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Old 08-08-2008, 05:00 PM   #41
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Whew new act. This time I am cutting all the crap and focusing on action and revelations in the next few chapters

ACT 3: The edge of a lightsaber

Minus 79 and COUNTING...


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I'm a mean go getter
I don't know why
I don't know why, anymore
Oh no


Come on feel the noise - Quiet Riot
After Arch finished dispatching the four mercenaries he quickly checked them. They were all Trandoshans, which was both scary and odd. Most Trandoshan mercenaries were more expensive then humans.

"They really went all out... more fun for me then." Arch slowly walked up the drawbridge of the ship and looked around. The ship itself was larger then Arch expected. Though the area around the drawbridge was packed with crates. Instantly, Arch heard a scraping behind him.

Arch spun around and fired at a Trandoshan behind him. Even the Trandoshan looked surprised. Arch looked at the pistols in his hand and shook his head. He didn't understand how he could just hear the Trandoshan and spin then fire so accurately. He decided to ignore it and press on.

As he walked through the ship he noticed a small floor plan next to a turbolift.

"Alright. Bridge is 3 floors up." Arch gulped a little. He ran his finger down the small hallways, along with rooms that read "Mercenary quarters". The ship had 3 floors with an adjoning hallway that ran by all the rooms. Arch quickly checked his pistols and headed up a floor.

Arch could already hear murmuring and talking surrounding him. The element of surprise didn't mean a single thing in a straight hallway. Arch pressed his trigger fingers and fired a single shot.

"Come on you bastards. Come out here so I can rip your beating hearts out." Arch snarled, waiting.

Suddenly 5 Trandoshans came out of one room. "It's that Kaminoan." One shouted in heavily translated basic. Arch fired one shot at his throat. His mouth gave a gurgling sound before he fell to the ground. The Trandoshans now fired at him.

Arch barely managed to dodge 4 shots that came at him. Most of them were terrible aim, though one impacted off of his coat. Barely missing his torso. Arch smirked as he fired upon them. Though three fell to the ground easily one ran into the Mercanary quarter that they came out of. Arch ran in after him.

The lone Trandoshan ran underneath a nearby crate. Arch fired several shots at the crate. Though none of them did.

"Hey holonet newsflash Kaminoan. Your surrounded. Have a nice death." The Trandoshan called from behind the crate. Arch could already hear a clicking sound from behind it. The sound of weapons loading. Arch waited until the Trandoshan would get up to fire. Arch could hear what little heartbeat he had in his ears. It sounded monotone and relentless.

Finally the Trandoshan fired at him. Arch managed to get 3 shots into his torso downing him instantly. Though he couldn't notice one red lazer impacting on his torso. Arch staggered slightly, looking at the burn wound in his abdomen.

"Ah... damn." Arch leaned on the wall next to him slightly. The pain was greater then he previously imagined. He had never been shot in the torso before. The only time he had ever been shot was in the leg 4 months before at CBLE headquarters. The only thing that came to him at that point was a medpack. Arch slowly limped over to the Trandoshan's corpse.

"Alright you dumb lizard. Lets see if you have anything useful." Arch slowly searched the Trandoshan. Then he heard scuffling behind him. As if sensing someone's presance there he spun and fired. Hitting a human directly between the eyes.

"How do I do that?" Arch whispered to himself. More scuffling could be heard coming closer. Arch continued to search the Trandoshan until he finally found a medpack

"Ho ho ho." He quickly administered the medpack. Though the pain decreased to a tollerable level. Arch could still feel the burn of the blaster wound in his torso.

Arch crouched behind the crate that the Trandoshan was behind. Waiting to see the whites of their eyes


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Old 08-08-2008, 05:09 PM   #42
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Wow, Arch really is a relentless, cold blooded killer. Nice chapter. Arch really is quite the gunslinger, and has some extrodinary accuracy. Amazing. I like how straightforward you are, that meaning how Arch just barged into the ship.

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Old 08-09-2008, 08:15 PM   #43
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I apologise for the length of this chapter. It was slightly rushed compared to the previous one

Minus 78 and COUNTING...
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I heat up, I cant cool down
You got me spinnin
round and round
round and round and round it goes
Where it stops nobody knows


Abracadabra - Steve Miller Band
"Strangely enough I remember even now what happened onboard the Unknown Stranger. It was the day that I met Reaver. That little animal I found out later was connected to my past. I thought I understood my past. But that day... I was corrected. There where deep seeded holes miles wide."

Arch waited, crouching behind the crate. Until the scuffling grew louder and a Gammorean burst through of the door. Arch recognised this Gammorean from the episode of Urban Death back at the apartment. It was Bravil, the one who would go in and fight. He was wielding a heavy battle axe above his head.

Arch only had seconds to dive out of the way of his battle axe as he swung it directly at the crate. The crate was completely obliterated into thousands upon thousands of small pieces.

"Damn." Arch said. Bravil turned with his axe and charged at Arch. Arch quickly got up and dodged him again. Noticing his inability to make turns when he charged.

"That gives me an idea." Arch studied Gammorean at the CBLE academy. Though he could barely understand it, he knew what Bravil was grunting out. Bravil seemed to be grunting out "Salvation" as he charged.

"Come on Gamorean. I am about to set your civilisation back 1 thousand years" Arch quickly took his longsword into his hands and waited for Bravil to charge at him again. This time he rotated his battle axe around several times. Arch crouched and then dived out of the way. Then quick as lightning he jumped onto Bravil's back.

The Gamorean squealed several times as he rotated himself around. Arch started to get woozy as the room spun in several directions. Then Bravil slammed Arch into a nearby wall

"I'm sending you to see Aviator. Have a nice time with him in hell." Arch quickly took his longsword to Bravil's head. He quickly sliced his throat. As the Gamorean screamed in pain Arch sliced into his back.

"HAVE SOME OF THAT!" Arch continued slashing at his back. Even when he was down on the ground. Soon his death rattle could be sounded.

"You liked that didn't you?" Arch slowly cleaned the blade on Bravil's clothing and holstered it back on his back.

"And then there were 9". He whispered as he walked back into the hallway.

Most of the mercenaries had run out of the ship as soon as Bravil came. Arch smirked as he walked over to the stairs. "Lets see if its going to be that easy on the next floor." He said checking his guns. He slowly gunslinged them into his pockets.


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Old 08-11-2008, 02:47 AM   #44
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This chapter I wanted to split into 2 parts. But then I figured everyone would already get what I was going to do in then.

This is a very major revelation chapter that I hope you shall enjoy. Any questions you may have I shall most likely reveal to you in the next chapter

Minus 77 and COUNTING...

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Colour me your colour, baby
Colour me your car
Colour me your colour, darling
I know who you are


Call me - Blondie
Arch walked up the small staircase. Noticing that now his arm was slowly stifening up. Strangely when he moved it, the arm would slowly return back to normal. Arch found himself constantly moving his arm until he got to the top of the staircase.

This hallway was different. It spiraled several times before leading to a hyperlift. Presumably towards the bridge. A small thought crossed Arch's mind. He could either dash to the hyperlift and get to the bridge easily. But then face every single mercenary on him at one time when he chose to leave after sabatoging the ship.

Finally Arch sighed and took his pistols out. He silently walked over to the nearest room.

"Knock knock." He said while he opened it. Arch's eyes peered around the figures sitting at a small table in the middle of the room. 3 of them were Rodians while 2 of them were humans. Though the diversity didn't surprise Arch at all. He had seen stranger things to be sure.

Arch fired at 2 of the Rodians. 1 fell directly onto his Sabacc cards, while the other fell directly out of his seat. Arch quickly ducked out from the door. He quickly reloaded as a human burst out of the room. He fired 1 shot at Arch, hitting him above the shoulder. Arch fired 2 shots. One at the foot and one at the head. Arch groaned in pain as the burn wound was easily noticeable. Arch shrugged to bury the pain away

Then suddenly it did. It was as if Arch could easily just clear his mind and the pain would dull. Strangely enough he didn't understand why he could do it. Though stranger things had happened.

Arch faced the final Rodian. Who it appeared was cowering in fear of Arch's blasters.

"Don't kill me. I just work with these guys." The Rodian spouted in his language. Arch still understood him.

"Lets hope so." Arch rammed the blunt edge of the side of his blaster pistol at the Rodian's head. He fell to the ground unconcious. He wasn't angry enough to kill a Rodian in cold blood.

Arch turned around to see a gun in his face. An almost robotic voice sounded from the wielder.

"Don't move." Arch recognised the hunter. It was Screech. The one who appeared to wear StormTrooper armor

The next few moments to Arch were a haze to him. He could recall being disarmed and shoved along up the stairs to the bridge. Screech was holding his right arm. The arm that had the blaster wound on it.

"My mistress has been wondering why you took so long on Bravil. He was the weakest of us. Only used to distract Hornets." The one on the left was a Trandoshan. He had a strange almost misshapen head.

The bridge itself was very large compared to the rest of the ship. It sloped downwards, with a large console viewable at the end. As Arch was dragged he could only marvel at the archetecture, and how the bright Korriban sunlight bounced off of it.

The figure in the middle of the bridge wore a dark cloak. Her red hair could easily be the most colorful part of her appearance. Indeed strangely enough Arch could feel some emotion towards her. It was as if something about her was manipulating the way he thought. All attempts to shrug it off mearly brought pain coming from his shoulder.

Arch was finally dragged to her. The Zeltron turned around, revealing Black Widow. The leader of the Hunters when Slate wasn't there.

"Ah Arch. So nice of you to join us." The bounty hunters finally got up and walked to other ends of the bridge. Screech walked over to the door. His massive blaster carbine could easily be seen.

"So Arch. What do you think of the ship? You know a lot of those bounty hunters you killed costed the Returner Organisation a pretty penny." Arch scoffed.

"You can afford it."

"Yes indeed we can. Slate appologises that he cannot be here in person. He instructed his apprentice to finish you. However I don't believe that the Head really needs you alive Arch. You do not seem very special. Other then that whole thing with Dar-Resh. But you must already know about that." Black Widow spoke with a very seductive tone. Her tattoos were easily viewable around her yellow eyes. Arch now felt a strange feeling when looking at her. Dark feelings.

"So what are you? Some sort of dark jedi?" Arch questioned her. She threw her head back and laughed. Each laugh brought stinging sensastions from Arch's memory.

"You could say that." Her lightsaber could easily be seen. Her hand grasped the black, bone-like hilt.

"This hilt here I constructed rather easily. But you know all about constructing lightsaber hilts don't you?" The word hilt brought painful stinging sensations to Arch. Strangely enough he was confused.

~~Meanwhile~~

Meleena was rather bored waiting for Arch to return. Though Meleena wished to leave as soon as possible. She already knew that he was dead. The only person who apparently didn't believe so was Duan. Who kept speaking to Vries about it.

"Look I still think that he is alive. We should stay here and wait."

"Wait? He is dead already. Look we can probably buy some time and jump to hyperspace before they can even think." Drustale, Yossk, Meleena, Drossk and Guan Kleg now joined in the conversation. Guan Kleg however still kept silent.

"Well Corellia still seems like a good place to be. What do you think Drossk?" Drustale Arms asked Drossk. He shrugged.

"I don't mind. But I still think we should wait for the Kaminoan. At least for a little while." Most of them nodded while Vries shrugged.

Suddenly Vries looked around at all of them and sighed. "Alright. Wait a moment." Vries suddenly counted all of them. "Where is Dar-Resh?"

~~Meanwhile~~

"Look Zeltron. I don't know what your talking about. I have been a member of CBLE for the past 4 years and before that I lived on Coruscant as hand for a shopkeep. I remember everything about it. I have no idea what your talking about." Black Widow now walked closer to Arch. She rested her hand on his shoulder.

"Do you really believe that Arch? You should know that simple memories can easily be erased and rewritten. Look at CBLE. They erase memories all the time. Then just implant identities into people. Some people don't know who they are, or what they do." Then her other hand moved towards Arch's face. "But some abilities resurface over time..."

Suddenly Black Widow's expression changed. She turned around facing the large console.

"Ah. Well then Arch. Your friends are resilliant. So before I kill you I might as well elaborate." Black Widow walked over to the console and punched several combinations on it. Instantly Slate's face came on the viewscreen

"Log entry 24-23. My apprentice, please do not show this clip unless on camera. Screech still has his implants in his eyes. So Arch, as my apprentice has now slightly revealed to you. Some of your memories are not real. Let me elaborate on what she has just said." Then a Rodian brought over a crate towards Arch.

