon as this was said the door to the room opened. Arch was about to go through this door, though the pressure in his ears halted him. The two figures that went through it were both Rodians. Both of them had quite long spikey hair and strange metal protruding from their arms.

"Detective. I present to you two criminals. Dresooday and Resturaan. Resturaan doesn't know what you did to his two parents."

Arch didn't expect the large amount of anger fluctuating through the Rodian on the right. He wore a dark blue jumpsuit with several modifications. A blaster rifle was presant on his shoulder.

"He did WHAT!!!?" Arch was fluent in Rodian language. Though he could barely speak it, he understood the anger that was present in the Rodian's voice. Quick as lightning the Rodian reached for his blaster rifle.

As if like a mexican standoff Arch's eyes peered at the other Rodian, then at Resturaan. In a split second his hand was on his DL-22's trigger.

There was one frying shot. The shot angeled itself perfectly on the Rodian's left eye. A large cauterised hole was now where Resturaan's eye was. Restauraan buckled under the pressure of death and fumbled down onto the ground. Arch quickly dusted off the residue from the energy the pistol used. Then gunslinged it into his pocket.

"There do you see now?" A voice said on the intercom. Several fumbling motions were heard on it. Then a deeper voice was sounded.

"Arch. My name is Dural Killian. I am about to make you an offer you cannot refuse."

"Lets hope so." Arch responded. Though now fully knowing wether the intercom would understand him.

"Dresooday over there will walk you to my office where I can tell you more of the position you are in. Please follow him closely as this facility can get very confusing." Arch shrugged slightly as the Rodian froze up in terror. Arch had several cases before where Rodians did just that. Freeze up in the presance of an armed weapon in the room. Dresooday backed up slightly and walked down a nearby hall. Arch closely followed, with his hand on his DL-22.


"There's gotta be a better way to make a living"
-Kyle Katarn

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Old 07-23-2008, 02:34 AM   #12
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Awesome! That is fine with me, one is certainly good enough for me. I am also looking into getting in the fanfic business.

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Old 07-23-2008, 03:45 AM   #13
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Minus 94 and COUNTING...

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Let's just be glad for the time together
Life's such a treat and it's time you taste it
There ain't a reason on earth to waste it
It ain't a crime to be good to yourself


Lick it up - Kiss
Strangely enough, Arch didn't find the starcruiser confusing at all. It seemed very large true. But it's hallways were minimal, using large rooms to fill the facility instead.

Dresooday walked with a very nervous expression on his Rodian tube-like face. His eyes welled with fear in their purple large pupils. Arch wondered what it was like to see as a Rodian. Then he dismissed it, due to the large amount of Rodian criminals he dealt with who couldn't shoot straight.

Dresooday lead him to a slanted ramp that ended in a single door. "He's waiting for you in... there..." Arch nodded and began to walk through the door. However as soon as he did Dresooday walked away in a jogging/run stance. Arch shrugged and walked through the door anyway.

The office he was in was quite small. It had 4 walls, a ceiling and a floor like any other office. What piqued Arch's interest in this room was the large amount of windows. The walls themselves were nothing more then large windows with filing cabnits propped up to them. Arch found this office fascinating, it was for someone who really liked to feel small compared to the infinitism of the universe. No matter who you were, the universe was always bigger and greater then you could ever imagine. Dural Killian sat behind a desk at the end of the room. Arch quickly sat across from him.

"Ah Arch. It took you long enough. You have a very good opportunity now." Dural was a human. He was a ghostly thin albino human. He had short cropped hair with a matching white goatee and moustash. His pink eyes sent shudders running through Arch's spine.

"What oppertunity?" Arch was confused. He thought he was either going to be held for ransom or was framed for something.

"Ah. Allow me to appologise then. You have been selected as a new member of Team Hornet for Urban..."

As soon as he said Hornet Arch stood up and sputtered out "What?"

"Ah yes. Based apon your record for CBLE and your little gunfight in the bar the other day impressed me and the producers. We have decided to give you a little offer."

"No. I don't want to play a game of life or death with a bunch of criminals headed for a prison. All I want to do is get to Coruscant." Arch said fiercly and determined. He remembered first watching Urban Death with his Fiance.

"Ah. Well let me get back to my offer. Either you join Team Hornet and recieve 1/8th of your first reward in advance or..." Killian pushed a Datapad across the desk towards Arch. Arch quickly took it into his hands and looked at the picture. It was of his Fiance Du'Karn. She told him she was on Rhen Var just the other day. In this picture Du'Karn was propped up against a wall, she was in a force cage.

Arch dropped the datapad and quickly pulled out his pistol and pointed it at him.

"Release her, or you die right here and now in office."

Dural mearly laughed at Arch. Arch's expression turned to puzzlement. Laughing at him was the last thing Arch expected. "Do you really think we would let you keep your gun and leave you with sufficiant ammuntion? We left only one charge left inside your gun. Since we expected you to take down that Rodian with only one shot." Indeed as soon as Arch pulled his trigger, a clicking/spurting noise came out. Indicating it needed to be recharged.

"Now please. Sit." Arch grumbled and sat down once more. Placing his DL-22 back into his pocket.

"Now let me finish. We will keep your fiance Du'Karn healthy, with a full administration of Alpha (Alpha was the only known medicine to Stigma. While it didn't cure the disease, it mearly kept the disease at bay.) plus if you do survive for the full month as needed we will give you, your prize. 100 Million credits. Paid in full by the Urban Death Network. In addition we will give you and your fiance 100 credits per day you survive of course. The biggest record we have gotten was eight days and eighteen hours to be exact."

"Well I guess I have no choice then..." Arch said disappointedly. He had no negotiation in the air. There was absolutley nothing he could do with Du'Karn's life on the line. Without the Alpha she would die.

"Now then. As a member of Team Hornet you are permitted to travel with them at all times. We will require you to send us 1 tape per day to this station. Since curior services are easily found on almost any planet in the galaxy you will not have any trouble. If one of your fellow team members dies, you will be awarded a 1000 credit survival buyout to all of your teammates. To compensate for your loss of team mate. If you and your remaining team mates survive for the full month as intended, you will be rewarded instantly your prize money. Which will be able to keep your fiance's disease at bay."

When Killian finished talking Arch was already disgusted with him and himself. But with no alternative he mearly nodded. "So do we have a deal." A datapad with a contract was placed infront of him. All Arch did was just press the necesary buttons to accept.

"Excellant. Now, you have ten team mates. You have no idea who they are just yet. You only have to send in 1 tape for the entire team. However each tape must show all of your team mates inside it. After your orientering with your team members we will broadcast you live on holonet, then we will give you and your team a head start of one day. " Arch stood up and waited for Killian to lead him out the door as he finished talking.

"Just one question. What happens if I don't send in a tape?" Arch said curiously. It had been plauging his mind for the last few minutes that Killian had spoken.

"Oh you wouldn't like that. If you and your team do not send in a tape you will default on your prize at the end. Plus your fiance's Alpha and money given every day. However you will still get kill money from your team mates." Arch nodded and stood slanted for a second. Strange suicidal thoughts went through his head. He could probably try to kill Killian right there with his hands. Though he would have to much trouble trying to find Du'Karn. (If she was there) Unarmed and get out of the facility alive. There was no choice. Just to play along with his game and give Du'Karn her alpha.

"One last thing Arch." Killian said as he walked. "If you kill any Hunter or Law Enforcement or any kind, you will recieve a 1000 credit reward. Which is given to encourage you to actually fight the hunters to give us footage. Most Team Hornet members we have found mearly run from the hunters. Which just gives us pointless chase scenes that end up with cowardly bloody messes."

"I'll keep that in mind." Arch mumbled under his breath. Killian lead him back the way he came. Threw several more hallways and finally towards another door.


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Arch found the room distasteful.

Killian lead Arch through the narrow doorway. The doorway itself seemed at least 100 years old. It needed oil, repair and maintenance. When he walked through the door, Arch felt as if the doorway would fall onto him. But he made it through very well.

"Please Welcome Arch. The last member of Team Hornet." Killian said to the group in the room. Arch found the group even distasteful. To think he would be hunted for at least a month (If he survived that is) with criminals. Arch felt he wouldn't sleep for weeks in fear of never waking up.

There were 9 other people in the room. All of varying ethnicities. Arch felt as if he was in a Narr Shaddaa bar, always full of scum and villany. The first one that caught his eye was a Rodian. He seemed quite young to Arc, as his skin texture and hair were different. The Rodian wore Dark blue clothing that seemed to blend well with his dark green skin. His shirt had no sleeves. It bore a strange insignia of a triangle. His pants drooped low down over his boots.

"This is Rhen'Vries from Correlia." Vries was sitting on a block in the room. Completley oblivious to everyone else in the room. He didn't look up to Arch.

Killian walked over to another figure. This one was a Trandoshan. This Trandoshan had an intimidating figure that was almost as tall as Arch was. He wore Dark green clothing that was long sleeved and went as far as his legs.

"Drossk from Coruscant" Killian continued.

The next one was a female Selkath. Selkath were rare during the times of the new republic. Specifically since they were heavily Xenophobic after the Empire. Though from Arch's studies at CBLE's library he read about several Selkath going offworld. Though Arch found himself more interesting as he found most Kaminoans never did leave their home planet. The Selkath female had a vaguely farmiliar female shape that was garbed in a strange robe. Arch couldn't guess what her age group was. As he was not farmiliar in Selkath.

"My name is Duan" The Selkath spoke. Strangely enough Arch understood her. She spoke in galactic basic mixed with Selkath gurgling language. Though Arch could sense a machine at work. Though vocabulators were very easy to buy on the open market for species that couldn't speak basic. Killian seemed very put off that he couldn't introduce Duan. So he continued.

The next figure was a human. It was a human male sporting rough black hair. His face clearly needed another shave. He wore a red scoundrel's jacket with black pants with shoes connected. He had a blaster pistol at his side. Arch smirked at the human. He looked like a smuggler who would be picked off easily.

"Drustale Arms from Nar Shaddaa" Killian continued.