"Now I only learned this a few hours ago from the Head of the Returner Headquarters himself. But he charged me with this crate." Slate showed the same crate that was infront of Arch on the viewscreen. Inside are a few possessions you previously owned." Arch slowly opened the crate.

Arch looked at the objects inside the crate. Instantly strange visions came to Arch. Strange piercing visions that were painful to the touch. Ones of darkside and lightside. Ones of Dar-Resh and finally, ones of the force. Finally Arch understood what Black Widow said earlier. As he lifted up a pair of robes. The Robes were easy enough to recognise. Arch remembered wearing them.

Black Widow finally walked over to Arch. As he held the black jedi robes in his hands.

"Yes Arch. You must finally understand now. The Heads understood easily what you are by extracting the information from one of your fellow jedi friends." Her lightsaber was ignited. A dark red blade could be seen.

"Now I am going to kill you. Any more witty comments to spout?" She taunted him. Arch stared at her and shook his head.

"No. But don't get surprised after I kill you." The Zeltron threw her head back and laughed. Even Arch found it funny.

"Kill me? Quite the contrary." No one looked at the bridge windows while she laughed. Except for Arch. Noticing the all to farmiliar Dar-Resh now on the roof of the ship.


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Old 08-11-2008, 03:20 AM   #45
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Great chapters, RakataDark!! You've made quite a story there!!

I like that Arch was once a Jedi or Force User!! Keep writing, pal!!

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Old 08-11-2008, 07:23 PM   #46
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Oh the suspense. Good work.

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Old 08-11-2008, 09:07 PM   #47
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Minus 76 and COUNTING...

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Think nothing of the kind.
There is no true escape
I'm watching all the time.
I'm made of metal
My circuits gleam.
I am perpetual
I keep the country clean.


Electric Eye - Judas Priest
Black Widow continued laughing until Dar-Resh broke through the bridge windows. Entirely preoccupied and not noticing him.

Black Widow spun around to see Dar-Resh standing there. He came through a hole in the hard bridge windows.

"Ah Dar-Resh. So conveniant for you to come. I am just dealing with your apprentice here." Black Widow was still in a laughing mood. She completely underestimated the Kel Dor

"Apprentice?" Arch said backing up a little. Suddenly it all made sense.

"Well Black Widow. It is conventiant for you to be here. I will show you the difference between the light and the dark" Black Widow conveniantly backed up from the middle of the bridge.

"Enough of this. Screech, take care of this Jedi." Screech the ever so loyal hunter ran to the middle of the bridge. His blaster carbine aimed at Dar-Resh.

I didn't think that Dar-Resh would blank out this quickly. Arch thought to himself.

As soon as Screech fired his shot a silver lightsaber blade came out to block it. Dar-Resh had a lightsaber, it explained why he didn't buy a weapon on Nar Shadaa.

Dar-Resh easily blocked Screech's shots. They rickocheed and hit several mercenaries. Killing them instantly. Dar-Resh charged for Screech. Soon his right hand fell from his body. Along with his left and right leg. Screech screamed in pain as Dar-Resh slowly killed him.

"Well I didn't believe Screech would be that headstrong. Oh well, bounty hunters. The jedi is worth 3x as much as the Kaminoan." Dar-Resh levitated a nearby mercenary's blaster out of his hands and threw it at Arch.

Dar-Resh backflipped to avoid half a dozen lazers fired at him. Arch aimed at the nearest mercenary and shot him directly in the head. The blast was so large that it went through his head and made a clean cauterised hole where his mouth was.

Dar-Resh threw his lightsaber and killed another Mercenary. While Arch elegantly fired at the rest of them. Soon Black-Widow was the only one.

"Give it up Black Widow. There are two against one." Black Widow's lightsaber ignited. She charged for Dar-Resh, meeting the silver and the red in a forray of colored sparks.

The parries and blocks went on for a while. Black Widow would powerfully slash at Dar-Resh with her blade while the Kel-Dor would just either duck or parry it easily. Soon Black Widow found her lightsaber thrown to the opposite end of the bridge.

"It is over." Dar-Resh said while pointing the lightsaber blade to her face. She gulped and walked backwards. Apparently surprised her power was defeated so easily. Arch walked over aiming his blaster at Black Widow.

"Alright how do we kill her?" Arch asked Dar-Resh. He shook his head.

"She is going to stay alive. I believe Slate will be quite angry at her for coming empty handed." Dar-Resh reached for Arch's blaster and cleanly hit her over the side of the head. Black-Widow crumpled to the ground unconciously. Arch was surprised by Dar-Resh's emotion to it. He had no anger or sadness doing it. It was all as if he had done it before.

"What the hell is going on Dar-Resh. All of the sudden I have this Zeltron saying that my memories are implanted and having all of these strange flashbacks. What has just happened." Dar-Resh sighed and walked over to the crate.

"There is no time. Take this crate, we must leave at once." Arch walked over to Screech's remains. He had Arch's longsword still on him.

Arch quickly took his longsword and walked out of the ship with Dar-Resh. Still entirely confused.

~1 hour later~

"So there it happened. We walked over to the ship and finally blasted off into space. Dar-Resh filled me in on my past. With the crate that supposedly held my past belongings. I waited in the ship while Drossk tended to my shoulder wound."

The ship itself was small but big enough for 9 people and 1 animal. Reaver quietly sat near the drawbridge while Arch sat across from Dar-Resh.

"So what do you mean your Jedi Council erased my memories." Arch asked him. Dar-Resh sighed and placed his lightsaber on the table infront of him.

"Arch for the last ten years or so you have attended the Jedi Praxium on Yavin 4. You were sent there after undergoing genetic mutation to age you to ten years old. By then you were the rough equivilant of 15 human years. Apparently for some odd reason on Kamino this major project was shut down and you were apart of it. Some prototype for a new breed of species. One which would mutate over time. They shut it down after they couldn't find a particular species that would co-exist with Kamino DNA. However they found 1 species in particular that they found was submissive with really any DNA they found. So they chose that. But they found that in the other clones they were deemed to bloodthirsty to do anything but kill any living thing that they saw. So they killed these clones off and decided to mix a slight amount off human genome into one last prototype. After 2 years finally it was perfected.. in you." Dar-Resh finally finished his long speach.

"Apparently afterwards the project was deemed a failure by the sponser and all the previous prototypes were killed. Except for you. You were deemed force sensitive by a Jedi visitor and was brought to the jedi Praxium. Where you stayed for the last ten years." Dar-Resh said calmly. Arch found himself gaining random flashes into the past. Strange flashes he couldn't understand.

"What do you mean for the last ten years? I was a member of CBLE for 4 years."

"Well. Around 10 months ago we found out about Urban Death. Most dismissed it as a potential hazard to unfitting for jedi intervention. Until master Horne found out about the leader Slate. Slate's history is unknown to all, except the fact that several years ago he was a Reborn warrior in an army headed by the Dark Jedi Desann. Slate is a sith lord and is believed will become Dark Lord of the sith."

"So what did you do about it?" Arch asked him.

"We did the only thing we could do. We had to stop Slate before he would become to powerful and attempt to take over the Returner organisation and eventually the republic. So we had to select one Jedi who would be able to stop Slate and make him become a contestant on his holonet show. You were selected. Your mind was to be erased and your sensitiveness to the force was to be silenced but not removed. You were implanted with a new identity and assigned as a detective for CBLE. Because of your so called Experience and your ability to complete any objective Slate requested you be apart of CBLE. Unknown that you were a Jedi."

"So why are you here then? How did he find out?" Arch asked. It was a question he wanted answered.

"I was your jedi master on Yavin 4. I was secretly placed into the lineup for Urban Death, so that when Slate personally came for Team Hornet you could have some help and know full and well of your past. However we understood that if I was just hacked into the system Slate would eventually understand who I am. So that is why your memory was wiped and mine wasn't."

Arch winsed as Drossk finished patching up his wound he slowly walked back to the crate.

"So all of my life has been a lie. A product for some Jedi crusade." Arch lifted up the robes. Ones he had now remembered wearing.

"What was I like as a Jedi?" Arch asked Dar-Resh from across the ship.

"Well from training you I found that you were very obediant. You were quite determined to stop your enemies. Like most jedi are. But something was different about you. Though you struggled with the darkside like most jedi do, your emotions were stronger. I found that you killed most targets out of anger then self defence. You also used the dark side of the force regularly. I believe the council decided you among everyone else so you could repent greater."

"When was my mind wiped?" Arch asked him.

"Well.. your identity was implanted... 9 months ago." Dar-Resh said rather hesitantly.

"So... it all makes sense now. I met both Friday and Du'Karn 9 months ago. Du'Karn I guess you thought was a catalyst for this."

"Your fiance is real. Though we have found out darker things about the Returner organisation. We found that Stigma, Alpha and Horizons were all manufactured by the Returner Organisation. It was part of a mass conspiracy. For what reasons I don't know. But at least you know the truth."

"It may be the truth.. but I don't like it." Arch finally answered. His trench coat was on a chair next to him. His pistol was in it's pocket.

Vries was piloting the ship. Soon he made the jump to hyperspace. To Corellia, the place Dar-Resh said he was from.

"Dar-Resh. Something puzzles me. If I was a Jedi where is my lightsaber?" It was plauging him for a while. A jedi always had a lightsaber and there wasn't one in the crate.

"Ah. Well on Corellia I shall fill you in on that. But first Arch you must get some rest. Your force connection must have come back suddenly on that ship. From all the tension and fear you had." Arch slowly nodded and walked over to the cockpit. He slept in the co-pilot's seat. While the rest of them pondered about what to do next.

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There. I have probably answered all of your questions you may have had about this whole plot twist. If I havent feel free to ask


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Oh, no. You answered all of my questions.

Nice twist there. You are a really good writer RakataDark. I love the story. I like how you meshed everything together so well. Awesome job! Keep it up.

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I went today... maybe I will go again...
Tomorrow
And the music there it was hauntingly...
Familiar
And I see you doing...
What I try to do for me
With the words from a poet...
And the voice from a choir
And a melody... nothing else mattered


Edge of Seventeen - Stevie Nicks
The darkness of the ship felt nausiating to Arch. Strange thoughts crept up on him in his mind.

"You know when I found you... you were dying... clear cut case..."

Arch shook his head and looked around. His vision began to blur and focus by itself several times before finally clearing. He looked at his right hand as it flexed and relaxed. Arch sat up straight and buried his face in his hands.

"Alright Corellia" Vries said from the pilot's seat. The large planet was there before him. Arch could only marvel at the beauty and splendor of the giant rock. With the glittering light bouncing off of it strangely mesmerised Arch's vision. It was as if he could sense the beauty of the light as he watched it.

Dar-Resh walked into the cockpit and leaned on Vries's seat. "Well here we are. Vries we should land in the spaceport of Coronet. Once there we should abandon this ship."

"Why do we have to abandon every ship we come across? What's wrong with this one." Arch asked Dar-Resh curiously. He was starting to like the chair he slept in.

"Use your mind Arch. The entire galaxy has most likely seen this ship on camera. You don't think they would recognise us landing in a popular spaceport?" Arch shrugged, causing Dar-Resh to scoff.

The ship slowly flew through space into Corellia's atmosphere. The beautiful scenery almost seemed as if it gave Arch emotion. Arch felt pleased in the preseance of such a world full of life. Strange flashbacks would soon come. Ones of the force and training with a lightsaber.

"Dar-Resh. You still didn't answer my question. If I was a jedi where is my lightsaber."

"Well Arch. You actually placed a safety deposit box on Coronet for yourself. That you were supposed to open when I deemed it that Slate personally would hunt you. I believe you hid your lightsaber inside that safety deposite box. But I am not sure. We should definately head there first however." Arch shrugged and felt a slight amount of turbulence as the ship headed through several alleyways of Coronet. The cloudy skies bore thousands of raindrops and lightning. Vries was having trouble piloting the ship in the rainstorm.

But eventually he managed to make it to the spaceport. Vries easily landed the ship on a nearby landing pad.

"Alright then. The safety deposit area is close to the spaceport." Dar-Resh said. Suddenly he sported a hood. Everyone follow me." Most of them nodded as Dar-Resh lowered the drawbridge. Everyone walked out of the ship except for Arch.

Arch was busy gathering up the belongings in the crate. The only thing worth any interest besides the robes was a datapad. This datapad bore a picture of himself and Dar-Resh. It was dated 1 year before. The picture had a caption underneath it.

"Me and Dar-Resh after celebrating my acceptance into the Jedi Order. I am finally a Jedi Knight." Arch smiled as he took the datapad.

Arch quickly changed out of his musty dirty clothing. His white shirt was already ripped and charred from the blaster wounds that were now healed. His pants were far to large for him along with his boots. Arch quickly tossed the clothing away and changed into the robes. Strangely enough Arch found it odd how the robes felt on his frame. His digitigrade legs fit perfectly in the pants that went over the boots. While the upper torso wear consisted of several very light layers underneath what looked like a vest. The vest was brown and appeared to have pouches where he could contain ammunition. The sleeves were very long and went all the way down to his palms. His sleeves were bright white and felt soothing to the touch. Finally Arch found a pair of brown gloves. His gloves fit perfectly on his fingers as well. The back part of his hands had small black patches. Arch felt very refreshed to be in clean clothing. He was especially delighted at how the robes felt on him now.

Arch took the datapad with the picture and placed it inside his trench coat inner pocket. He placed his pistol inside his other pocket and threw on the coat. While the robes felt nicely on him, it was still raining and they didn't keep very much temperature still in him. Arch walked out of the ship and raised the drawbridge. Arch was also surprised to hear how the splashing sounds when he walked sounded like.

The Kaminoan ran after Dar-Resh and the rest of them. They were now walking out of the starport onto the large streets of Coronet. They could see starcruisers whizzing by them at all times.

Dar-Resh was the only one who noticed Arch's wardrobe change. He nodded in pleasement towards it. Arch shrugged and continued walking with them.

Drossk was far in the back. He was by far the most nervous since they landed. Arch quickly questioned him.

"So Drossk. Why are you fidgiting?" He asked him.

"I don't know... It's far to cold on this planet." Arch snickered at his lie.

"Oh please Trandoshan. I know that is a lie. Now tell me already." Arch responded in a monotone droid-like way.

"Alright then. The last guy I robbed lives in this city. He always swore he would find me... he is the head of this really big company that has CorSec in it's pocket." CorSec was the local law enforcement on Corellia. While it wasn't as big as CBLE, CorSec had less corruption charges and more recruits. Many tourists to Coruscant complained about how much crime there was in Coruscant compared to Coronet.

Finally Dar-Resh stopped outside of a large building with large blocky Aurebesh words. It read "Safety deposit boxes."

"Oh hey Drossk. Did you broadcast that tape?" Drossk nodded slowly.

"Yes Duan and Vries did it all. Though they stated that you were on the ship. I believe that the Returner Organisation will not care due to the amount of footage they have of you on that ship." Drossk responded earnestly.

Vries held a gun to the man behind the safetey deposit box counter. He had a holonet nearby broadcasting Urban Death.

Dar-Resh quickly went by the details and fetched the large safety deposit box. It was in the shape of a large rectangle with a keypad on it.

"Alright then. There is a password lock. Its supposedly a few words that you can have as a password. But you were the one who chose it."

Arch pressed in several random words until a sentance immediately entered his mind. He quickly pressed his gloved hand over the letters. Soon the little screen on the keypad read "and so ends the age of basic and reason". The same sentance Revan said to Carth during his force vision.

The box clicked and opened. Arch peered at the items inside with a curious expression on his face.


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Well then. Now that we have shifted the planet to Corellia I might make an announcement. Right now I am taking requests for created characters to show up in the fic. These characters may or may not be major characters later on. It depends on how I feel Urban Death is going and whether or not they fit.

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When the devil finished, Johnny said: "Well you're pretty good ol' son.
"But if you'll sit down in that chair, right there, and let me show you how its done."


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Reaver slowly walked following Arch. As Arch carried the small items that were in the container strange thoughts perked up inside of his mind.

The container held 3 items. One mini holo, one small box and strangely enough, a thermal detonator.

"Why would I leave myself an explosive?" Arch asked Dar-Resh as he held all of the items. The thermal detonator was very easy to use and very famous for how explosive it was.

"I don't know. For some odd reason you gave yourself an explosive. Maybe you thought about if it would be useful in the future." This time Dar-Resh didn't speak as if he had something to hide. It was all truthful now, which Arch enjoyed. He didn't like being lied to for the past 9 months.

"So why send me a box? I don't get it." Arch said to Dar-Resh holding the large square box in his hand. The box was made out of strong metal and had no openings to pry it open. Arch feared if he tried to blow it open with the Thermal detonator it would destroy the contents.

Dar-Resh lead them to a large apartment building farther away from the spaceport. This building branched off into smaller apartment complexes. Hundreds of beings walked through these buildings every second. Arch was amazed at how easily Dar-Resh navigated the area. Finally he stopped at a building marked "Alpha"

"Alright here is the Alpha building. As per the request of the jedi order there are 10 rooms here bought in a fake name. Now you all receive one of these rooms." Arch nodded and walked into a room on the far right. Reaver followed him.

The room was simple. A bed, communications apparatus and food dispenser. Arch marveled at the large view he had of Corellia.

Arch slowly took off his coat and threw it onto a nearby chair. Then sat onto the bed. He placed the three objects on the bed. Starting with the holographic projector.

Arch turned the projector on. Instantly a miniature hologram of himself appeared.

"Stop. Before you do anything further know this is for your eyes only." Arch was surprised to see him talking to himself. It was slightly confusing.

"Now I know what you must be wondering. "Oh I'm a jedi now, where is my lightsaber, how do I stop Slate if I am so almighty, what is with all these constant flashbacks. Well here is me explaining myself. I recorded this so I could help myself get a re-balance of the force after my memory wipe and regain my jedi abilities. Lets start with this box." The small miniature hologram picked up the exact same box he was now holding.

"Pick it up and examine it. I used to make these all the time when I was a padawan. Quite simply this box is very fragile, but trying to pry it open will destroy the contents inside. However it can only be opened by a force sensitive using the force to see into the box. So thats what your going to do. Close your eyes and sit cross legged." Arch did as he was told. "Now concentrate." Arch felt as if the voice was echoing inside his head. "feel out with the force. Try and escape yourself, yet stay inside... try and feel. Feel the outer metal of the box. Try and penetrate the box." The voice felt slow and deep inside of his head. Yet as he concentrated he could feel the outside of the box. Even though he wasn't touching it. Then all of the sudden a click could be heard.

"Now once the box opens you shall see your lightsaber inside of it." He was right. Arch could now see his lightsaber levitating itself inside the now open box. Arch reached and grabbed the hilt.

"Your lightsaber is an invaluable tool. I know you might be using blasters or long swords as training with CBLE. I never touched a blaster myself. But this lightsaber is completely superior to any other weapon. It feels lighter then air to use, it can block almost any attack and is a mark of a Jedi. Try and use it for a second." Arch held the lightsaber in his hand

The hilt itself was elegant. It was long and thin. It felt like it was built for his right hand. The small receptors around the hilt felt right with his hand. The hilt itself was curved and felt as if he had used it his entire life. He could recognise a small switch where his thumb was.

Instantly a small ignition sound could be heard. A bright blue blade could be seen extending itself from the hilt.

"I chose blue because I myself am a Jedi Guardian. Plus the fact that our skin is blue. Now I would recommend using your lightsaber as little as possible. You don't want to attract unnecessary attention." Arch nodded to his little holographic counterpart.

"Now I would suggest mediating right now. To regain a few of your lost force skills. Now that your cross legged free your mind of any thoughts possible. Soon you will feel one with the force.

Arch did as he was told. Soon he felt like a weight had been lifted off of him. Like he was sleeping, yet conscious.


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Arch only broke from his meditation when he heard a knock on his door. He slowly opened one eye and finally the other. The hologram had shut itself off.

Arch quickly threw his trench coat on. Reaver was sleeping in a corner nearby, Arch decided not to wake the animal. He slowly lurched himself towards the door.

Vries was there. Along with Drossk. "Arch. Me and the Trandoshan are going for a drink. What about you?" Arch shrugged but eventually nodded. His lightsaber was with him and he wanted to see if he could get to use it.

The rain had stopped for now. The nice reflection from the drops that fell gave the city a new luminescent feel. Arch slowly walked behind Drossk with Vries.

"So Vries. How do you think we are going to survive the next few weeks? I mean only a few days have passed." Vries shrugged. It was true, they had only sent a few tapes in. But it was obvious that the hunters were tracing them through both the tapes and something else. They did find them on Nar Shadda after all.

"I think we have to find some way to bypass that whole tracing tape thing. I don't know... we could try sending the tapes to someone and them sending it on another planet. But it seems way to complicated." Vries answered.

"Yeah. I don't know how we are going to survive if we break the record. I mean that guy who survived for 4 days without any of his team mates? I heard he killed anyone he saw until Slate finally murdered him." Arch speculated. All of this information was given to him by his rodian friend Jak Friday back at CBLE.

"Oh well. We have two jedi on our side. Maybe that tips the balance?" Vries said in a joking manor. However Drossk hissed at them as they saw the Cantina.

The cantina was a dark place. It had it's usual music of course. Though without dancers or Bith musicians the Cantina hardly stood out compared to the larger more crowded cantinas in Coronet. However this made it a great place for the three of them. Less sober humans to yell out their names.

Arch watched as Drossk and Vries went over to different parts of the cantina. Arch shrugged and walked over to the Bartending counter.

The bartender was a thin Bith focusing on a large pyramid he was creating made of glasses. He was just about to place the top glass when Arch came by

"You serve Lomin Ale?" Arch asked the Bith as he was concentrating.

"Best on Coronet. Not very many non-humans order it however." The Bith said as he balanced the glass.

"Right... give me your best Lomin Ale then. Don't feed it through an auto mixer please." The Bith quickly ammased a glass from the pyramid. He threw it up in the air with his right hand and caught it with his left. Then he placed several bottles of alocohol were brought up on the counter as the Bith carefully measured each portion and then finally finished. A lomin ale was pushed towards Arch as he dropped a few credits on the counter.

"Ah a paying customer. It's lucky that I didn't douse your drink then. I could have though, since I would need that 1000 credits." The Bith spoke with an almost human accent. Though he could still hear a Bith language behind it. Arch turned around and saw no one else heard him.

"So you know then?" Arch asked him. He nodded and continued to build his pyramid. Arch took a sip from his glass and sat at the counter.

"So why not turn me in? Couldn't you use the credits as you said?" Arch asked him. The Bith shrugged as he concentrated.

"I don't know. I mean your easy to spot as I have never seen a Kaminoan in Coronet wearing a trench coat. But I personally have no facination with credits. I never buy expensive things and only live off the bare necessities. So I don't really need credits." Arch recalled what Killian said before. About sticking to people who didn't need money.

"Well that's good. So why work as a Bartender? Why not as a musician?" Arch asked him sipping some more from the drink. The stinging taste of alchol was ever presant.

"Well my life parter owned this Cantina. I was to have a child with her until she died. So I decided to work here as a bartender as homage to her." Something was odd about the Bith. He didn't sound sad when he said it.

"So I heard you were a detective. Ever kill anybody?" Arch nodded quickly.

"Mostly everyone I have killed had it coming to them."

"Huh. Never thought about that. My name is Lumiere. I make the best ale on Coronet." Arch exchanged a glance with him and said "Arch. But you already know that."

Suddenly Arch heard a loud thrashing sound behind him. He saw Vries punching a large Gammoreanian wielding a large battleaxe. Arch vaguely recalled Bravil for a second. Though this Gammoreanian was much smaller then Bravil and his axe wasn't as large. He was constantly saying "1000 credits"

Arch aimed his blaster and fired at the Gammoreanian. Killing him instantly with a head shot. He blew off the smoke rising from the gun and downed the rest of his drink. He walked over to Vries.

"Maybe i'll see you again then Arch. I hope you did enjoy my drink." Lumiere called after him. Arch nodded and placed his gun into his coat pocket.

"Come on Vries. Lets get out of here." The Rodian nodded. Motioning to Drossk. They quickly ran out of the Cantina.


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Looking good, so far. (Only read the first four), keep up the great work. I love the dialogue.


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Before we say goodbye give us something to believe in
Armageddon, we're not begging
For too much I don't think
Just need a goodbye kiss
Before we sink


Armageddon - Alkaline Trio
Arch was surprised at how inefficiant the Hunters must have been. But he found himself waking up on day six easily and well.