The next was a male Chiss. This Chiss was clean shaven and seemed to be roughly older then Arch was. He wore an orange sweater with a black vest and matching black pants.

"Baldarek from Nar Shaddaa" Killian continued.

The next figure was a Kel Dor. He had a very straight forward head with his breathing mask. His breathing mask seemed very heavily modified with several different scratches and other nooks cut into it. The Kel Dor wore a long green shirt that had a scarf-like fabric draped around his neck. His pants were long and grey with black boots.

"This is Dar-Resh from Dor" The Kel Dor nodded in Arch's direction. Killian moved on.

The next figure was a Mon Calamari female. She wore beige commando armor and had a blaster carbine on her back strapped. Her armor was mostly torso heightened and her legs were barely covered by the armor.

"This is Meleena Rought from Dac" Meleena scoffed in his direction and looked away. Killian moved on.

The last two was a male Quarren and a thin female Duros. The Quarren wore light red armor vaguely similar to the Mon Calamari. However his armor was full body and Dark blue. The Quarren was tall, though nowhere near as tall as Arch was. "This is Yossk from Dac" Yossk nodded in my direction. Though glanced at Meleena and then quickly looked away. Killian moved over to the Duros. The Duros had a heavily gaunt appearance. She was pale grey with a ghostly thin build draped in a white pilot's uniform. She looked much like a ghost in the light.

"This is Guan Kleg. From Tatooine" Finally Killian finished.

"Well now Arch. Now that you are all fully introduced I would suggest getting to know each other. In one hour we will broadcast you live on the Holonet program Urban Death and then give you, your 24 hour head start.

Killian rushed away out the door. Arch soon felt himself alone until he walked over to someone. The only person in the room that he felt he could connect to with some of this fiasco was Rhen'Vries. He seemed to have a strange look in his eyes. Plus he was the first one he laid eyes on.

Arch walked over to Vries. He looked up, though looked as if he paid no mind.

"So your from Corellia right?" He asked casually. The Rodian got off of his block and shrugged.

"Yeah. You'r part of CBLE right? What are you doing here? I thought Urban Death was for the desperate and hopeless."

"Well it's not really my choice. It's the only way my Fiance' can get her Alpha..." Arch responded even more casually. This time he caught the gaze of Duan. But looked away.

"I thought Kaminoans were Xenophobic Cloners who never left their planet and didn't have feelings. Why would you even think of marriage?" Arch shrugged and Vries scoffed slightly.

"So why are you here then?" Arch asked sitting down beside him. Vries shrugged as well.

"I need the money. Mostly. But I don't know. Personal problems, past problems. I guess I just want to see if I can go the distance." Vries seemed to have a troubling way of speaking basic. He spoke with an accent, though his vowels were all said with emphasis. His speaking was low and to the point.

Arch guessed that Vries had more to say. But decided not to pry. He got off of the block and thought about introducing himself to someone else.


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HELP! - The Beatles
As Arch walked over to Yossk a feeling of curiosity sparked. Yossk sat in a corner next to Kleg. He began to peer at the Mon Calamari Meleena several times and look away. Arch began to suspect that Yossk knew something about her.

"So why are you here?" Arch asked as he walked over to Yossk. He looked up and shrugged.

"I don't know. Relationship problems maybe, I guess I just want the prize." Arch found Yossk seemingly harmless. Like someone who being chased by the hunters, would just run and not fight back. Something that wouldn't be useful. While Arch was in a bar or two several weeks ago. He caught an episode of Urban Death where a human, while running away from the hunters. Didn't notice their starship appear infront of him. The human was instantly gunned down and the entire bar cheered.

"Alright. So do we have some sort of plan here?" Meleena asked standing up. She seemed to be adressing the entire room. Arch turned to her and shrugged.

"Plan? What do you mean?"

"A plan. We need to get as far away from this place as possible in the next 24 hours. We are orbiting Naboo right now, which is where our 24 hours starts. I have studied many Urban Death episodes and I have noticed that a lot of competitors just stay on Naboo and try to avoid the hunters. What we should do... is try and get public transportation off Naboo and get a starship." Meleena said diligently. As if she was proud of her plan.

"Whoa.. a starship?" It was Drustale now. "A starship could cost up to 100 000 credits. I don't know about your pockets. But inorder to get that kind of money we would need to kill a hunter and get a 1000 bonus for all ten of us. But that is hard enough as it is."

"I am not talking about buying a starship. We are all over the holonet as it is. I am talking about borrowing a starship and not returning it." Meleena answered assuredly.

"Wait you want to steal a starship? Wont that bring the hunter's attention over to us?" Arch questioned in to their argument.

"It might. But first we need to get off Naboo."

Just then a sound echoed through the room. It was a strange alarm/announcement. Then a human woman's voice came on the intercom.

"Team Hornet. Please go down the hall to the production room to get ready for your broadcast." The intercom shut off with a few seconds of feedback and then finally cut off.

"Well you heard her. Lets go." Meleena said into the rest of them. Arch shrugged and walked over to the door at the end of the room. This one, unlike the other door that Arch walked through. Was brand new and lead down a ramp to another door. Arch was the first to make it to this door as well. Which lead to a strange backstage-like area. Killian was there.

"Ah here we are. Now, the holonet broadcast is up and running. We are going to broadcast all of you one at a time and tell the audience a little about yourselves. We have a studio audience out there already, so to give a little atmosphere to the production. Don't worry. We have securitiy there in case something happens.

Killian nodded and lead Vries up to the stage. "You first". Vries shrugged and walked up the stage with Killian.

"LADIES AND GENTLEMEN. Let me present to you. The 25th season of Urban Death. We have an exciting new line of cast members up for you to view. Remember to find some of them. A verified viewing gives you 100 credits. While if your view manages to get their capture we will award you with 1000 credits. Paid in full by both the Returner Organisation and the Urban Death network.

"Now our first member of team Hornet is Rhen'Vries of Corellia" He said pointing to Vries on the stage. Arch could barely make it out from where he was standing.

"Now Vries. Your accused with several alligations of murder and abuse. What do you have to say about that?" Arch was shocked. He didn't expect that Vries was a murderer. But he was wondering why he was there in the first place. Vries just stood on the spot and shrugged slightly.

"Well alright then. Now to the audience. Remember his face. He could be lerking out in the street with his team mates. Ready to take down any hunter who gets in his way. Vries was lead off the stage by a security guard soon after. Then the same security guard walked over to Arch.

"Alright. Your turn." The Security guard led Arch up to the stage. Arch had a a sense of vertigo brought on by stage fright. Seeing the swirling people viewing him sent several emotions into his mind.


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Raw Dog - The Last Vegas
Arch stood there for some time until Killian introduced him. Arch always found it slightly scary to be the center of attention. The always lingering possiblity of messing up or embarressing yourself was always a very major possibility.

"Well now. Who do we have here. A Kaminoan from Nar Shadda named Arch. Former member of CBLE this convict is skilled with armed weapons and is #1 on many small time Coruscant criminal's hitlists. But don't let that discourage you. He has a fiance."

A picture appeared on a view screen above the stage. Instantly increasing amounts of boo's and stupid remarks appeared from the stage. Arch moved over to the viewscreen. Shock and anguish appeared upon his face as he looked at the picture. While it was clearly Du'Karn, the picture was heavily doctored. Now she appeared as a heavy deathstick addict and had several lines of fatigue on her. "She has Stigma. I wonder how that happened" Killian said sarcastically.

Rage came at a price for Arch. He darted at the center of the stage as the crowd began to boo. "What are you going to do when you see him?" Killian said loudly.

"Turn him in!" The crowd cheered. Even more rage came into Arch's mind. "...and what are we going to do?" Killian asked again. "KILL HIM!" Arch felt a security guard walk over towards him. Though he felt restrained he still tried to focus his anger at the crowd.

"You bastards. If you want to see someone die so badly why don't you just kill each other?" This was muffled in the crowd by their large amount of cheers. Arch was quickly thrown into the backstage by the securityguard. He stumbled into a wall and hit his head lightly.

"Take it easy." Drossk the Trandoshan said slowly walking over to him. Drustale was up on the stage already. Arch could hear the crowd going crazy over him.

"Oh a Trandoshan telling me to calm down?" Arch found the entire situation laughable. "Isn't your species famous for killing things if they annoy you? Maybe thats why your here in the first place." Drossk was quickly restrained by Baledarek while Dar-Resh began to restrain Arch.

"Calm down Arch. You don't want to be angry." Arch found Dar's words soothing. Strangely enough he felt more peaceful. Yossk quickly sulked for several minutes until he was lead onto the stage. Arch watched as Drustale walked off the stage laughing hysterically.

"I made fun of Killian's beard and the entire crowd laughed at him. I think that maybe I can get bet on now." Urban Death was easily the most bet on competition in the galaxy. Several thousand credits were wagered on both competitors and Hunters per day all around the galaxy. Since there was so much money being bet on it, some civilians combed entire cities looking for Team Hornet members to get the prize credits.

Arch pouted while Yossk was up on the stage. This one was more quiet then the previous productions. "Why are you here?" Arch asked Dar-Resh calmly.

"Well it's not really my choice. It's a long story, but maybe you'll hear it later." Dar seemed to have a very strange sort of feeling about him. Arch felt as if he knew him before. But strangely enough Arch had never talked to a Kel-Dor before. He knew of none in CBLE and most of the Kel-Dor he saw on the streets or in Cantinas were far to busy for small talk.

It took roughly a half hour before everyone was done and Killian was out of breath. He stepped off the stage sweating and panting for several seconds before speaking to the ten of them. "Well now. Now that that is done. We will lead you to a transport shuttle which will take you down to Naboo. Once there you have 24 hours to send in a tape to the Returner headquarters or broadcast it here. After 24 hours it is open game as the Hunters will be hunting for all ten of you." More security guards appeared behind Killian and lead the crew towards a door. Arch was stopped briefly by Killian.

"Wait Arch. That was a spectacular performance. Very top Notch. Ive heard very good things about you, and I hope you manage to break the record of eight days." Killian had a strange smirk on his face. The grin of a winner. One Arch had seen quite a lot.

"Whatever. Maybe I'll think of you when I am taking down the bastards your sending my way." Killian laughed for a few minutes before continuing.

"Ah you underestimate the hunters. They are led by the best planner and predator in the galaxy, Codename: Slate. He has ruthlessly killed over a hundred Team Hornet members and counting. His Nine Hunters were handpicked by him. Only one Hunter has ever died under his service."

"Who was he?" Arch asked curiously. He wanted to know as much about Urban Death as possible. Especially how to kill the hunters.

"Tut Tut. Right now you should go with your team mates to Naboo." Arch shrugged and began to walk away. However as he did Killian called after him. "Wait I forgot to give you, your tapes." Killian handed over a small box of tapes. Each tape was only 1 centimeter in diameter. The box also functioned as a small camera. "Easily rechargeable and viewable. Just pop the tape in and film all of your team mates. Each tape is approximately 1 hour long. Remember to either broadcast the tape or send it in. I have a good feeling about you Arch. That rarely comes. Remember, use your Team mates to your advantage and stay close to your own people. All of these kinds will try and kill you on sight. Try and stay close to the kinds who don't need money." Arch grabbed the tape box and rolled his eyes. "I'll try and keep that in mind."

Arch walked away from Killian and towards the door where the other nine were being led. He quickly caught up to Vries who began to look away at the floor as he walked. They were quickly lead to a small shuttle that had 10 seats built in. The shuttle looked quite worn and old. It appeared that it had been used in all the seasons of Urban Death to shuttle competitors to Naboo.

Arch sat down at a seat near the corner. Duan sat down next to him and smiled in his presance. "So do you think we can survive?" Duan asked. The way she said "We", made Arch feel confused at wether or not she said we as in the two of them or the entire team.

"I guess. I don't know." Arch said casually. The shuttle quickly shifted slightly and then flew off from the Returner headquarters. Arch viewed from the small viewfinder near him, the growing planet of Naboo. Naboo was a place he wanted to bring Du'Karn to.


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The main reason I chose a Kaminoan for the protagonist was I wanted to chose a completely different species that I would think no one has written a fanfic about or roleplayed as. I just decided to personify Arch a little and make him a little more human then the regular monotone Kaminoans. As you read on later in the story you'll find more questions about Arch answered.

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The Seeker - The Who
Finally the cruiser landed in the city of Theed. As Arch watched through the viewfinder he was overtaken with joy as to the beauty and splender of the planet. It was completely different from Coruscant where he spent the last 4 years. Theed was almost as if in a dream. A city of wonderous beauty where mortals would only dream of going.

As the shuttle disembarked Meleena was the first one off. Blaster in hand she pointed it at several citizens walking by. "Alright. Now first thing we have to do is get as far away from Naboo as possible." As the rest of them walked off Arch was to overtaken by the scenery to speak.

"Wait. Don't you think we should relax. I mean we just got here and we have 24 hours until we start getting hunted." Vries said slowly. Meleena scoffed rather loudly and walked over to a nearby fountain.

"We have to find public transportation now. But first We have to decide where we should go."

Arch quickly took his DL-22 out into his hand. Fumbling around with the empty blaster cartrage.

"Well right now I think we should stock up on weapons. There is no telling what could happen." Meleena looked at Arch curiously and smirked broadly.

"I like your style. All you care about is how you plan to do it. Alright we need weapons. But we aren't going to find it here. What I think we should do is go to Nar Shadda. When we get there we should be able to blend in and not get noticed." Arch nodded slightly and placed his weapon into his jacket pocket. He walked over to the Kel Dor Dar-Resh. He was sitting by the side of a nearby fountain. Seemingly calm and peaceful.

"So your from Dor? Isn't that a broken world near Endor?" Arch asked him curiously. He found it strange that a Kel Dor would be there. Especially one as mysterious as him.

"Yes I am. I was there on an... assignment. I was found by the Returner Organisation on a small little outpost there in the middle of nowhere. Apparently they wondered the same thing you did." Arch still found it odd. Dar-Resh was hiding something that he didn't want to disclose.

"Alright. Now ive been here before. I think we should first go to the nearest courier and send in the first tape. Then go to the nearest public transportation area and get off this rock to Nar Shadda. Once there we should be able to blend in and make it harder for the Hunters to find us." Meleena triumphantly said to the crowd. She walked straight down a street towards a small building. The rest of the crowd followed.

~~Meanwhile~~

In the space station of the returner headquarters a very important meeting was taking place. In the Hunter meeting hall where all ten Hunters would meet. To find out how to start their plan of action. Ten dossiers in the form of datapads were spread out on the desk in the middle of the room.

"Alright. Now we have 24 hours until we can start looking for them." One Hunter said. He was a tall Gran wearing dark grey Durasteel armor. He had dark green facepaint on his face in the form of strange almost mandalorian symbols.

"Quiet Duran-Ran. Right now we have to wait for Slate to get back from Coruscant. Remember his little mission?" A female said now. She was a short Zeltron wearing black tight leather.

"Remember Black Widow. This season is going to be exceptionaly hard. Especially with this subject." Another Hunter now said. He was an unknown Hunter incased entirely in armor. He looked like a cross between a shadow trooper and a storm trooper. His armor was black as night and the helmet looked like a human skull. It had 2 orange lights where the eyes would be. His black bone-like hand moved towards a datapad resting at the top.

Black Widow quickly took the datapad out of the hunter's hand. "Well for once Seeker your right." Black Widow quickly plugged the datapad into a wall monitor. Instantly a picture of Arch from the stage previously appeared.

"Alright. This is Arch, a last minute addition to this Urban Death line up. He has been a member of CBLE for four years and has advanced weapons training in both blasters and longswords. He was top in his class at the CBLE academy until he became a detective for 2 years."

"So what? Both the Mon Calamari and the Rodian are sentanced with assasination charges. What makes this Kaminoan so special." An uptight Hunter said. This one was a new addition after the previous Hunter was killed by a member of Team Hornet. He was a very young Human with dark brown hair garbed in light armor.

"Let me finish Dardan. Arch is also the only surviving member of project Raziel. A kaminoan cloning project that surprisingly had several casualties. It was silenced and placed under the guise that there were 100 clones created and only Arch was the surviving clone. Right now I have just heard from the Head that he was placed here under Slate's personal orders. He states that we should kill all of Arch's companions first..."

Dardan quickly butted in. "Whoa whoa whoa Widow. Kill 9 Hornets before taking down the king. I am sorry but I am aiming my sight right for his head the moment I am down there."

"On your head be it Dardan. Currently this is all the information given to us by the Heads. But stated that there is more to follow. Right now we have to wait for Slate to breif us on how we are going to trace them using the tapes they send in."

"Very well." Seeker said in a very dark and gruff voice from behind his helmet. "Let us prepare our weapons and get ready for Slate's arrival." The ten Hunters quickly stood up and bowed. Then left the meeting room.


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Erm... critiscm is a little hard because your story is so good. Sorry, but sometimes there are just stories like that, but when I can and when I do find a mistake or have an idea, I will try to point it out.

I did notice one mistake though. It was in Minus 92...

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I think that you might have just gotten a little bit confused right there. Nice additions though, you seem to be pumping them out fast.

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Lie, lie to my face,
Tell me it ain't no thing,
That's what I wanna hear.
Take, a lie to the grave,
That's what and old friend told me,
Look at what it did for him.


3's and 7's - Queens of the stone age
The courier service was a done deal. The only person there didn't have a holonet to watch Urban Death with. So it was easy to film the ten of them for 1 hour and then send it to the Returner Headquarters express. Arch handled the camera and quickly skimmed over everyone with the viewfinder. Meleena stood triumphantly with Yossk near the fountain. Dar-Resh sat down on the opposite end of the two. Baledarek the silent one leaned on a wall near the courier office. Guan Kleg the ghost stood by herself in the middle of the street. Duan stood near Vries who stood near Arch. Drossk stayed inside the courier office. Waiting. While Drustale Arms kept trying to yank the camera out of Arch's hands.

"Come on. Let me film it." Arms continued to pester Arch until he finally filmed him. Then he turned the camera around and filmed himself.

"Alright now happy? Have a good time over there."

The tape popped out of the camera a few minutes later. Yossk quickly gave it to the man in the courier service who quickly sealed it into a small box. "Alright this should be there within 2 hours."

Meleena quickly edged the rest of them towards another building. This one marked "IMMIGRATION."

"Come on. We got the tape down. Lets get off this rock." Meleena seemed very anxious to leave Naboo. Strangely enough Arch wondered if it was due to a criminal record. She did say she was there before. Nar Shadda was a good place to disappear from both the Hunters and the law.

The Immigration building was simply an intergalactic bus station. There was a protocol droid behind a desk with a computer who quickly took down their names (All not real) then told them to board a nearby ship to Nar Shadda. Saying that it would take approximately 6-7 hours to make it to Nar Shadda. Meleena then quickly rushed the group onto the ship and finally cooled off.

Arch sat down in a corner with a table across from him. Vries quickly sat down next to him while the ghost Guan Kleg sat down across from the both of them.

"So Vries. Who'd you murder to get here?" Arch asked him. The question was plauging him for quite a while.

It took a few seconds for Vries to answer "... I didn't murder anyone. I just wanted to get away from Corellia for a while. Urban Death seemed the best route out." Arch shrugged slightly. Even Vries was hiding something. It seemed the other nine contestants had something to hide concerning their crimes. Arch leaned towards Guan Kleg.

"So why did you go on this?" He asked the Duros. Guan simply ignored him for quite a while before finally speaking.

"No reason..." Her voice sounded sollumn and robust. It spoke basic with a certain quality unmatched by human vocal cords. Arch was surprised that an anti-social person could speak in such an elegant manner unmatched by any of her species.

Baledarek the shadowy chiss sat down next to Guan Kleg. Strangely enough the Chiss didn't speak at all like Kleg did. "Why's do wes needs to go to Nar Shadda?" His grammer greatly lowered his image for Arch.