Sure they still mailed the tapes to the courier easily. But Urban Death lately didn't speak about the Hunters tracing leads to Coronet. It mostly talked about the histories of Team Hornet and Team Hunter. Arch found it dreadfully dull. But noticed that they didn't speak about Vries at all.

Strangely enough Arch found that Reaver had a life of his own. Reaver would always walk out of the apartment at the early hour of 7 AM and return at 10 PM. Arch found it curious that this beast that he considered nothing more then a pet, actually did something other then sit around lazily like most beasts he read about before.

Duan would speak to Meleena all the time in her room. Yossk would speak with Drossk and Vries in his room. Dar-Resh would silently meditate in his room. Drustale Arms would be found ontop of the Alpha building holding a rifle. He would talk about security issues he had. The only one Arch found facinating was Guan Kleg.

Guan Kleg never left her room. Though this wasn't the thing that puzzled Arch. The thing that puzzled Arch was that her food dispenser was never touched. Her room was the closest to Arch's and he could easily see into her apartment to see that the Food Dispenser was never turned on. It was as if she didn't eat or rest at all

Arch pondered on such questions as he tinkered around with his lightsaber. His lightsaber itself felt so farmiliar and lightweight to him. After several minutes he found he could levitate his lightsaber just by thinking it and willing it. It was nice and playful to levitate his now switched on lightsaber around a room.

Arch also spent most of the days tinkering with his weapons. Especially his E11 which he found strangely built. He took it's scope off and tinkered with the blaster rifle until he heard a strange clicking noise. It came from Guan-Kleg's appartment.

Arch didn't understand the clicking noise. It was strange and haphazard. It came from Guan Kleg's room.

Arch quickly reassembled his E11 and strapped it to his back. Then placed his lightsaber in his coat pocket and held his pistol. Then he walked out of the apartment. The night air was catching in his throat. It rained all the previous day.

Arch saw that Guan Kleg's room was open. But strangely enough he couldn't sense any force inside the room. Something was strange about it. Arch noticed that the door was open.

He slowly shifted himself inside. His gun already out. Guan Kleg was sitting on the bed. However Arch couldn't sense any force from her.

"Guan Kleg" Arch said keeping his hand on his weapon. Arch was shocked to see Guan Kleg turn around. Aiming a blaster at him. Without warning Arch barely managed to dodge a large blast aimed at his head.

"What the hell?" Arch exclaimed. He dropped his pistol in surprise. Instantly he took his E11 in his hands and aimed at Guan Kleg.

"What is going on here?" Arch said. However Guan Kleg continued to fire at him. Most of the shots were very precise and Arch found he barely had enough time to dodge them. Arch quickly took aim and fired at Guan Kleg. Hitting her directly in the head.

"What has gotten into you?" Arch asked walking over to Guan Kleg. Guan Kleg was tipped over. However what freaked him out the most was not how she was positioned. But what her face looked like.

Guan Kleg's duros skin was melted off. Revealing a robotic head behind it. Arch was both horrified and disgusted. Guan Kleg stood up to Arch's level.

"Who are you? What are you?" Arch asked still keeping his hand on his blaster.

"I didn't expect you to find out until much later. Oh well, I'll take your corpse and shove it down their throats." Arch backed up slightly as the droid masquerading as Guan Kleg reached for it's blaster. Arch quickly thought for an easy way to disable the droid. Then a freak idea came to mind. Arch reached for the thermal detonator that was in the safety deposit box.

Arch threw the thermal detonator at the droid. It missed and landed directly behind it. Arch only had a split second to dive backwards before it detonated.


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Interesting twist. Extremely suspenseful. Nice job Rakata Dark. It is just getting better and better.

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Max Payne - Ending Narration
Arch coughed as he poked his head up from the large rubble the building was in. The thermal detonator had exploded and took the food dispensor in the blast.

Guan Kleg's part of the Alpha building was almost entirely now destroyed, leaving large amounts of rubble in a lot. Arch shook his head and stood up. Noticing a large amount of dust now on him.

He could hear a short circuiting somewhere near him. He slowly dug through the rubble where he heard scuffling behind him.

"Arch. What the hell happened." He heard Vries say behind him. He spun around quickly.

"I had a disagreement with someone." He responded.

"Yeah? But when I have a disagreement with someone I usually just spread a rumor about them or something. I don't blow up Guan Kleg's apartment out of anger. What happened here?" Vries stuttered slowly. Arch continued to dig through the rubble until he found the remains of what attacked him

All that was left was a droid. Guan Kleg's disguise had burned away completely revealing a mechanical exo-skeleton. Arch noticed how small the droid's head was compared to his body. Almost like a human head.

Arch picked up the now deactivated droid and dragged it's remains towards his building. The droid's left leg was completely destroyed along with both of it's arms. Soon everyone was around Arch.

"Guan Kleg is apparently dead. I guess. I found this droid in some sort of disguise as her. He was in her apartment and fired upon me. I hesitated and threw a thermal detonator at the droid which exploded and destroyed the building." He slowly finished. Everyone finally understood and could deal with whoever came for the blast.

Arch dragged the droid into his apartment and closed the door. Then set him up near his food processor.

"Alrighty then." He said slowly. He took his datapad out. The one with the picture of himself and Dar-Resh on it. He slowly plugged it into the droid's head.

"Lets see who you are then." Arch mumbled slowly. He waited for the droid to boot up to half power to see who he was. The datapad flickered slightly, revealing an identity.

"8t88

Tiss'sharian creation, administrative sector"

"So what? You were some sort of protocol droid? Ive never heard of a protocol droid who was trained to kill." Arch whispered laughing. Reaver came over to 8t88 and sniffed the droid slightly. Then picked up his tail and walked over to the side of the room.

Arch spent the next hour or so reprogramming much of the droid's memory core. Apparently he came to try and take a bounty on Arch's head. Finding he could infultrate the place earlier by masquerading as an organic being and murdering them all one by one. However he didn't get a chance to do it properly.

Much of his behavior core and robotic personality was damaged in the blast. Arch quickly programmed his own identity into the droid and reenabled him.

The droid rose up from it's temporal sleep. It looked around and them at Arch. Noticing it's arms were completely gone.

"Ah. My target has taken me hostage. Pray tell what happens here now." The droid spoke with a strange accent. It was very humanised.

"Ah. Well let me put this in ways you will understand 8t88. I now own you. You work for me." Arch said coldly to him.

The droid did a laughing motion and looked at him in a sarcastic manor. "You really don't believe your serious do you? An assasin droid comes and attempts to kill you, then you welcome him into your home? You must have trust issues." Arch got angry.

Arch grabbed the droid by the head. Noticing it was badly reapplied to the body. "Listen to me. I can dismantel you now and replace you with a new behavioral core. Making you into a protocol droid who's vengeance to kill is replaced with complimenting male aliens in a cantina. Or I can simply repair all of your major systems. Like it or not you cannot kill me." Arch snarled at the droid in an angry state.

"Oh and why not?" The droid make a strange head moving animation

"Because I already programmed my identity into your memory and prime functions. Now you can't will yourself to kill me. So stop working against this droid because it is happening wether you like it or not while I reprogram your prime functions." The droid made something of a sigh expression. Arch didn't know that droids could make programmed noises.

"Well it appears that I do not have a choice." 88 said slowly. Then he deactivated himself. Arch smirked slightly and reached for his hydrospanner. Though noticing he would need spare parts. He stood up and walked over to Reaver.

"Keep him here." He said to the beast. As if he understood he looked into his eyes deeply. Arch nodded and walked out of the apartment

Vries had managed to drive off mostly everyone who had come to observe what happened. Arch walked over to a now tired Vries.

"Hey. I am going to go to the nearest spare parts store. Wanna come?" Vries shrugged. But he eventually caved. Arch walked back down the way to the Cantina. Towards a spare parts store.

Now bear in mind it was the dead of night. But most places such as this were open in such case. Arch slowly walked into the large spare parts store. Towards the empty counter.

"Hello? Service." Arch said rather loudly. Suddenly a farmiliar face popped up from the counter. It was the bith bartender from before. Arch was even more surprised then before

"Ah hello again Arch." Lumiere said cheerfully. Arch laughed slightly with Vries towards the Bith.

"Alright. So Lumiere. I am not even going to ask why you work at both the Cantina and a parts store. I just need a few parts I have on this datapad." Arch said holding the datapad he hooked up to 88. He ran over a list of parts that 88 needed by using the datapad.

Pretty soon Lumiere fetched his parts from all over. Then a small pile appeared infront of the counter. Arch ran his hands over the smaller more technical parts before looking at the other different ones.

Arch paid for his parts and said goodbye to Lumiere. Vries looked curiously at the parts Arch bought.

"Arch what are you doing with those anyway?" he asked. Arch shrugged slightly.

"I dunno myself. Maybe I want to see how a thermal detonator can fix a droid." Arch remarked. They all walked back to the Alpha building. Arch set to start fixing 88


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When I was first drafting this fanfic out I had 10 Team Hornet members completely made up of EU characters. However as I continued drafting it out I realised that if I killed them off I would be voiding cannon. 88 is the only character besides Balderek that I wanted to keep.

Minus 70 and COUNTING...
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Im on the hunt Im after you
Smell like I sound, Im lost in a crowd
And Im hungry like the wolf


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By the time the next morning came up Arch was already finished on 88. Several parts he had to replace while some he had to fix himself

Arch had to manually replace most of 8t88's personality by hand. It took most of the night to reprogram his entire behavioral core. Much of 8t88's personality revolved around loathing everything around him. It took very much hardcoding to remove several things Arch disliked about 8t88's personality and finally he finished. No longer dependant on buying other gangsters to do his dirty work 88 now functioned on his own. Arch replaced 88's loathing of humans to a detesment of humans and kept his own identity hardcoded into his core. So he wouldn't get 88 trying to kill him in his sleep.

Finally he booted 8t88 properly. The droid's eyes soon lit up and spun around several times.

"Ah the target has been compassionate enough to repair and reactivate his assasin. A very foolish mistake." Arch scoffed at his overestimation.

"Listen to me you cowardly, humanity hating piece of junk. I don't like you, and you sure as hell don't like me. But I am in need of your services and you need a reason for me to not blow your head off with this blaster I am holding. You have a hobsons choice now. Either you pleasantly work for me, or I replace your brain with a cheap protocol droid's and reprogram it. It's your choice 8t88." 8t88's head swivvled several times, them moved his arms and legs.

"It appears you replaced my arms. Very courtious of you. Thankfully you are not a human or I would... as you organics do. Vomit."

"Sarcasm? I never thought an emotionless scrap of metal was capable of emotion." Arch said in a sarcastic tone.

"and? I never thought a Kaminoan who I clearly background checked would both disable me and foolishly ask his assassin for help."

"So what's your choice 88? Come on my trigger finger is itch." Arch said with his thumb on his hammer.

"Fine then. "Master"" 88 said with a grimacing tone.

"Alright then." Arch motioned to Reaver with a look. Reaver understood instantly. Arch was finding it strange how easily he was able to communicate with the animal. He still considered it a loyal, yet wild beast.

"Now I am going out. 88 you have to stay here." Arch quickly put his coat on and locked the door behind him.

Drustale Arms was out now. Pacing around the Alpha building with a carbine out in his hands.

"Man. I just want to kill something right now." Arms said irritably as Arch walked over to him.

"Hey take it easy Drustale. Your going to draw unnecessary attention to this building if you fire your weapon. Just take it easy for a few seconds. I'm going to grab a drink at the Cantina around here. I know the bartender." Arch said calmly to him. He recalled Lumiere for a second.

"Alright already. You wanna wake Vries or Drossk?" Arms asked him. Arch responded by shaking his head.

"Why bother? They are just going to say no. Lets go already." Drustale Arms gave him a cheerful expression with his goatee'ed face and holstered his carbine on his back. Arch still had his blaster with him.

The walk to the Cantina seemed to take less time then before. But it was probably because Arch was used to walking that way. He was still surprised that Slate didn't send a Hunter after them. He was almost positive that 8t88 was sent by Slate.

"So how are you liking Coronet?" Arms asked him while they were walking.

"I dunno. It's a lot like Coruscant of course. It's quant in that way that I can go into a bar and not get shot. At least here no one recognises you because their to busy with their own problems. There are to many aliens that look alike."

The Cantina was as dark as previously. Arch wasn't surprised to see Lumiere now trying for a different shape with his glasses. Now he was attempting to stack them into a straight line.