"I don't know. What were you? A Bartender?" Arch asked him jokingly concerning his grammer. Baledarek seemed rather put out and left the seat. Arch shrugged, guessing he got it right.

~~Meanwhile~~

On the Returner headquarters a large ship slowly docked. All 10 Hunters quickly ran to the Hangar to greet the ship. It was the "Unknown Stranger" A famous ship, known for carrying Slate. The leader of the hunters.

Gas and electricity fizzled out of the ship as the drawbridge slowly lowered down. Five men garbed entirely in black robes walked down the drawbridge. Their faces were unknown as they wore disfiguring masks that hid their features. As they walked down the drawbridge one more followed. This one taller with longer robes. His hood more revealing to the mask on his face. The mask to hide his facial features. It was both disfiguring and scary. It held an etched pattern in what looked like blood. As he walked down the drawbridge the ten hunters quickly bowed to him. Black Widow walked towards Slate.

"Master Slate. How was Coruscant?" She asked him still bowing.

"Terrible. The only enjoyable thing about it was meeting the heads." The voice sounded piercing and metalic. Almost as if it was a metal beast.

"Ah well. We still have 20 hours until we start hunting for them. Where do you suppose they plan to go."

"Not now Widow. I must give you and the hunters specific information about Team Hornet. Specifically about the Kel Dor and the Kaminoan Arch."

"I trust it is important?" She said curiously.

"Oh very. I know exactly where they are going..."

The ten Hunters and Slate walked out of the Hangar and made their way to the meeting room.

~~Meanwhile~~

4 Hours Later

Nar Shadda appeared out of the viewfinder. Arch of course wasn't the least bit enjoyed about it. Something about going to Nar Shadda didn't feel right to him. Nevertheless he was excited that he would be able to get some ammunition for his DL-22.

During the last 6 hours many people shifted seats. Arch still sat next to the viewfinder though now Duan sat next to him. Guan Kleg still sat across from him. She hadn't moved an inch since the ship took off. Arch soon found out that Duan had a mother with Stigma.

"So you joined Urban Death as a way to get money for Alpha? Thats a noble cause." Arch said to her softly. "What do you do anyway?"

"Oh I work in Bacta distribution. Though that is only just to get credits. What I really wish to do is train people to use Vibroblades. Though there is no work there."

"Vibroblades? I am pretty good with a longsword myself." Arch caught the gaze of Dar-Resh walking by. Strangely enough Dar-Resh seemed far more anxious to get off the ship then anyone else. Even Meleena who was playing Pazzak and smashed the cards out of the way every time she lost. Dar-Resh continued to pace around the ship until it entered the atmosphere.

"Maybe when we get on the planet I can see how good you are with a blade." Arch said to Duan. She nodded cheerfully.


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There is a lot of foreshadowing and symbolism I put into this chapter that is going to make sense later on. I do hope at least one person notices what kind of weapon I based Arch's pistol off of.

Minus 88 and COUNTING...

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Cause You gotta be bigger, be faster, be stronger
If your gonna survive any longer
In this lifetime, it better be the right time
The first time might be your last time
Am I a failure if I got nothing to lose
No, I'm not a failure, I got something to prove


Not Listening - Papa Roach

"Ah the stench of tired, desireable living. I do love Nar Shadda." Vries exclaimed as soon as they got off the ship. Strangely enough Arch didn't find anything fascinating with Nar Shadda. It looked to much like a darker more urban Coruscant. Though Arch did enjoy cities, he found this one to be poorer and more of a cess pool then Coruscant.

Meleena quickly got infront of the group once everyone got out. "Alright Nar Shadda. We have about 18 more hours until its open season. So I suggest we find somewhere to hide out and get weapons." Arch was surprised to see everyone had credits. Even himself. Killian did say he would get 1/100th of his winnings in advance.

So the party walked. The refugee sector was perhaps one of the more famous places in Nar Shadda. Though Arch only knew it by reputation, Vries seemed to know the entire area as if it were printed on the back of his hand. Arch was seemingly surprised, since Nar Shadda was a very confusing place and many alley ways looked exactly the same.

Vries lead them to a small pawn shop just a short walk away from the landing pad that greeted them to the planet. The shop itself looked much bigger in the inside then out. The entire shop was filled to the brim with many kinds of weapons. Arch felt he would be blinded by the amount of glare from the reflections coming off of the weapons.

There was a short Ithorian behind a counter who quickly asked the group for their choice in weapons. Arch quickly took his DL-22 towards the Ithorian.

"Can I find any upgrades for a blaster pistol?" He asked the Iridonian. Presenting him with the pistol.

"I don't carry any. However I can trade in this blaster for one that I have already modified." Arch shrugged and then nodded. His DL-22's trigger was already starting to stick.

The Ithorian lead Arch towards a back room with a workbench to the side. Several pistols were hanging from a hanger of sorts near it. The Iridonian quickly brought over one from the rack.

"This is the DE-10 blaster pistol. Though it has been heavily modified. I removed the scope rather easily and brought the handle much closer to the trigger. As well as adding in a barrel to the middle to increase rapid fire."

"How would that work out?" Arch asked taking the pistol into his hand.

"Rather simply." The Ithorian pointed to a hammer-like object sticking out of the barrel. "This is the hammer. In order to fire you must hold down the hammer to rotate the barrel and fire. The barrel is easily loadable with regular blaster packs. However unlike other blaster pistols. This one must be hand loaded with blaster loads directly into the barrel. I made this easier by making the barrel come out rather easily. Try it out." The Ithorian lead him towards a small target that was shown on a wall.

Arch gulped and held down the hammer. Then he fired. The blaster rather quickly fired and hit directly on the bullseye in the middle of the target. Arch smirked and placed his right hand ontop of the hammer. Then quick as lightning he fired 3 shots faster then the Iridonian could see in a triangle-like pattern around the bullseye.

"I'll take it." He said quickly.

The Ithorian gave him a complementary holster and belt. Which he easily fitted and placed the blaster into. He slowly waited behind the scenes while everyone else got weapons. Meleena still had her blaster carbine which she only bought ammunition for. Duan bought two longswords that she soon sheathed on her back in a cross. Baledarek bought a cheap used classic E11 blaster rifle that he soon held. Guan Kleg the ghost bought a old Bryar rifle that she slung onto her back. Both Yossk and Drossk bought A280 blaster rifles that they both slung on their backs. Drustale Arms surprisingly bought a Stormtrooper Mark 1 rifle. The Ithorian said he had mass number of black market models brought in after the fall of the empire.

After they were all armed Meleena triumphantly said. "Alright now we need to find a hideout." Arch was busy fiddling around with his new blaster pistol to care what she said. It felt like a new form of freedom to now be able to quickly draw out his gun at a moments notice.

Vries lead them on an even longer walk this time. He lead them down a very long road out of the Refugee sector. Until he made it to a large apartment complex.

"I went to this place some years ago. There was a major gun battle here several years ago that involved abandoning of many apartments. We could probably find an abandoned apartment we could use for a few days." Vries took them up a few floors to a large abandoned hallway. The hallway itself was not lighted and Arch found it hard to see his hand infront of him. But soon Vries made it to a door at the end of the hallway.

"Alright. Anyone good with picking a lock?" Drustale Arms quickly volunteered and took out a mechanical lockpick. Quick as lighting the door was opened.

The apartment had aparently seen better days. It provided a good view of the refugee sector however. The apartment itself was ransacked. Furnature was spread out on the floor in different places. There was an abandoned Holonet in the corner that appeared it hadn't been touched for years.

Everyone spread out into various places in the apartment. Vries quickly turned on the holonet. Which ironically was tuned to the Urban Death network.

Killian's broad face appeared instantly on the screen. He was on the stage that they all went on before. The viewscreen held the Returner logo on it.

"Alright. There are still 17 hours until their 24 hour headstart is over. Until then you can watch their first tape sent in." The viewscreen then began showing the tape Arch filmed on Naboo. The screen shifted to all of the party members in different places, then to Arch. "Alright now happy? Have a good time over there."

"Well lets hope the next one will have fewer team mates in it. For now let us view our Hunters."

The ten Hunters excluding Slate soon appeared on stage. Lead by the Zeltron Black Widow. Who was the leader in Slate's absence. "Hey Vries. Who are the Hunters anyway?" Arch asked viewing the screen very impatiently. Vries quickly pointed them out.

"Thats Black Widow. They show her dazzeling Hornets with her pherimones and then killing them when they lower their guard. She hasn't killed a Hornet for some time now which leads her to be unpopular." Vries pointed to another Hunter. This one was Gran. "Thats Duran-Ran. He apparently kills people from behind with a very short vibroblade. Most Hornets have never even noticed it." He continued to a human. "That's Dardan. The newest member. He is younger then all of us and is a sniper. Apparently he uses a distrupter. But I am not sure." He pointed to another one. This one was a Gamoreanian. "Thats Bravil. He is usually the first one who attacks the Hornets. He comes at everyone wielding a huge battle axe that has killed many." He continued to another one. This one was a large male Selkath. "That's Aquatos. He like Duan uses a Vibrosword. However his Vibrosword has so many upgrades that I heard he beat a Jedi with it."

"A jedi?" Arch scoffed. Jedi were more numerous in the galaxy after the fall of the Empire. After Luke Skywalker created his notorious and famous Jedi Academy. It was rumored to be on Yavin 4. Arch bought his ship "The Platinum Crow" off a merchant who claimed he bought the parts off of Kyle Katarn who was a Jedi. Arch had never heard about a being with a vibroblade beating a Jedi. It seemed to fictional to be true. Dar-Resh quickly shuddered as soon as Arch scoffed. Strangely enough Arch didn't see Dar-Resh buying a weapon.

"Well thats what I heard. Anyway moving on." The next one was one garbed entirely in black armor. He had a demonic look to his armor in the shape of a skull.

"Thats Seeker. He holds the second most kills in Urban Death history. He uses a multitude of Blaster carbines and very heavy weaponry. He mostly gets vantage points and captures Hornets by surprise."

The next one was a Bothan. He wore a New republic pilot's uniform excluding the helmet. "Thats Aviator. He is the pilot behind the hunters. He flies his ship "The lowly gap" Which carries the hunters on it. Vries continued to another Hunter.

The last three were all human. The first one was completely bald. Excluding a large beard that ran from his chin. He wore light Durasteel armor that had a E11 strapped to it.

"Thats Rotenegro." He continued to another one. This one was wearing a form of storm trooper armor. However it appeared to be heavily modified. Especially the helmet which now had a large breathing mask running from a pack on his back to the mask. "Thats Screech. He goes for the offencive with Bravil. He uses a DL-44 Blaster Pistol." He continued to the last human. He wore a long tunic with brown pants and matching boots. Unlike the other ones, he didn't carry a weapon. "Thats Dysanid. He doesn't go out into the field and mostly does the recon work. Like tracking Hornets down and finding out what kinds of weapons they use. He usually does the torturing."

"Big deal. Where is this Slate guy who leads them?" Arch asked turning his head to all of them. Most of them looked like hardened criminals. Like the ones Arch had already dealt with. But none of them looked to intimidating, except for Seeker.

"Slate very rarely goes on camera with his killings and never shows up on the Urban Death Network. He is credited with the most killings on record. No one really knows how he kills people as most people very rarely live to see him."

"Well thats useless isn't it?" Arch smirked at it. Slate felt like more of a coward then a leader.

"Well I think its time to get some rest. Our head start will be wearing off eventually. " It was already common sense. But he was right. The Holonet was turned off and everyone eventually slept.


"There's gotta be a better way to make a living"
-Kyle Katarn

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This time I included a quote from The Good the Bad and the Ugly. Drifting away from my large amount of song quotes.

Minus 87 and COUNTING...

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[Angel Eyes looks around and catches sight of Blondie]
Angel Eyes: A golden-haired angel watches over him.

The Good, the Bad and the Ugly
It took roughly another day to fall into an ordinary routine. Arch found it odd that no more information was given about where the hunters were. It was all rumors that they were on Naboo and had gotten a "lead" that lead them to another planet somewhere else. Arch didn't know whether to be scared or glad. Either a Hunter would come breaking down their door or break down the door of some random house on Tatooine.

Luck, or the force wasn't on Arch's side that day.

Arch spent that day loading and unloading his gun. Then practicing quick drawing it out. Arch wasn't that good at it, though he was good at gunslinging his gun into it's holster.

The day mostly consited of lounging around until Arch filmed another tape. This one just mearly viewed everyone and then cut off. Once Arch finished filming Duan walked up to him.

"Do you want to take a walk?" She asked him curiously. Arch shrugged and nodded. He and Duan walked out of the apartment and eventually the entire building.

The streets of Nar Shadda were a cold and desolate place. Duan was quite talkative for a Selkath. She would speak about her life on Manaan and how she wished to leave the aquatic planet in search of adventure it appeared. All the stories blended into each other. Arch was half listening until she stopped by a railing. They were near the Nar Shadda docks now. The view showed a very large area of space. One if you were to fall into it, you would be banished into Oblivion

"So why did you want to go onto Urban Death?" She asked leaning on the railing.

"My fiance needs Alpha. The last time I saw her was a while ago. She was very sick with Stigma. I mostly got drafted into this and have no apparent reason for going on with it." He responded slowly. Arch to leaned on the railing, looking down into the abyss below.

"So why do you want to risk your life? For fame? For glory? There are other ways to get Alpha you know." Arch shrugged. She was very correct and to the point.

"That is true. I don't know. I just have this feeling that I can do this. Ive had this feeling as long as I can remember. I feel like I can take on Slate and his Hunters. Like its my duty to.. exterminate their criminal lives." Duan stopped leaning on the railing.

"...Well lets hope I can. Ive never heard of anyone on Urban Death actually having some formal training in armed weaponry. Most of the contestants are either people with nothing to lose. I think besides my fiance Du'Karn. I have nothing to lose and everything to gain."

"You seem hellbent on your own dimise. Most people like that probably have a guardian angel protecting them." Arch shrugged slightly and rested his right hand on his pistol.

Suddenly as sharp as a razer Arch heard a noise behind him. It was the sound of a starship flying through an atmosphere. As he turned around he caught the site of a ship bearing the words "The Lowly gap" written on the side.

"The hunters." Arch was surprised they found them so quickly. He expected they would come after he mailed the next tape.

Arch and Duan ran down the farmiliar alleyways until they made their way back to the apartment building. The Lowly gap was already docked outside of the building. No one was aboard it however.

Duan and Arch quickly made their way into the elevator onto the floor. Arch stopped Duan before she could continue.

"I am going to check this out. Wait here until you hear blaster fire." Arch slowly continued walking with his hand on his blaster.

Arch expected the door to be ajar. He didn't expect to hear someone blaring on the comlink.

"I know Slate is going to be angry when he finds out I took the ship alone.... no I caught someone here by surprise. The apartment was already empty except for one. I think it's that Chiss bartender "Balderek" he shot first and I took him down." The voice was a Bothan's. He spoke in heavy Bothanese with more grunts coming from inside the apartment. He wasn't alone.

Arch leaned on the side of the doorway into the apartment and peered outside. The entire place was empty, excluding a Bothan and two humans who appeared to be mercenaries. The Bothan was standing over the dead corpse of Balderek who now had his eyes closed and a small dribble of blood from his mouth. A large red puncture wound existed in his torso.

Arch gulped and kept his hand on his blaster. He sighed and walked into the doorway with it drawn.

"Am I interrupting someone?" He said waiting for the Bothan to turn. "It is the Kaminoan. Kill him." Arch quick as lightning pressed his hand on to his hammer and fired. He instantly shot a human on the right directly inbetween the eyes. Showing a massive burn wound from the blaster discharge. Arch continued firing at the human on the left. Firing at least 2 shots at his torso and one at his shoulder. He crumpled under the strain and fell to the ground, dead.

"Like some of that?" He said as the Bothan brought out what looked like a short Vibroblade. Before he could attack Arch fired one more shot into his torso and another at his abdomen. The Bothan screamed in pain as he fell onto the window at the edge of the apartment. The window however was made of very powerful metal and did not break.

Arch walked over to the Bothan with his gun pointed at him. Stepping over Balderek's corpse. The Bothan quickly attempted to grab at his vibrosword. Arch smirked broadly at his failed attempts.

"You murder my team mate when he is outnumbered. You must really wish to die." Arch brought his blaster infront of the Bothan's head. "Lets hope Slate enjoys your company." He fired his final shot. Killing the Bothan "Aviator".

"And then there were Ten." He said slowly as he holstered his weapon quickly. Duan called out to him.

"Arch. We have to get out of here. I think I know where everyone else is." Arch shrugged and walked over to Baledarek. The one he didn't expect to die first. Arch reached for his E11 and slung it onto his back. Then made the long trek back to the elevator


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Very nice job. So Arch finally gets some action. I personally never would have thought that a Kaminoan would be like that. This is ground-breaking! Wonderful job, and I am anticipating more.

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A little narration I decided to include here. This is a new feature I plan to include every ACT

Minus 86 and COUNTING...

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That's life
I tell ya, I can't deny it,
I thought of quitting baby,
But my heart just ain't gonna buy it.


That's Life - Frank Sinatra
30 days later

"As I neared the end of the Urban Death a feeling of dread came over me. Worse then how I felt after Balderek was killed by Aviator... I knew what I was... I knew what I would become. Thoughts of suicide came over me toward the end of my journey to the Returner headquarters. But... I couldn't do it. I had to press on to my final objective. Constant pain came regularly. Sharp piercing pain that would make strange visions come to me. Maybe it was my wound... but I knew better. The pain made me stronger, it made me... indestructible. Truthfully I knew better. But I didn't care, the pain would grow so sharp that I even brought a blaster to my head. Yet I didn't fire. I couldn't do it... I wasn't going to die until I helped the people I promised to save..."

Present time

The 7 of them had taken refuge in a nearby Cantina. Apparently swayed by Vries's offer to have a drink to pass the time. Apparently Balderek decided to stay behind, since he was quite known here in this part of Nar Shadda. It seemed that it was a mistake that cost him his life.

Arch and Duan made their way into the Cantina where the group was. Everyone was clustered around a set of tables. Arch sat down in a booth next to Dar-Resh.

"Balderek is dead. He was killed by the Bothan Aviator" Arch said to everyone else. Many of them stopped drinking immediately and gave shocking surprising facial expressions. Including Guan Kleg.

"Aviator is dead as well. His corpse is lying in our apartment. Right now we have to mail our tape and distance ourselves as far from Nar Shadda as possible. They know exactly where we are and staying in a public place is only going to help them." Arch said smoothly as he stood up. Dar-Resh followed him, but many stayed sitting at their tables.

"Come on? Don't you want to live forever? Lets go." Arch didn't care that he was now making a scene in front of all the other patrons. He just wanted to get as far from Nar Shadda as possible. So they wouldn't have another accident like Balderek.

They walked out of the bar rather quickly and walked in a straight line away from the apartment building.

"So where are we going to go?" Meleena asked Arch as he lead.

"I don't have any clue. Right now we have to think of a plan. But I think the best choice of action is to get as far away from the apartment building as possible"

~~Meanwhile~~

Black Widow gulped as she pressed the door button. Slate's meditation chamber was very intricate with it's locking mechanisms.

The entire room was very cold. Black Widow felt as if Slate transported a glacier from Hoth into this room. But as she spied on the nearby vents she knew better. The room sloped downwars in a spiral to the bottom. Where Slate meditated in darkness.

"Black Widow. Has Aviator returned?" He asked in a raspy voice from the bottom.

"How did you know?... Anyway he hasn't returned. His killswitch has been activated." Suddenly Slate's darkened robed body appeared out of the darkness.

"After everything I told him about Arch and he still went there... send Dardan and Duran-Ran. Give Duran-Ran a blaster this time. A good old fasioned carbine will do the trick. Specifically tell him again to try and kill his team mates this time. Take the spare ship and try to head them off before they leave the planet." Slate finished. His body went back into the darkness. Black Widow shivered some more and left the room.