"Yo Lumiere. Do you know of anyone underground who can help us survive more then 8 days out here?" Arch asked the Bith. However he shrugged.

"No one comes to mind... no wait. I think I know someone." He said pondering. He placed his glass on the table slowly.

"There is this Chiss by the name of Frotenesque. He dwells in some secret hideout in a warehouse on the outskirts of Coronet. He has one of the biggest underground operations on Corellia." He said closely to Arch.

"Really? Why would he help us?" Arch asked him questioningly.

"Well first off he has always opposed the Returner Organisation. Since Urban Death is completely funded by the Returner organisation turning you in would only bring him misery. If you stay alive then Urban Death would eventually cease to exist and the Returner organisation would recieve bad publicity." Arch shrugged. It was a good enough excuse.

"Alright. How do we find this Frotenesque? Where is his warehouse?" Arch asked curiously.

"That's easy. Ask your assassin droid. He knows." Arch gave him a questioning expression. However deciding he would not get any info from him.

After they recieved and paid for drinks Arch and Drustale Arms walked back to the Alpha building. Arms resumed his patrol around the building while Arch went to 8t88.

"88 do you know of a Chiss named Frotenesque?" Arch asked him as soon as he got in. 88 was sitting on a chair infront of a table.

"I believe so... master." 88 said the last word with a very large hint of regret. "But first master I must direct you to something that I have." 88 said. Arch sat down on the bed.

88 reached into his frame and pulled out a small box Arch didn't recognise when he was repairing him. It seemed to be completely hidden and wasn't damaged by the blast.

"Inside this box is something called the Tramguise. The Tramguise is a very highly advanced prototype. I stole it off of a previous target I aquired from my previous line of work. It apparently has such a high value that I could sell it and never need to do bounty hunting ever again."

"Why didn't you?" Arch asked questioningly.

"Oh please. I could never get over killing human organics. Now back to the device. The Tramguise allows the wearer to scan a piece of DNA. They wait 1 hour for the DNA to synthesis with the wearer's. Then it is contained on a CPU that exists in the device. The wearer is allowed to physically transform into the DNA that the device synthesised with. Unlike flimsy apparations such as the Holoshroud. This device more or less doesn't use a hologram and mearly overrites the DNA of the wearer. The Wearer is then able to morph back at any time to his previous DNA." 8t88 opened his box. Inside the box was a small watch like device. Arch reached for the device and fastened it onto his left arm.

"Handy" Arch said instantly ignoring it. He doubted he would need a disguise any time soon however. As almost everything that came at him he killed.

"Why don't you use it?" Arch asked 88.

"It doesn't work on non-organics unfortunatly since we do not have DNA. However you are free to try it master. The device also replicate's what the bearer of the DNA was wearing as well. More or less like a portrait. So you do not have to worry about buying a new wardrobe." Arch shrugged and got up.

"Alright so are you going to take me to see this Chiss or not?" Arch asked him. 88 got up and lead him out of the apartment. Arch closely followed. As Arch walked out he saw Duan outside.

"Hey Arch where are you going?" Duan asked him curiously. Arch pointed to 88.

"Um this guy is going to lead me to someone who can help us."

"Mind if I tag along?" Duan asked. Arch shrugged slightly. Duan placed on a happy expression and followed Arch.

~~~Meanwhile~~~

Slate now stood ontop of the bridge of the Returner headquarters. The headquarters was now orbiting Rusaan.

Seeker walked over to Slate. Slate was closly overseeing the Valley of the Jedi.

"Master Slate? The Head asks what progress you have gotten on Arch." Slate asked him. Seeker was still scared to death of Slate

"Tell him I have Arch exactly where I want him on Coronet." Slate responded in his usual gruff voice.

"Please forgive me Master Slate. But where is Black Widow?" Seeker asked him kneeling now.

"Black Widow has failed us. She has dishonored our reputation on Korriban by letting Arch escape. I have let her know about her exile from us." Slate continued.

Seeker nodded. "Yes Master. How do you wish for us to hunt for Team Hornet?"

"After talking with the Head please round up Aquatos. He might be interested in something I have to tell him. Then go to Coronet." Seeker nodded and walked out of the bridge.


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to make the skies align
with the serpentine
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Watch the horse parade
for the price of fame, hey


Snakes on a plane (Bring it) - Cobra Starship
88 seemed to know the streets and alleyways of Coronet like he had been walking down them for years. He instantly knew all the shortcuts and all the nooks with crannys that you could walk through

88 soon found his way to a much more urban district. Arch even felt a slight decrease in temperature as he walked.

88's clanking sound could easily be heard by Arch. The clanking sound itself felt annoying, yet at the same time refreshing. This combination of feelings felt deadly for hearing.

Eventually 88 stopped at a large alleyway. The building ahead was small, but seemed to connect with several other larger buildings nearby. Arch was astonded at how big it must have been inside.

"In here. I believe that the Chiss Frotenesque is here." Duan grabbed hold of Arch's right arm.

"Hey Arch. Are you sure this guy can help us?" Duan sounded slightly scared. Arch felt a bought of courage acting up.

"Let's go in and check it out." Arch responded. He opened the door to the warehouse. Even though he had to duck to walk in the ceiling sufficed for height. The entire warehouse was hugely empty. However there were still several dozen people walking around. With several boxes and other such things laying everywhere. Even in corners there appeared to be things going on. Arch lead Duan and 88 to the end of the warehouse.

The end of the warehouse had a large extravegant door with two guards outside. One was a short human and was clean shaven. However the other was a strange avian species Arch didn't recognise. She was apparently female as her stance and shape left nothing to the imagination. Strangely enough her clothing looked as if she had something to hide. Her head was sloped downwards showing a beak.

"Halt. No one visit's Fortenesque unless summoned. Who are you?"

"Arch. I come bearing an assassin droid named 8t88 and one of my companions, a Selkath named Duan." The human walked over to a console by the door while Arch noticed the avian eyeing him.

"Yeah. Some Kaminoan here with a droid named 8t88.... Alright I understand." The door opened. Apparently allowing their entry.

The door lead into a much smaller room. It looked like more or less a large office. It held a desk at the far end of the room with a large chair behind it. There were large windows around in different places. Though this room did remind him of Killian's office on the Returner headquarters. It was far less extravagent.

"Ah so the legend of Urban Death is here in my office." The chiss behind the desk said. He wore a goatee that was dark blue in contrast to his black hair. His cheeks were very high as his jaw was very low.

"You seem to know 8t88. Who are you?" Arch asked the Chiss from across the room.

"All in due time. Long story short I need your help and you need mine. I need some men who can survive a blaster wound and you need help from the hunters who are now orbiting Corellia."

"Orbiting Corellia? They don't mention that on the holonet." Arch said surprised.

"Oh they didn't explain what happened to their team mate Black Widow either. It just appears like she disappeared. But enough about Urban Death." Suddenly he pressed a button on his desk.

"Genie. Get in here... I think it is time to show our Kaminoan friend what my influence can bring him." Suddenly the door behind them opened.

The avian guard from before walked into the room. Curiously again eyeing Arch and then walking over to the desk.

"This is Genie. Before you ask, no that is not her real name. She is a Calibop from Coruscant and developed a code name. She is going with you Arch on this little errand I need you to do." He said while moving his hand towards the avian bird.

"Wait Errand? What are you talking about?" Arch retorted.

"Oh I forgot to make it clear. Here it is. I can help you in such a way that Slate will never be able to find you even if you were standing right next to him. All I need you to do is go alone with Genie to stop a little disagreement I have. Afterwards then I will tell you more." The offer sounded legitimate and reasonable. Arch turned towards both Duan and 88.

"Alright. 88 go back to where Reaver is and lock the door. Duan go find Vries and tell him to come back here. I will be back to speak to him later." Duan seemed rather hesitant but nodded and walked out of the office with 88.

"Alright. So you mind filling me in?" Arch asked the both of them.

"Okay then Arch." Frotenesque said. He pressed a button on his desk. Instantly a hologram appeared in the middle of the office.

"Now I have a very major problem with a rival gang. It is being lead by Goovanonga the Hutt. A newer crime lord in Coronet. Now his gang fortress only has one opening. The front door. So I want you and Genie here to go to the Clam's head Cantina and enter the gang's fortress. Once there kill the Hutt and end this vendetta." He finally finished showing a map of the Clam's head.

Genie walked towards Arch. Apparently marveling something about him. Arch shrugged. Then suddenly he felt something. It was a shiver in the force. It was weak but it felt like something different then before. Like something of pure insanity in the force.

"Alright then." Arch turned to Genie. "So when do we go?"

"Oh I should think as soon as possible. I mean floops are one thing. But being late is another." She said in a strange tone. Arch replayed her sentance in his head and didn't understand if it made sense or not.

"Ookay then. Let's go." Arch said. Genie lead the way out of the office.


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Act 4: The Shadow of courage

Minus 68 and COUNTING...

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You're looking for you
We're looking in at each other
And we don't know what to do


The Seeker - The Who
Genie walked in a certain way. It was oddly familiar yet stimulating to Arch's senses. Strangely enough Genie reminded him of his fiance, Du'karn. Wether he was attracted to the avian Calibop or she was transmitting some sort of pherimone he didn't know. What he did know was that Genie was insane.

While they chatted Genie spoke about pink bits of fluff she saw while on Coronet. She continuously spoke about how it was annoying when she had to clean it out of her feathers. She would also talk constantly about how most of the people she knew only watched Urban Death.

"You should see them. The people that are part of Frotenesque's gang are completely hooked on it. They bet mostly on Seeker and.. you." She said slowly at the end.

"Me? I get bet on?" Arch asked curiously. He didn't check the bets in a while

"Yeah. Everyone on forums there talk about how they expect Seeker is going to kill you. While everyone else talks about how your going to go the whole month, since your the first Hornet to kill more then 2 Hunters." She said with a happy expression.

"Uh yeah. I did have help though."

They continued walking until they made it to the Clam's Head Cantina. The Cantina itself was ajoined to a large circular building that went through the depths of Coronet. There was only one patron outsde the bar. Leaning on railing. The patron was a human sporting long sideburns. He threw a leftover deathstick over the railing.

The Human walked down their way without looking up. He casually bumped into Genie and kept walking. Genie gave Arch a shocked look and ran up to the man.

"Exuse me. But I think that I owe you something." She snarled at the man

Instantly before the man could react Genie pulled out what looked like a blaster. She shot the man point blank in the head.

"Holy ****!" Arch yelled out loud. She blew gently on her blaster and placed it into her pocket.

"Why did you do that?" Arch said to her. Genie shrugged slightly.

"He didn't apologise. I don't care." This was where all of Arch's first impressions of Genie disappeared. Now he knew that she was insane.

They walked into the clam's head. Unlike Lumiere's cantina this one was much, much larger and more populated. There were dozens of patrons everywhere. Sitting at the counter, in chairs, watching the Twi-Lek slave dancers. The music was stingingly unoriginal from the bith musicians. At least here he didn't recognise Lumiere

"I am going to get a drink of blue milk. You look around for something that appears to be an entrance." She said to him. Arch noticed that it sounded like an order rather then a request. He simply nodded and looked around as the Calibop went to the bar.

Arch scanned the area. Most of the bar sloped upwards to what looked like a VIP area. Here he saw several men wearing very formal clothing. However the entire bar sloped upwards except for one area. There was a tiny ramp that lead to a small door. This door was guarded by a Rodian and a Ugnaut.

Arch motioned to Genie towards the door. He walked towards it.

"No guests allowed" The Rodian said in Rodianese.

"If you don't let me in here you die." Arch snarled at the Rodian

"No." The Rodian said. Apparently not threatened.

"Then I guess you die." Arch reached for his lightsaber

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I knew I'd worm my insanity into this, ol' buddy ol' pal of mine. ^^


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I have to say, Rakata, I love this story. Arch's character development is smooth to tell, but jarring to realise. I got kind of a Bourne Identity feeling from Arch as he realized more of his strengths, and his history started to come out.
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And the girl in the corner said
Boy, I wanna warn ya, it'll turn into a ballroom blitz


Ballroom Blitz - Sweet
The lightsaber in Arch's hand instantly ignited. The Rodian could barely saw out a gittering word before he soon saw a blue lightsaber thrust into his torso. The last thing he could see was a lightsaber coming towards his head as Arch cut it in half.

Arch sawed down the Ugnaut before he could reach for his blaster. He motioned towards Genie who then looked at the armed guards posted around the cantina.

Arch dived towards a nearby table and upturned it as several dozen lazers were fired to him. Arch quickly took his blaster pistol out and fired at 2 of the men. One missed while one shot hit the man in the leg.

"Have a nice death!" Arch shouted out angrily

Arch dived from the table into the counter. How he managed to jump that high he didn't know. He looked towards the nearest guard with the lightsaber in his hand. Then an idea came to him. He threw his lightsaber directly at the guard. The lightsaber clawed into his torso and killed him. Arch summoned the force and soon found the lightsaber coming back to him.

"Huh telekenisis." Arch heard scuffling behind him and soon found Genie landed right beside him.

"Having fun?" Genie asked him curiously. Arch shrugged and waited. Then he stood up. He slid out of the bar counter and charged towards another guard. Cutting him in half.

As he charged for the next guard he noticed that Genie already fired upon him. Arch turned around to see that the only people left were the scared patrons.

"Alright. Genie. Lets go already." Arch motioned towards the door and ran through it.

~~~meanwhile~~~

Darth Reliques silently stood inside the security room. Watching the footage of Arch and Genie walking into the secret area of the Cantina.

"Sir. How do we deal with them?" A gran asked as he walked over to REliques

"Leave them to me." He said slowly. A lightsaber was in his hand

~~~meanwhile~~~

The secret area the cantina lead to was a hallway that spiraled down the large circular building. Arch motioned to Genie for them to walk.

"So Genie. Your from Coruscant?" He asked her while walking

"Yes. Though it seems different then I remember. My mother had obsessive compulsive disorder and my father had quite the opposite. You could say I am the inbetween."

"Oh you mean a normal person?" Arch asked her laughing.

"You could say that."

"So what did this hutt guy do exactly?" Arch asked her

"He intercepted a major delivery of death sticks and credits. Once we are done here Frotenesque wants me to blow this building up." She responded holding a detonation pack

"Blow it up? Doesn't that seem a bit... extreme?" He said looking at the det pack

"It might. I am going to attach it to a fusion reactor at the bottom of the building. Once done it should blow and collapse the foundations of the building." Arch shrugged slight as they continued to walk.

"So what does floops mean?" Arch asked curiously. That was still a word he wanted to understand

"Floops is a word I make up. Such as crackerjacks or dongle. Its like me saying your a dongle Arch and there is someone behind you." Arch spun around with his pistol ready. Only to notice no one was there.

"You are a psycho." He responded. Genie simply shrugged as they continued moving.

The spiraling hallway eventually stopped at a large door. This door reminded him of the entrance to the warehouse that held Frotenesque. As he opened it he caught a small room inside.

Goovanonga the hutt sat there on his levitator pad. Arch truly disliked the Hutt species. They were fat slug cowards that would only wait for other beings to do their own dirty work. The whole hermaphrodite species would send shivers down his spine. There was a door that lead to a smaller hallway down bellow.

"Arch you take care of this hutt. I am going to see how easily I can blow this bulding up." Arch shook his head slightly and took out his blaster pistol

"Wait. If you do not kill me, I can help you." The hutt said in Huttease. Huttese was another language Arch could understand but not speak

"Sorry. But this is how it ends." Suddenly Arch felt a familiar fluctuation in the force. He had only a split second to duck before a lightsaber went for his head. It was blood red.

"Who are you?" He asked to the bearer of the lightsaber. He wore a strange form of armored torso and dark blue baggy pants. His head was completely bald.

"Death." He responded. "I hate alien species, now you die." Arch ignited his own lightsaber

"I'll enjoy gutting you." He responded as he parried his attack. A shower of sparks appeared between them.


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Awesome chapter. I love how Genie's insanity is very subtle but very realized. Like, you can tell she's completely out of her tree, but she does it in a very low-profile way that for some strange reason makes the whole thing even insaner.


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I have to say that I was hesitant to try and read what you have created. I'm used to having at least one familiar character to build off, but this story... it's very different from every other one I've seen on this forum.

I haven't read all the story you have so far, but the minus numbers that preceed the chapter titles are a different concept from what I would ever try and attempt. What exactly motivated you to do that for your fic? That seems to define exactly how long the fiction will be before you've really started and know when it's going to end.

That may have been your intent, but how did you decide to do that?

Great fifteen chapters I've gone through. Will keep reading.
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I am surprised how many good reviews I have gotten in recent days for this fic. I am delighted

The Minus ++ and COUNTING... idea is from the Stephen King book THE RUNNING MAN. Which was the prime idea I based this fic off of. I decided to choose 3 main plot twists that would alter the story line in some way and decided that 100 chapters would be more then enough. Then I got several more ideas for chapters along the way that fit into it like lego blocks. Urban Death was a different concept then what I previously tried. I took many ideas that I had from other fanfics I read that were not star wars and especially other movies that were non-sci fi. Then I reformatted their themes and ideas for this fic. Along the way I got several miniature ideas that I thought I could use for chapters.

I again failed to mention. But the 100 chapters is not going to be the absolute end of this fic. This fic is going to have 3 endings and then finally an epilogue at the end. Meaning technically this fic is going to have 104 chapters

Also I noticed that I didn't post a chapter for two days previously. I am going to post another chapter in one day to suffice

Minus 66 and COUNTING...
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Going for the back of beyond
Nothing gonna stop you
there's nothing that strong
So close now you're nearly at the brink
so, push it


Scarface (Push it to the limit) - Paul Engemann
The saber wielder would strangely enough get on the defence every time Arch charged his lightsaber for him. Eventually backing up to the side of the room.

"I am Darth Reliques. I was put into this galaxy by the force for one purpose. To remove every single alien from the face of the universe to preserve the human race. Now you are my first victim to the glory of the darkside"

"Was that supposed to make me angry?" Arch taunted him with his saber at the ready.

"Yes filthy alien. It was."

"Congratulations." He responded. Arch continued to charge for the bald sith lord. Strangely enough every time Reliques would parry his attack he would not attack back. Rather he would back up from his attack and continue to block until Arch left an opening available for him. He realised one thing, Reliques was very bad at using a lightsaber."

"You had better find some other way to kill me. Because your lightsaber skills suck." Arch taunted him laughing as he slashed at him again.

"Oh I have other ways." Suddenly Reliques did a backflip and stuck himself on a nearby wall. Then he outstretched his hand.

Dark lightning went from his palms. Arch felt a burning sensation mixed with hopelessness enter his body. The pain felt far to powerful for him to control.

Death is such a small impediment.

Anger poared from Arch's mind into his arms. He reached his arm out and attempted to pull Reliques from the wall. Instantly he fell from the wall and landed with a soft sound. His lightning had finally stopped.

"You had better regret doing that Reliques. Because I plan to make you live in pain for the rest of your short life." Arch poared anger into his slashes very similar to how he simulated the weight of a vibroblade into his lightsaber. Now he was preforming his slashes much stronger then before. Suddenly Reliques tried the same.

"Enough of this foolishness." He backed up behind the now cowering hutt. A red beam errupted from his right hand now. It enveloped Arch completely. Now he felt his engery from before depleating. As if his entire life force was draining from him.

Arch felt far to weak to function. However a small sliver entered his mind. As he could sense a blue aura appear around him. The energy from before returning as Reliques stopped his beam.

"What? How is this possible."

"Believe it Reliques. Understand now that the alien here is going to teach a lesson to a racist sith. A lesson in humility." Arch charged again fro Reliques. before he could lift his saber Arch cut off his right hand. Reliques screamed out in pain as Arch soon cut off his left one.

"Oh I'm not done with you yet." Arch grabbed Reliques by his armored torso and threw him into the corner.

"What are you going to do alien? Kill me?" Reliques spat through his bloodstained teeth. Arch shook his head and laughed.

"This coward Hutt is going to watch me have some fun with you." Arch said as he turned off his lightsaber. "Now your going to know what true pain really is."

1 hour later

Arch sat in the corner of the room waiting for Genie. Reliques was dead finally. He had several puncture wounds through his torso. A very large pool of blood was around him. His legs were around him as Arch beat him to death with his own legs. Torture had given him a new knickname

Genie finally walked up the pathway towards the room with the hutt. She eyed Reliques's body.

"Oh? What happened here?" She asked him curiously. Arch shrugged.

"I don't know. I taught this guy here a lesson not to underestimate me." Genie eyed the now heavily sweating Hutt.

"Why haven't you killed him yet?" Genie angrily asked him. Arch shrugged, killing the Hutt had slipped his mind.

"Well do it. I am going to the bar to see if anyone else is there." Arch nodded and waited for her to leave. He quickly took out his blaster pistol and aimed it at the Hutt.

"Wait. Wait. I can help you Kaminoan. Just please don't kill me. I'll do anything. I'll leave Corellia. I'll go to the Unknown Regions and live forever there. Just please don't kill me..." The hutt spoke his huttease with a very feverish accent now. He was scared and weak in Arch's preasance. Arch felt his aim falter. There was no glory in this, no feeling of pleasure from it. It was just him, the gun and the crook. His options had devolved into a linear course. True he had now cooled off from torturing Reliques but killing the Hutt may give him some feeling of satisfaction.

"Fine then." Arch finally said sighing as he withdrew his blaster pistol. "But this building is going to blow up anyway. So I doubt your going to make it out of here alive." The hutt gave him a look in his eyes like eternal forgiveness.

"Thank you Kaminoan. I will make sure that you are properly rewarded."

"Just get the hell off this planet even if you survive." Arch said angrily as he walked out of the room. Carefully stepping over Reliques's dripping corpse.

Arch walked back to the Cantina level to notice that the door was now closed. He carefully opened it, however a large object fell ontop of him as soon as he opened it.

Arch fell to the ground without noticing that it was a corpse. It was a twi-lek dancer with a blaster wound in her head. Genie must have shot her for a similiar reason as the man outside the cantina. Dark red blood oozed out of her wound and soon dripped all over him. Arch quickly threw the Twi-lek's corpse off of him and dusted himself off.

Arch walked back into the Cantina to see Genie sitting on the counter laughing at him. "I thought you would take forever to kill some fat slug. So I decided to play a little prank on you."

"Yeah really funny Genie. Now I have some dead *****'s blood on me." Arch responded sighing.

"Alright already. Lets get out of here. I took care of the cowering patrons." Genie said with her gun out.

"You killed an entire cantina full of cowering people? Why?"

"Well I went to the security room and found a dead Gran and the doors were locked. So I needed some way that I could shut these people up."

"Your a freaken psycho Genie. Lets just get out of here before you kill more innocent people." Arch said angrily. Genie shrugged and put a smiling expression on her face.

They both ran out of the Cantina while Genie detonated the explosive. They heard a small explosion, then a very large explosion in the depths of the building. Soon a very large inferning fireball blew out of the Cantina.

"Alright lets get back." Genie said cheerfully to Arch. Arch shrugged and walked back, still trying to get some of the Twi-lek's blood off of him.


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Awesome chapter, RD. Keep it up, and you'll do very fine.
As people mentioned before, you're very good at writing stories.

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Whew! I just read this whole thing in one sitting. (yes I'm an avid reader with a lot of time on his hands.) I like the whole CBLE idea, it reminds my of CCI from my fic.

Anyway, Arch's character developement has been good. He is sort of a cold jedi isn't he? Not a sith, but still quite ruthless at times. Then again, being forced on Urban Death would make me a bit testy too. This concept is very original. When I found out Urban Death was a game show I was like "huh?" But after reading more, I found that I like the idea very much. Genie has a few screws loose upstairs to be sure, but she is amusing in a strange sort of way.

Out of curiousity - do you post as you write? If so it is amazing how many chapters you can crank out. My only advice would be to add more description of the surroundings, though I understand, that dialogue and action are the focus of the story. Also, what were the party members reactions to Arch being a jedi? We did not see a whole lot of that. Most are criminal who would hate or fear the jedi, yet in this situation, Arch is on there side. Quite an unusual alliance. A bit about their feelings on Arch's jedi staus would be nice.

Overall, this is very good, and know that I intend all suggestions to be constructive, and that I can honestly say I enjoyed reading every chapter of this fic. Keep up the good work here!

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I apologise for how long it took to write this chapter. I had a very long anger fase after writing this chapter and I accidentally forgot to save my work as it was deleted. So I took a break to cope. So here is the slightly rushed version of 65

Minus 65 and COUNTING...

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You'll take my life but I'll take yours too
You'll fire your musket but I'll run you through
So when you're waiting for the next attack
You'd better stand there's no turning back.


The Trooper - Iron Maiden
Genie and Arch made it back to the warehouse after finally blowing up the Cantina. Fatigue and rest were the only things on Arch's mind as of late. However he could at least recieve the help he wanted from Frotenesque

The office opened as Frotenesque gave him a very keen eye. It was strangely familiar of something else he felt.

"Ah Arch. Great job. You two Genie." He nodded towards Genie's presance.

"Yeah it was fine. So now will you help me?" Arch asked sitting down.

"Ah yes Arch. Anyway we have sent 4 of your tapes to remote locations and courier sent them to the Retuner Headquarters. Now they will take a while before they come back to Corellia." Arch nodded. It was a great plan.

"Alright. Thank you." He said to him.

"... and as a token of good faith I am giving you a presant." Frotenesque slid over a datapad. Arch took it and placed it into his coat pocket."

"That datapad contains launch codes to a used YT-1930. It is my personal gift to you for taking that Hutt out." Arch nodded to him. A good ship was a very good gesture.

"Thank you Frotenesque. I will make sure it is put to good use."

"Your very welcome Arch. My base of opperations is free for your use as of now. Feel free to stock up on anything you want. By the way your Rodian friend is outside waiting for you." Arch nodded and walked out of the office.

Vries had the usual talk with him. Just about how everyone was and how worried they were about him. Everything for once was alright.