~~Meanwhile~~

The courier service on Nar Shadda was very to the point. You deposited what you wanted to transport with the place in mind into a large bin. It took roughly a minute to send the tape to the Returner headquarters. Everyone clustered around the Courier office. Arch leaned on the side of a wall. Overcome with emotions he had never felt before. Guilt and misery


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"Balderek is dead. He was killed by the Bothan Aviator" Arch said to everyone else. Many of them stopped drinking immediately and gave shocking surprising facial expressions. Including Guan Kleg.

"Aviator is dead as well. His corpse is lying in our apartment.
I think that you made a mistake here.
I am curious why Arch is suddenly feeling these emotions. To me, they kinda seem all of the sudden. Regardless, it was a good chapter. I kinda have a feeling the Slate is a Dark Jedi....


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Minus 85 and COUNTING...

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You think you're in control but you make me sick
I want to watch you suffer
The way that you've made me suffer


The thing I hate - Stabbing Westward
"Arch?... Arch?" The voice sounded so farmiliar to Arch. His body felt so strained and ridged from leaning on that wall for so long. Suddenly he felt his body being shaken away. As his eyes opened he saw the all to farmiliar face of Dar-Resh.

"Resh? What is it?"

"We have a problem. Check out the holonet."

It took quite a few minutes for Arch to restabilise himself. His body still felt stuck and hard. As if he was made of metal and bone. But Dar helped him walk towards the Courier office. Meleena held the Courier at gunpoint as he turned a holonet nearby on. The all to farmiliar face of Killian was there.

"As we have just watched the tape of team Hornet has now been shown. However we have some news. The team pilot, "Aviator" is reported to have killed one of the members of Team Hornet." Suddenly the stage shifted. A new viewscreen appeared behind Killian now. It showed 20 names and numbers across from it. #1 had the name "ARCH". It showed the other nine members ending with Balederek at #10. Then it went into hunters.

"The numbers next to the names are how much has been bid on them. We have news that Balederek has been eliminated" The crowd roard from applause. The security guards were already having trouble stopping the crowd.

"But we also have another tragedy. The team member "Aviator" has also been killed. We have footage here of it."

Arch was even more surprised. It had footage apparently coming from Aviator's point of view. It showed him talking on his comlink. "...I think it's that Chiss bartender "Balderek" he shot first and I took him down." the voice was heavy translated into basic. It now sounded like a human talking. Suddenly there was a loud stumbling as there was an all to farmiliar voice. Aviator turned around to see Arch. The crowd gasped to Arch's appearance.

Arch was shocked at how he looked. His eye sockets looked sunken, his eyes looked bloodshot. Arch didn't know wether they doctored his footage or it was really what he looked like.

"Am I interrupting someone?" Arch said as Aviator gasped. The footage had Arch fire at the two humans and then at Aviator before they could attack. Then pointing it at his head.

"You murder my team mate. You must really wish to die" Then it showed Arch fire. The footage immediately cut off there.

"Well there we go. 1 Hornet down and 1 Hunter down. It seems that each surviving member of Team Hornet now have 2000 credits given to them or their loved ones. Tune in for more Urban Death later..."

Arch was to stricken. The footage made him look like some sort of ice cold killer. Like he didn't pause to think about his actions at all. Guan Kleg walked over to Arch as he stumbled away.

"Hey Arch. Come on. Meleena has a way to get us off the planet. Lets go." Arch shrugged and turned around.

"Yeah alright." His body suddenly enough didn't feel as stiff as before.

The group slowly made their way through more buildings until it got to another immigration area.

"Now come on. Lets get off this planet before Slate sends more men after us" Meleena stopped before she could say anything else. A gun was pointed at her face.

"To late." The gun was pointed from the depths of shadow. A multi-eyed figure came out of the shadows. It was Duran-Ran.

"Slate has high and mighty orders for your death. You must know that." Everyone appeared frozen and surprised. Until Meleena reached for her carbine. Duran-Ran's finger went for his trigger.

Arch reached for his E11. He fired at Duran-Ran's gun. The gun thrown from the Gran's hands and hit a nearby wall.

"Ah the Kaminoan wishes to play. Lets go then." Arch slowly backed over to Duan. However as he did he heard a distrupter discharge hit several centimeters away from him.

"Take down that sniper." The face was all to farmiliar. It was of Dardan, the newest member of the Hunters. He was ontop of another roof nearby. Vries already reached for his gun. He and Drossk ran towards a low rooftop after Dardan. Then quick as lightning a large flash came from nowhere as a flash grenade was triggered in the middle of the alleyway. Duan, Guan Kleg, Yossk, Dar-Resh, Meleena and Drustale Arms fell to the ground. Apparently stunned. Arch turned around as the flash grenade triggered and he barely had enough time to react as the Gran hit him over the head with a Vibroblade.

The area swirled and manifested itself in different colors. Arch felt as if he was going to fall through the floor itself. Thankfully a wall nearby sufficed.

"The killer of Aviator cannot take a simple blow to the head? You are weak Kaminoan." Arch slowly crawled over to the stunned body of Duan. Slowly taking a longsword from her back.

"Don't call me weak..." Arch said picking himself up using the longsword. He shook his head several times and readied himself. "I'll enjoy gutting you." Arch swung the longsword over his shoulder and felt a feeling of Deja Vu as the Gran charged for him. He caught the voice of Vries from far away. "Arch. Take care of the Gran. We'll take care of this guy." Arch silently nodded as he parried the Gran's attack


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Slow Ride - Foghat
The Gran's deep sunken breath made Arch feel dirty and disgusting. He coughed heavily into the Gran's green pained face. Surprisingly Arch could barely keep up against his blows.

"Come on. This is pathetic Arch. Your file said you had "Advanced training". All I see here is a washed up detective". The Gran's mocking voice mixed with basic sent his laughter echoing in Arch's mind. As if his pupils dilated he charged for the Gran out of anger.

Arch launched his sword at the Gran with all the force he could muster. The Gran barely had any time to parry the blow and dodge a large torrential rain of sparks as his sword was instantly cut in half.

"I'll tear your bastard heart out" Arch said slowly as he swept at the Gran. Duran-Ran's eyes began to look in several different directions for ways to escape. Yet Arch had manage to corner him. The Gran stumbled as he walked back and fell against a wall. Arch's sword was in his face.

"Washed up detective? More like engineered detective"

The Gran seemed to be backing up from the blade's edge. "Wait a moment. If you kill me Slate will send all of us to this planet. You won't have another waking moment as Black Widow and Seeker break down every door on this pathetic pirate planet. You will be found and killed instantly on live Holonet. Slate isn't going to forgive the only time someone has killed two Hunters in a row."

"You should be more worried about what I am going to do to you. Now I am faced with a decision. Either rip off your head or rip out your beating heart and stuff it down your throat. Either way suffices. Which do you prefer?" Duran-Ran's eyes looked up at Arch and then at his blade. The glare reflected off the blade and back at Arch made him look demonic. As if he was a dark angel sent to murder the murderers.

"Suddenly Arch heard something behind him. It was Vries and Drossk who appeared to be dragging an unconcious Dardan the Sniper." Arch slowly turned around and walked towards them.

"Ah good. We have two Hunters and no deaths. Lets keep it that way." Arch motioned to Vries to put Dardan down near Duran-Ran.

"Drossk knock them out. Once Slate finds them he isn't going to be happy we just humiliated them on live footage." Drossk nodded and took his gun out. He hit both of them over the head efficiantly and productively.

"Alright we have to get off the planet. How is everyone else?" Arch asked Vries who was dusting himself off. Apparently glad of a job well done.

"A little shaken but it could be worse. Meleena checked the Transport office. The main droid there has been deactivated and all the transport starships are still there." Arch motioned to the both of them to walk with him.

"Can we commandeer one of them?"

"Way ahead of you. Yossk is already on prying one of the plating off one of them. But we probably only have enough resources to make one trip with it." Arch nodded happily. For once everything was good. Even though Balederek was dead, at least he prevented Duran-Ran from killing anyone else.


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Very nice. It seems like Arch is changing. I like where you are going with this. I love the detail. Keep it up!

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Nice start (read first 2 posts) liked the 'detective' feel to it.
Will read more.


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I spent the entire previous day brainstorming ideas for this fanfic. I have a notebook full of point form notes about where to take this fanfic. All in chronological order.

Anyway I have recieved several good reviews for this fanfic. I hope to see more. Here is number 10 in the songs that I based this fanfic off of

Minus 83 and COUNTING...

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I was born on Olympus
To my father a son
I was raised by the demons
Trained to reign as the one


God of Thunder - Kiss
Eventually they managed to get the ship into the air. Drustale Arms was piloting, with everyone else seated and resting. Arch was simply glad that he could see the planet fading away as they lifted off.

"So where are we going now?" Drustale Arms asked as he began pulling up the galaxy map.

Everyone murmered around until Dar-Resh spoke up. "We are going to Korriban. Slate would never think to find us there. We can transmite the tapes live from there." Everyone looked around and shrugged. There were no other places of choice. Drustale Arms shrugged and imputted the coordinants. Arch closed his eyes as the blue pattern enveloped the ship in hyperspace

In the dream he was an invisible ghost. Viewing the actions that took place. Surprisingly it was a dark starcruiser. There was almost no light to see. Arch slowly walked through the starship towards the security area. It was near the bridge.

As Arch walked into the security area he saw a dark figure there. The Dark figure was cloaked in black robes. He had a metalic-like effect with his cape and accessories. His face was disguised by a mask which showed nothing. Arch felt this figure reminded him of Slate. The figure didn't seem to notice him. He took a small container and sealed it. The container was clear and appeared to have DNA samples inside. The figure quickly turned on a holographic recorder.