~~~Meanwhile~~~

Seeker stood inside the interrigation room of the "Outcast". The Hutt Goovanonga sat there on his levitation pad. His skin cleved with dozens of wounds.

"For the last time. Where is Team Hornet." He snarled at the fat slug

"I DON'T KNOW! PLEASE STOP!" The Hutt screamed out in Huttease. This only made Seeker's helmet expression change to what appeared as a smirk. A large spear-like droid was cleving the Hutt's flesh apart

"Alright, alright. He is on Coronet, working for a chiissssss" A cleve went to his throat. Seeker jumped on the hutt's bloodied, sweaty body. Holding a pistol to his eye.

"What's the Chiss's name?" He asked him. The finger was already begining to pull

"Frotenesque" He responded in a scared way. Though fear was the last thing that went through his mind as he heard a loud "BLAM!"

Seeker had blown the Hutt's head apart. It now was hanging onto his body in two places. He blew on his pistol and gunslinged it into a holster. Then he flipped on his comlink.

"Slate. I know where Arch is. He is working for some Chiss crime lord..." He said into it, getting off the corpse.

"What? You knew?... Ah I see. He is leaving to his apartment now?... Good job Slate. Never would have thought of something like that." He said while tinkering with his torture devices.

"What do you mean you want me down there? You want me to film him dying? Well I recieved the weapon you sent me. Why can't I use a blaster?" He asked in a whining voice into the comlink.

"Alright alright. If you want to see him in pain so much i'll bring Painless. Seeker out." Seeker flipped off his comlink and left the interrigation room. Along the way he bumped into a Remnant officer.

"Clean that fat slug's corpse off the walls. I want to see my reflection in that room when I get back." The officer nodded and ran to a panel by the wall. Seeker walked over to his quarters. To get some rest, tommorow would be a big day

~~~the next day~~~

Arch awoke the next morning rather happy for himself. Much of the fatigue he had the previous day was gone and replaced with relaxation. He pondered continued sleep. But eventually decided it was enough.

He got up as he noticed 88 with a hydrospanner. Tuning his right arm apart and rebuilding it. Arch shrugged him off as he stepped over the now sleeping Reaver and walked out of the apartment. The good morning air of Coronet felt salty, but sweet at the same time to Arch's senses.

"Today is going to be a good day." He said to himself. The YT-1930 that Frotenesque gave them was now on a landing pad nearby. Arch could already see Drustale Arms working on it's outer hull. Arch noticed Duan's apartment and a cuious thought emerged. Seeing if Duan was awake.

Arch walked towards Duan's apartment and reached for the door switch. However something stopped him. It was shift in the force. As if something had instantly changed completely. He gulped as he opened the door, though nothing could have prepared him for what he saw

The entire apartment was ransacked. The window that provided the view to Coruscant was smashed in. However what made him gasp was the corpse on the bed. It was Duan, a vibrodagger sticking out of her torso.

Arch ran to Duan's corpse. But it was far to late. She was dead, she had been for several hours. There was a datapad by her body. Arch quickly looked over it's contents

"This is what happens to those who do not get the job done. We shall be waiting."

"Frotenesque"

~~~2 years before~~~

Arch meditated in his room on Yavin 4. The Jedi Praxium had been good to him for quite a while. Dar-Resh was still currently teaching him lightsaber stances and forms. Many of them were far to confusing for him to understand.

His lightsaber was levitating infront of him. Now levitating 1 meter above the ground. Instantly through the force he switched it on and then off. Though it was all subconciously. Then he heard a knock at the door.

Arch got up and walked to the door to see Dar-Resh standing there waiting. He let him in as he sat down.

"Listen Arch. Last night when you cut off Bradren's arm using Ataru scared all of us. He was just a learner and now is suffering from his pain in a pool of Bacta. I was just making sure you were here and were learning the error of your actions. Master Skywalker was quite upset about it." Arch shrugged as he grabbed hold of his lightsaber.

"I don't know what got hold of me. Suddenly I was dueling him using Shii-Cho. I remember losing to his stance and ability. But then I caught this smirk in his eye and suddenly shifted to a stance I never even understood. You never even taught me Ataru and there I was in a few seconds. My lightsaber still in my hand, Bradren's in his arm on the ground. I don't know, something came over me. I felt like I knew that form as if I had been practicing it for years." Arch said nervously to his master.

"Well don't worry about it. We all understand your apology and how it was only caused by a rush of emotion. You do remember Master Katarn's words don't you?" Arch nodded, recalling Kyle Katarn's words several days before

"Remember: abilities are not inherently good or evil, it's how you use them."

"Yeah. I remember." Arch said slowly.

"Well remember not to mention Potentium to any other jedi. Most jedi frown upon that theory. Anyway Luke has a mission he wants to discuss with you. It has something to do with a holonet show." Arch nodded and stood up. Holstering his lightsaber to his belt.

~~~The Presant~~~

"It was all insignifigant up to that point. I remember it so clearly. Duan's dead body, Frotenesque's sad taunt, the lightsaber in my hand, the blood rushing to my head. Suddenly I came to know emotion unlike all other. I came to know wrath, revenge, fury and blind ambition. I hungered for blood of the bastards that killed Duan. Duan was just a girl who I thought was in the wrong place at the wrong time. I knew my enemies face. It was burned into the back of my thoughts. My mind was empty save for one thought. I... would... KILL"


Arch stormed out of Duan's apartment building. The lightsaber already in his hand, the dark expression on his green eyes as he rushed over to Vries's room. He shouted into the door.

"VRIES! OPEN THIS DOOR RIGHT NOW! I AM GOING HUNTING AND I NEED YOUR HELP!" He yelled at the top of his lungs. Soon he woke Yossk and Drossk who all followed Arch to the spare parts shop run by Lumiere.

Arch rushed into the spare parts shop only to be greeted by the Bith. "Greetings Arch. Need any parts?" He asked him in a cheerfull way.

"No. I need a weapon and this place has some. I need something that I can kill a large group of people with." The Bith instantly took a large rifle from the bottom of his counter. Arch was surprised how fast it took.

"Here you go. This is an Imperial Heavy Repeater. Very easy to use and heavy splash damage." Arch nodded and grabbed the rifle. Then he brought 3 more weapons.

"Distrupter Rifle" He tossed two of them to both Yossk and Vries. "Rail Detonator" He tossed a large gun towards Drossk. The Trandoshan smirked at the mass appeal of the weapon.

"Now have fun out there." He nodded towards Arch who smirked at him.

Arch walked out of the parts store and turned towards the three of them.

"Vries, Yossk. You guys take up point around the warehouse. Drossk, your on crowd control with me. But Frotenesque is MINE!" He shouted the last word. "I want to cut out his little heart and feed it back to him. I want to make him suffer to his last breath." They all nodded and walked with Arch in the direction to the warehouse

~~Meanwhile~~~

Seeker looked out the window of his small fighter ship as he smirked in the direction of the warehouse. It was shakedown time


"There's gotta be a better way to make a living"
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It is a set-up.

Nice job, althought there were some spelling errors. Probably because you were rushed. Nothing serious though, so keep up the fantastic work!

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Arch is transforuming into a killing machine due to his friends' deaths. Duan's death was unexpected. I like this badass jedi idea, and wish that I had come earlier to this fic. Keep up your good work, but don't rush yourself. You have a devoted fanbase here, we will wait.

Yes, a few spelling errors but, whatever, we all knew what you meant.


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Keep up your good work, but don't rush yourself. You have a devoted fanbase here, we will wait.
Couldn't have been said better.

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Minus 64 and COUNTING...

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I'm like a lazer, six string razor
I've got a mouth like an alligator
I want it louder, more power
I'm gonna rock it till it strikes the hour


(Bang your head) Metal Health - Quiet Riot
Arch slowly walked towards the warehouse. Noticing a large amount of alien mercenaries in a large group nearby. The Imperial Heavy Repeater was in his hand as he walked towards them.

"Frotenesque was hoping you'd run. But it turns out your stupid enough to take on all of us. Oh well this will be fun." A trandoshan hissed at him. Arch smirked at the alien group around him as he cocked his weapon.

As if he had done it before Arch summoned the force to his side. Instantly it was as if time slowed down and his own movements increased. He ducked to the side of their blaster fire as he launched a gravity bomb from the repeater. It landed in the middle of the crowd, making their bodies fly in the air. The rest proceded to fire upon Arch. But they were instantly disintigrated by Vries and Yossk.

"Alright." He motioned to Drossk as he walked into the warehouse. But he wasn't expecting what he saw inside.

The warehouse was packed compared to before. There were ammunition boxes almost everywhere, heavy weaponry and turrets implaneted even in the walls. Almost everyone there was polishing some sort of weapon until Arch burst through the door. His own pupils dilated as he saw them all. His hand moving towards his repeater as he dived to the side.

Arch's senses were almost overwhelmed from the sound and smells he felt. The wall infront of him was almost obliterated from blaster fire. Even the ammunition crate was almost destroyed.

"Lets go mother****ers. I am going to make you suffer." Arch looked towards a nearby Trandoshan who was sitting ontop of a crate of grenades. He quickly riddled him with Magnetic bolts and dived for the crate before a rocket was blown up behind him.

He quickly grabbed hold of a Thermal Detonator and threw it at a nearby group of Mercenaries. The Mercenaries soon flew into the air similar to the ones outside. He smirked as he saw the ease of heavy weaponry. But however he gasped at the clicking sound he heard as he tried to fire his weapon. It was out of ammunition.

"Damn." He whispered. He dropped the gun and searched his own. The only other weapons he had were his pistol and his lightsaber. The weapons he believed he would die with.

Arch ignited his lightsaber and motioned to Drossk who fired a rocket at a nearby mercenary. Incinarating him instantly. Arch laughed as he jumped up from the thermal detonator crate and threw his lightsaber at another mercanary wielding a blaster carbine. He didn't notice one mercenary run up and shoot him from behind.

Pain and pestelance overloaded his senses. Arch fell to the ground and landed on his elbows. The pain felt to much for him as he coughed up a small dribble of blood. The wound was far to great for him to understand, much less comprehend. The face of the mercenary was burned into his mind now. The anger level rose as Arch jumped up and landed right next to the mercenary.

Arch sawed off both of his arms and grabbed the mercenary's torso infront of him. The army of mercenaries began firing at him again. This time he had a shield. Arch ran at another group. This time beheading all of them. Arch's anger level rose as he killed more of them.

~~~10 minutes later~~~

Arch felt his breathing was restrained as he stood in the middle of the warehouse. Drossk was walking towards him, carefully stepping over the mass amount of mercenary corpses. He noticed Drossk behind him and motioned to Fortenesque's office.

"Alright. I want to see that mother****er's face as I run him through." Arch said smirking as he walked.

However just before he opened the door he caught the sight of a blue haze. Arch only had a few seconds to ignite his lightsaber before a purple blade clashed with his own. He caught the sight of Genie, wielding a lightsaber.

"Genie? Your a jedi?" Arch gasped as he was in a saber lock.

"No. I stole this from a pathetic jedi. Now I am going to kill you for not finishing the job."

Arch broke the saber lock and commited a backward roll. "I'll make a sweater out of your feathers Genie for ever thinking you could match me." Arch snarled at her. She simply smirked and continued to slash at him.

Drossk backed up and called to Arch. "Yo Arch. Get out of the way, I am going to roast this *****." He said taking aim with his rail detonator. Arch had barely enough time to say no before he saw Genie look towards him. Arch chased after Genie but was to late for Drossk to hesitate towards a lightsaber coming at his head.

Arch witnessed Drossk's head roll towards him. The trandoshan was dead, dark cauterised blood oozed out of his mouth.

Arch looked towards Genie as she laughed. Each laugh seemed to echo inside of Arch's psyche. He glared at her as he entered a ready stance.

"You know, I thought about sparing you before. But now I am going to cut your heart out and watch you recoil in horror as I ooze the blood out of it."

"Bold words Arch. You should remember that I am still not dead. Right now I am going to kill you and watch as you eat your words." Arch roared as he charged towards Genie. Genie was completely unprepared for the massive saber attacks Arch launched towards her. Each strike was so fast and so powerful that Arch was already surprised at how he could preform so powerfully. Soon Genie tripped from the massive amount of pressure. Arch roared again as he launched his saber for her arm. Genie screamed in pain as her arm, still clutching her lightsaber rolled away.

Arch puffed and gasped as he stood over the now shivering Genie. He moved his lightsaber towards her.

"Just give me a reason Genie. That I shouldn't kill you." He said smirking as she looked at the blue light.

~~~Meanwhile~~~

Vries sighed as he sat down on a nearby rock. It was getting very boring just waiting for Arch to come out. He motioned to Yossk who appeared to be sleeping.

"Yossk. I am going to check things out. You stay here." Yossk gave a hand signal but didn't appear to awake. Vries shrugged as he walked down and entered the warehouse. Vries caught sight of Arch now threatening Genie with his lightsaber

"Hey Arch. What are you doing?" He asked running over. He stopped as he saw the dark circles now underneath Arch's eyes. The very snarling expression he had on his face.

"Arch are you okay?" He asked putting down his distruptor rifle.

"I'll tell you who's okay." He said taking out his blaster pistol and aiming it at Vries.

"What? Want to ask me how my day is doing? This ***** killed Drossk and now I am going to kill her." He snarled in Vries's presance. The lightsaber was still moving towards Genie.

"Arch put the gun down. It's over, lets just get Frotenesque and get the hell out of here. This ***** is in enough pain after you sawed off her arm." Arch's aim faltered as he finally sighed and flicked off his lightsaber.

"Alright." He aimed the gun at Genie. "Get the hell out of here." He said to her. Arch watched as Genie ran out of the warehouse.

Arch sighed as he finally walked towards Frotenesque's office. Watching the cowering man underneath his desk. At the sight of his blaster pistol Frotenesque bawled down and began crying. It was to much for Arch, which caused him to shoot Frotenesque between the eyes.

"There. Feel better now?" Vries asked him. Arch shook his head.

"No I feel worse. Lets just get the hell out of here." He said slowly to Vries. He shrugged and helped Arch out of the warehouse.

Yossk was there standing infront of the door. Arch noticed a peculiar expression on his face. His eyes gave a shifting glace, it appeared that he wasn't breathing or moving at all. Suddenly Yossk's corpse fell to the ground. A knife was dug into his back, the figure behind Yossk's corpse was Seeker.

"Seeker. I hope Slate is paying you enough to die for him." Arch said reaching for his lightsaber

"I must commend you on your efforts. I never believed someone could go into a warehouse full of mercenaries and kill them all. All in a days work for you Jedi." Seeker said with his blaster out. Seeker appeared to wear a very large backpack.

"Oh don't worry Seeker. I am just getting warmed up." Arch said igniting his lightsaber.

"Well then. I have looked forward to this for quite a while Arch. Slate has personally given me a weapon to use on you." Seeker reached for his backpack. Taking out what appeared to be a large rifle. The rifle was attatched to the backpack by a long hose.

Seeker cackled as a large gust of flame blew out of the rifle. His flamethrower was now fully ready. Arch motioned to Vries who ran to the side.

"Lets see how easy it is to pry you open Seeker."


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Ooooooooooohhhhhhh.

Wow. That was a gret chapter. Arch is really becoming cold, and I am glad that Vries talked him out of killing Genie.

But wow. Powerful chapter.

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I might put it on the record here that I didn't mention Revan in this chapter for a reason. Since I want to keep Revan's gender and name ambiguous in this fic.

Minus 63 and COUNTING...

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Do me a wrong, youre a bringer of evil
The devil is never a maker
The less that you give, youre a taker
So its on and on and on, its heaven and hell, oh well


Heaven and Hell - Black Sabbath
Arch had to roll to the side to avoid a major cloud of fire coming his way. He landed on top of a crate, smashing it completely as he landed.

"****" he swore out loud. He quickly got up and aimed his blaster pistol. However every single shot from the gun simply rebounded off of him. As if he was wearing some sort of mirror that bounced blaster fire off him. His armor was impenetrable.

Arch quickly backed up some and ran behind a nearby tree. Quickly reloading his shots and staring out toward Seeker. Seeker seemed to look like an unstoppable killing machine. His blaster fire couldn't hit him and he couldn't get close to him without getting roasted alive. It was a puzzle he would have to solve

"Come on Arch. You think your the first to think you can take me? I have been killing punks like you for 10 years. This flamethrower is just one of many weapons I use. Thankfully Slate has given it to me." Arch quickly thought to himself, he didn't have any options other then to keep backing up until he thought of something.

Suddenly Arch felt a burning sensation behind him. Seeker had doused the tree in flame, incinerating it instantly. Arch continued to think until he caught the sight of Seeker's backpack. The source of his fuel and power.

Arch quickly waited until he backed up against a wall. Seeker mockingly walked toward him, but still kept his distance.

"Poetic really. The water bound Kaminoan is killed by the flame. Do you have any last words?" Seeker asked as he tinkered with his flamethrower nozzle.

"Yes. Your going to get a taste right now how it feels to burn in hell." Arch held his hands around the wall and jumped directly from where he was until he was behind Seeker. Instantly as he landed he aimed and fired his blaster pistol directly at his backpack.

Seeker's pack exploded instantly. Arch didn't even have time to react as he saw a burst of flame carry him off the ground. He didn't lose consciousness until he hit a nearby tree.

~~~Meanwhile~~~

In the dreamworld Arch was a ghost, hovering outside his body. Arch vaguely recalled where he was. It was the same ship he was on before, except far different

Unlike the ship he dreamt of Revan on before, this one seemed far grander. There was much more light, all the panels lit up, Arch felt as if the ship was actually moving. It felt more alive and at peace then the death he felt before.

Arch looked around, it appeared that there were no crew members. He slowly walked back in the direction of the cockpit. Unlike before the security room didn't have a shadowy Darth Revan inside of it.

Arch slowly walked into the cockpit noticing two people at the controls. One appeared to be a brown haired female wearing jedi robes while the other appeared to be a brown haired male wearing an orange flight jacket.

"So Bastila. Our next stop is Korriban right?" The male asked the female in jedi robes.

"Yes Carth. Our second to last Star map is there." She said without looking up from the controls.

"I heard earlier that Mission found her brother on Tatooine. I wasn't there because I had already drank to much at the Cantina before hand." Carth stated as he flicked on several switches.

"Yes I was there. Mission found her brother Griff at the Tusken Raider camp and decided to help him out. It reminded me how I met my mother again at the Cantina. You were there." Bastila said while looking up at him.

"Yeah I remember. We got that Krayt Dragon Pearl." Suddenly the ship rocked around a few times.

"Ah now the coordinates finally re impute. Prepare for the jump to hyperspace Carth." Bastila said as she flicked on several more switches. Carth pressed his hand on the hyperdrive's activator.

As the ship jumped to hyperspace Arch felt the dream starting to fade. Suddenly however it shifted slightly. Another female walked into the cockpit, not noticing Arch at all. This one wasn't human and instead seemed to be a feline species. She was bald except for a strange hair style on the back of her head.

"Ah Juhani. We aren't getting to Korriban for another 2 hours." Carth said as she walked in.

"Yes I know. I just felt an odd disturbance in the force. It was probably nothing though." Bastila waved her off as Juhani walked away.

"You know I heard Canderous badmouthing Juhani. He said that he saw Gamorrean slaves that were more beautiful then her. Then he said how all she would talk about was about Taris. He kept saying we should have let that ex mandalorian buy her off us." Carth whispered to Bastila as soon as Juhani was out of earshot.

"Well that is just Canderous. He is as ignorant as most mandalorians. But let's keep it to ourselves and not tell even our most gracious Capitan about it." Carth nodded as he continued to steer the ship through hyperspace.

Arch felt the dream start to fade and become unstable. Soon he saw a bright flash of light... then felt no more.

~~~Meanwhile~~~

Arch awoke to the rodian face of Vries. He looked around and noticed he was lying on top of the remains of a snapped tree. He must have collapsed the tree when he flew through the air.

Arch coughed heavily as he stood up. He looked toward Vries and then toward the apparent remains of Seeker several meters away. He shook his head free of the dream and began speaking.

"What happened?" He asked him as he pointed toward the charred pack.

"You blew up his fuel supply. Apparently causing a very small concentrated explosion. You were blown clear away from Seeker and hit this tree." He said pointing toward the snapped branches. Vries quickly lead him toward Seeker's corpse.

Seeker was apparently not as lucky as Arch was. He was attached to the pack and got the worst of the explosion. Much of his armor was destroyed, revealing robotic machinery mixed with organic parts. His helmet was completely destroyed revealing the head of a man in his forties. Blood slowly trickled out of his mouth.

"He's done." Arch said as he picked up his pistol on the ground near him. "lets go before CorSec comes and tries to arrest us." He said gunslinging the pistol into his coat.

Suddenly Arch felt a sharp stinging sensation on the back of his head. He turned around to see that Seeker had gotten up and elbowed him in the head. Seeker had bloodshot eyes with blood coming out of them.

"You mother****er. I'll kill you." He whispered in a psychotic voice. Arch laughed at his weakened state, but was surprised to see him alive.

"Alright old man. Lets go." He said crouching slightly. Seeker charged for Arch with his fists bared. Arch moved out of the way and waited for him to attack.

Seeker was particularly agile for an middle aged man. He continuously attacked Arch in the torso before going for an uppercut to his jaw. Arch stumbled several times before becoming angry.

"Your going to wish you died in the explosion." Arch taunted Seeker. Waiting for him to charge again. As soon as he did Arch grabbed onto him and went behind him. In a fury of anger his fingers moved outward and grabbed hold of his chest. Then as Seeker screamed in pain Arch quick as lightning rammed his fingers into his throat. Pulling it out.

Seeker fell to the ground dead as Arch dropped the bloody organ. His anger disappeared as he looked at the dark red blood on his hands.

"How did I do that?" Arch whispered to himself. He felt a pat on his shoulder, showing Vries motioning to him to go. Arch nodded and ran with Vries.

~~~2 hours later~~~

"Alright everyone ready?" Arch asked them all. They were now in Fortenesque's used ship that was given to him. Everything looked so sleek and new compared to the other ships they were in.

"Alright." Vries said as he sat in the cockpit. "Where are we going?" Vries asked as he slowly brought up several coordinates.

"We are going to Kamino. I feel like I have to go there." He caught another pat on his back as he saw Dar-Resh. The Kel Dor nodded toward the tall Kaminoan.

"Fine lets go to your home world. Maybe we will be free from Slate." He said quickly. Then he walked out of the cockpit and retreated to his own quarters.

Arch sat down in the co-pilot's seat and looked out toward Coronet. Duan was dead, Drossk was dead, Yossk was dead... Seeker was dead. He had lost so many people just in one day alone. Meleena was in a slump depression since they came back.

"So Arch. Now that we have like a four day head start. You mind telling me how you went into a warehouse, fought over a hundred mercs with only Drossk backing you up and fought some bird ***** and survived?" Vries asked as the ship lifted off.

"I don't know Vries. I don't even know myself." Arch said as he lifted his head up and went to sleep.


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Hmmm, wow. Arch is really changing, and doesn't know why or how. Good chapter!

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