"I have encased here DNA samples. I have learned through the force that one day a figure known as "The angel of Urban Death" will need them. I have also forseen the return of the Infinite Empire. An Empire that once shaped the galaxy. Dominated by the Rakatan. Strangely enough I forsee all of this happens long after my time. Carth, you will take these to the predetirmined destination correct?" Apparently the figure was speaking to someone else. A voice came from the other end.

"Yeah, Revan. Take the Hawk over there right now. But I doubt these things are going to be found for at least thousands of years."

The figure known as "Revan" waved his hand. "It doesn't matter. One day the Rakatan Scourge will appear again and this "angel" is all I can see as part of the light side of the force. I will meditate on this answer as best I can. Just meet me at the site and I will hand over the DNA samples and the tools. Seal it in a crate and etch the words "and so ends the age of basic and reason"

"Alright Revan." The dream ended in a great flash. Arch didn't understand half of what went on there. But the words "and so ends the age of basic and reason" stayed in his mind as he awoke.

Arch awoke when the ship exited hyperspace. Arch peered out a window to view the great planet of Korriban. Arch stood up in the ship and walked over to Dar-Resh. Who appeared to be thinking to himself.

"Resh. Do you know of someone called Revan?" Dar-Resh perked his head up as if he knew instantly.

"Of course. Around 4000 years ago there was a Jedi Lutienant named Darth Revan. He became the Dark Lord of the Sith. He was betrayed by his apprentice and lost his memory. Eventually he repented and saved the galaxy from his apprentice. Turning back into the light. He left for the Unknown regions of the galaxy 4000 years ago and no one has ever seen him again. Some say he knew the fate of the galaxy thousands of years in the future." Arch found it odd he would find some vision of a Sith Lord.

"I just had an odd dream of a robed figure named Revan."

"Ah. Well I wouldn't dwell on it." Dar-Resh still seemed to be hiding something. Like he knew entirely what his dream was about.

"Alright. Korriban. I am taking this thing in for a landing. There seems to be an abandoned settlement named Dreshdae." Arch sat down next to Dar-Resh. Hoping to see what all the fuss of Korriban was about.

~~Meanwhile~~

Duran-Ran was slowly dragged into Slate's quarter's by Seeker. He was dragged by the cuff of his armor. Dardan was walking by, though the expression on his face was of fear.

Seeker shoved Duran-Ran into Slate's darkened quarters. Dardan was roughly pushed by Seeker. "Slate is very disappointed in you two. " Seeker quickly closed the door and walked back to the bridge.

Duran-Ran stood up with Dardan and looked around. A small light appeared on the both of them. In the middle of a sea of pitch black.

"You should have known failure. It leads to death for a Hunter." Slate appeared in the middle of the pool of light. He appeared to radiate off of the pitch blackness of the area.

"It isn't our fault. That Arch had more help." Slate cackled in the darkness. It echoed in the chamber.

"My sources tell me that Arch defeated you Duran-Ran with a longsword. You of all people, a Bounty Hunter for 20 years. Who has dueled some of the greatest Vibroblade smiths. You were bested by a Kaminoan Detective on Nar Shadda. You even wounded him in the head. " He turned to Dardan. "You should learn how to shoot your weapon. You missed him by mear inches when he was standing still. You however were bested by two beings this time so I will not punish you as heavily as Duran-Ran." Suddenly the door behind them opened. Black Widow appeared out of the door.

Black Widow was no longer wearing her trademark tight leather. She was now wearing long baggy robes with a cloak.

"Ah Black Widow. How was your trip to Ruusan? I learnt it's location when I was a Reborn under Desann, so it must have been usefull."

"Oooh very. The Valley of the jedi was an eventful experience. Especially after being bathed in the force. How do you wish for me to punish Duran-Ran?"

"You do not need to punish Duran-Ran. Leave him to me. Send Dardan to the torture chamber and await futher instructions." She nodded slowly. Black Widow's eye sockets were black which lead to a small tatoo on her face in the shape of a small spider.

"Very well Dardan. Come with me." Dardan sighed and walked with Black Widow out of the room.

Duran-Ran whimpered several times as Slate paced the area. "Now what to do with you Duran-Ran. I might as well just do this the old fasioned way."

Suddenly a red beam of light appeared in the darkness. Duran-Ran believed it to be a lazer from a blaster. But he suddenly knew better as it came for his head. He heaved a sigh of relief as his head was removed from his body.

Slate switched his lightsaber off in an instant. He stowed it away into his robes as a reflex. "Now Duran-Ran. I hope you will think about your failure in the next life." Suddenly the door opened once more. Black Widow appeared again,

"Dardan is in the torture chamber. I believe a few hours with the Krayt dragon will suffice. How will you follow Team Hornet now?"

"This Arch is more powerful then I once thought. He didn't kill Duran-Ran, instead he humiliated him and waited for me to do it."

"Sir there is a tracking bug on all of the ships at the transport office on Nar Shadda. They have commandeered one of them and are on route to Korriban. Should we follow them?"

"Yes my apprentice. I will send you with Screech and Bravil. Make sure you bring Arch to me alive. The head of the Returner Organisation has stressed this." She nodded and walked out of the room. The pool of light was extinguished and Slate walked deeper into his quarters.


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Old 08-05-2008, 09:29 PM   #34
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This is a casual chapter. Just basing this area off of Kotor's depiction

Minus 82 and COUNTING...

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Even flow, thoughts arrive like butterflies
Oh, he don't know, so he chases them away
Someday yet, he'll begin his life again
Life again, life again...


Even Flow - Pearl Jam
Arch was not at all surprised at Korriban on the land. It was dry and felt it had lost it's former magnificance centuries ago. Now it just stood there, waiting for a sandstorm to bury it.

As Arch slowly stepped off the ship a feeling of vertigo ensued. His vision dilated several times until the shaking stopped. He shook his head several times until his vision returned to normal.

"Hey Arch. You alright?" Vries asked walking over to him. Arch nodded rather slowly in response.

Dreshdae was of course abandoned. The entire place was covered in dust that seemed to cover the polish that might have once been there. It appeared as if no one had been there in at least 50 years.

"Alright Dreshdae. Now the Valley of the Dark Lords is close to here. Lets see if any of it still stands." Though Arch could feel the heat of the planet, he quickly closed his trench coat. He couldn't place what he was feeling. It was as if a dead evil was there, ready to be unearthed.

"So what are we going to do? Hang out in a tomb for a month?" Arch asked sarcastically to Dar-Resh. Dar-Resh gave him a pouting look with his eyes and mask. Though Kel Dor's were not very good at making facial expressions.

"No. From my experience we can lay low here. We can transmit one of our tapes to another planet, that way we can make sure the Hunters cannot trace us using the tapes." Dar-Resh's plan seemed logical enough

"But what if they find us anyway? Our ship cannot take us anywhere else."

"Well I do not know. Maybe there is something remotely flyable here on this planet we can use." Arch shrugged as he bumped into Yossk accidentally. Surprisingly he paid no mind to him.

"So Yossk. Why are you on Urban Death?" Arch asked him. He still wanted to know why everyone was there before they died.

"Its a little complicated. Mostly I was apart of a gang on Dac. Do you know what an Omerta is?" Arch shook his head.

They were out of Dreshdae now. The former sith academy could be seen. Like Dreshdae it to appeared to have a former magnificance, then cut down early in it's prime.

"So what is an Omerta?" Arch asked as they walked.

"It is a little hard to explain. Basically it was a set of rules for my gang on Dac. The Omerta was that you werent allowed to squeal about the gang's actions on the planet. It was punishable by death. I of course broke it."

"What did you do?" Arch asked curiously. He had never heard of such rules.

"Well I was a little scared of death. We took out this large starship that had thousands of credits worth of booty on board. I barely managed to survive that mission at all. Our next mission was much more difficult. We had to rob a starship that had CBLE opperatives on it."

"Ah. Well I can detect that you werent on that mission." Arch suspected that if he was. Arch would probably have been bullied into interrogating him by one of his superiors.

"No I wasn't. I went to an office on Dac and turned myself in. I told them everything I did and requested to be on Urban Death. Knowing that this way I would have 9 other people on my back. I broke the Omerta and now I know, if I go anywhere near Dac I will be assasinated." Yossk finally finished sighing. Meleena came up from behind them.

"I was an assasin for the very same gang on Dac. I didn't understand why Yossk decided to turn himself in at all. But at least I wasn't ordered to kill him. I was busted right before I could assasinate this really hard target on Dac. I watched a lot of Urban Death so I decided to try this out." Meleena soon walked closer to Yossk.

They were now inside the academy. The entire area was pitch black, with the sound of animals roaming around was loud and obvious. Luckily Dar-Resh took what looked like a flare stick out of his clothing. "Alright most ancient academies like these have small backup generator switch. Just in case a traitorous sith would try and cut the electricity to gain an advantage." Within seconds the lights came on.

It wasn't surprisng to see the cobwebs that coated all of the walls. Several of the chambers were sealed in thousand year old cobwebs that had wouldn't be looked upon by humanoid eyes.

"Keep on your guard. The valley of the Dark Lords should be close by. We could probably find something flyable near there. The battle of Korriban happened there, so I suspect at least one Remnant fighter remains." Arch was slightly surprised at Dar-Resh's knowledge. Especially wether any of that knowledge was correct.

Arch's pistol was still in his holster, which was inside his jacket. Arch quickly took his E11 out and cocked it. He smirked as he heard a quiet roar coming from a chamber nearby


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Old 08-06-2008, 04:02 AM   #35
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Great Fic!! You've captured the whole crowd here!! I hope we will see it winning the first prize!!! Continue the amazing work you've done, RakataDark!!!

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Indeed. It is just getting more and more suspenseful. I had a feeling that Slate was a Dark Jedi....

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Ive begun helping people with the storylines of their mods. Anyway with this chapter in particular is heavy in foreshadowig.

I had a little swear in here that I sensored. Just incase admins wish to take action.

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Minus 81 and COUNTING...

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Every single day
Every word you say
Every game you play
Every night you stay
I'll be watching you


Every breath you take - The Police
The owner of the roar was just a simple Tu'kata. It soon met it's end looking at Arch's E11. The kill was quick and easy as Arch expected.

"Is this it Dar-Resh? I expected something... bigger. Like a Terentatek." A Terentatek was a beast of apparent burdan. One that fed upon Jedi and would be a burdon upon the galaxy. It was said that a true test of courage and valor was to kill a Terentatek in lone combat. Arch had heard that Terentatek mainly lived on Korriban but dwelt on other worlds.

"This is only the academy. We must press onto the Valley of the Dark Lords." Dar-Resh continued leading them onwards. Towards another door at the other end of the academy.

The all to farmiliar dry air was present here. They were in a small canyon area. Arch could already sense that something bigger and worse was onwards. A cold wind swept through Arch as he shivvered. Even though everyone else began complaining about the head. Arch didn't understand why he alone felt cold on a desert planet.

Dar-Resh lead them past an empty cave towards the Valley of the Dark Lords. Arch could mearly stare in awe at the giant stih statues that it had. All built by slaves thousands of years before. Now stood silent crumbling in the dust of their former magnificance. Arch could feel another presance at work there. Something worse then he felt before. It was as if a cloaked blanket was enveloping the planet.

"Well here we are. The Valley of the Dark Lords. You would be surprised the kind of people who have stood here today." Dar-Resh said triumphantly. Almost everyone else however paid no attention to his enthusiasm.

"Alright then. We should be able to find more shade inside a tomb." Dar-Resh's eyes scanned the area until he spotted one tomb that wasn't entirely collapsed.

"I believe Marka Ragnos's tomb is still standing. We can discuss what to do next there."

The long trek to the tomb was eventful. But eventually they made it to the pyramid-like statue which entered the tomb. While walking into the tomb Arch caught the glimpse of what looked like a ship in the distance. But dismissed it as the heat playing tricks on his eyes. Even though he couldn't feel any heat on him.

As they slowly made their way into the tomb Arch felt a strange feeling. It was as if something was out of place. Something was being disturbed. He quickly jogged over to Dar-Resh.

"Stop. Something is wrong. Stay here." He put his arm out in a stopping motion. Mostly everyone there was just happy they were in the shade and away from the dark dry air.

Arch had his E11 in his hands now. He slowly walked down the darkened hallway until he saw the main chamber of the tomb. Arch didn't know who Marka Ragnos was. But by the way Dar-Resh was in awe of the tomb Arch suspected he must have been one bad*** mother******

The tomb included a large room with a statue of the Sith at the end. Collumns were put in an orderly fasion that lined up with the entrance. Arch had finally understood where the source of the noise was coming from. Far near the statue were 3 men. Their clothing suggested they were mercenaries. What amazed Arch was that rather then blasters they held Stun Batons. The reason being was an animal in the middle of the small circle they were in. The animal Arch could barely distinguish.

"Come on now Trudan. Your Stunning skills are the worst I have ever seen" It came from a green Twi'lek who was the largest of the group by far.

"Maybe I can help." Arch called from the other end of the tomb. The mercenaries turned in disbelief at the Kaminoan holding a blaster at them.

"Mind explaining why your torturing an animal with stun batons in the middle of a Sith tomb?" Arch shook his E11 around at both of them in a relaxed manor

A human on the left answered"Hey man chill. My mate here bought this "bioengineered" beast here off this cloner. But he bought the wrong animal that I wanted. So right now we are punishing it for trying to attack us" Arch found this story to be both unbelieveable and laughable.

"Why are you hiding out in a tomb?"

"Oh this CBLE opperative is trying to find us so we thought of hiding out on this planet. Who are you anyway?" The Twi'lek soon blinked several times until he finally gasped.

"Yo Gino. I think I know who that is. That's that..." The Twi'lek made several snaps with his fingers before Arch cocked his E11.

"Thats Arch... On Urban Death. We all get 1000 credits." Arch put his eye through the E11 scope and fired at the Twi'lek. Catching him directly in the brain tenticle. He groaned in pain as he stumbled and fell.

"Lets go." Arch snarled as he fired at the human on the left. He attempted to charge for him with his stun baton. Arch's shots made contact with both his abdomen and his torso. He buckled and tripped on the ground. Arch pointed his E11 at the remaining human who slowly cowered in fear.

"Do you really think you could go up against me? Have a nice time in hell." Arch quickly aimed at the cowering human and fired at his head. He slowly toppled to the ground.

The animal was a curious sight. It was muzzled and bound to a long tether. Arch saw that contrary to the human's story it wasn't harmful at all. Rather it was scared and shivering. It's torso was covered with baton wounds.

The animal itself was roughly waist high for Arch. It bore the appearance of a bipedal kangaroo mixed with a stag. Arch reached his hand for the creature and just as it pulled away he began to feel it's burn wounds. The animal slowly stared at him for a few seconds before finally purring from the attention. Arch knelt down and slowly looked into the creatures eyes. A strange feeling enveloped him. One of pride and sedation

"These mercs probably didn't name you then. I guess I should name you... Reaver..." The name sounded strangely farmiliar to him.

Arch looked up to see the face of Dar-Resh stepping over the human's body. "Oh i see this tomb wasn't uninhabited..."


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Another great addition RakataDark. I do have one question though, how does Dar-Resh know all of this stuff about Korriban and what tombs are whos? It seems like he knows a lot about them. Smart fellow, I guess. I think that it might be nice to know why he knows all of this information.

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Rev7: Dar-Resh is a conveniantly placed plot twist that helps me open up to a much larger plot twist. It's really complicated and will make more sense in the next few chapters.

This chapter is mostly a spur of the moment thing. It is building up to a major action storyarc that is going to last for a few chapters.

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Minus 80 and COUNTING...

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Born a natural loser, can't recall just where
Raised on pool and poker and a dollar here and there
Blackjack hand, dealer man, you'd better pay off that last debt
Two-bit hand, a 21 is all I ever get


Go Down Gambling - Blood, Sweat & Tears
The entire group lounged around Ragnos's tomb. The only real conversations existed between Meleena, Dar-Resh and Drustale Arms. Who began discussing other planets to travel to. The ship in the distance was apparently in good enough condition for all of them. As well it could transmit a tape to the Returner Headquarters. They did only have a few hours left before they defaulted on their credits.

Arch stayed silent away from the 3's planning. Arch mostly stayed next to Reaver, who seemed to be quite dependant on him. Reaver would silently growl at Vries's constant approaches to talk to Arch. Arch found this to be a tad annoying, though useful if he was in a mood.

The next planet was discussed and finally voted on. Dar-Resh requested Correlia as their next place. Even though it was a large urban area, the place had enough slums to hide in.

Arch didn't really mind where they would go. As long as it wasn't Coruscant. Fighting hunters and mercs was one thing. But Arch didn't want to think of firing at fellow CBLE opperatives.

"Hush Arch... It was just a bad dream... the Charon do not really exist. It was all just your imagination..."


Arch was shaken away by Vries finally. It appeared a few hours had passed and Arch fell asleep sitting propped on Ragnos's statue.

"Yo Arch. Lets go, comeon." Arch nodded and walked out of the tomb. Reaver followed from behind.

"So Vries. When are you going to tell me really why your on Urban Death?" Arch asked Vries as they walked out of the tomb.

"Maybe later. It's just to emotional right now." Arch could already sense the emotions that Vries was facing just speaking. Arch nodded and lead Reaver out of the tomb.

As they walked towards the star cruiser a foreign sound could be heard. It was distant... but far to farmiliar for any of them. Arch felt weak just hearing the sound grow louder as it came closer. It was a star cruiser, one Arch knew from sight. It was the "Unknown Stranger" Slate's flagship. It was seen during the introduction for Urban Death.

"Slate has found us on Korriban?" Arch whispered underneath his breath. The Unknown Stranger quickly landed opposite the ship. As the drawbridge lowered 4 mercenaries were seen walking out of it. Fully armed to the teeth with blasters.

Arch simply stood there in awe of the large ship. Vries tugged Arch's sleeve, edging him towards the ship.

"No Vries. That ship is going to shoot us out of the sky." Arch unzipped his trench coat and handed his pistol to Vries. He called over to Duan quickly.

"Duan I need a longsword and two semi automatic light blaster pistols." Duan quickly ammased his weapons. The two blaster pistols she retrieved from the Mercenarie's ship. Arch took his holster off for room and then strapped his longsword to his back.

"Arch what are you doing?" Meleena asked walking over to him.

"Isn't it obvious? The ship is already far away from them. The reason they are landing there is to get footage of us lifting off and them blowing us all out of the sky easily." Arch answered quickly as he loaded the pistols.

"Yeah but Arch. What are you doing?" Meleena asked again.

"I am going in there." He said pointing towards the "Unknown Stranger."

"Oh Arch come on now. That thing probably has a ton of hired mercenaries and probably all ten hunters. Even if you manage to get onboard what are you going to do? It's probably a hundred to one." Arch shrugged and placed the pistols into his coat pockets.

"I don't care. It's the only alternative. I am going in there alone." Meleena laughed hysterically.

"Your going to take more then 10 Hunters on your own? Well if you want to commit suicide I wont stop you. But at least listen to reason." Arch shook his head and knelt down to Reaver.

"Stay here." He said to the animal. He still couldn't recognise what species it was. Dar-Resh walked over to Arch.

"Alright Arch. If you really believe you can do this then go for it. Just trust in yourself." Arch shrugged and nodded at Dar-Resh. Dar-Resh's confidence in him was strange. Even Arch believed it was a suicide mission. Though really he didn't care. He just wanted to exterminate some criminals. All for his own reasons.

Arch nodded at all of the others. Then started his trek towards the Unknown Stranger. His trench coat was open now, flapping in the breeze.

There were 4 mercenaries outside the Unknown Stranger. All 4 took positions around the drawbridge once Arch got close to the ship. Arch smiled at with his blasters out.


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Rev7: Dar-Resh is a conveniantly placed plot twist that helps me open up to a much larger plot twist. It's really complicated and will make more sense in the next few chapters.
Very well then, I will keep my eyes opened. Very suspenseful. I love it and hate it at the same time.

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